The Red Dress
Viewing comments for Chapter 40 "The Red Dress chapter forty."The story of a teenage girl
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Comment from wordsfromsue
Alexis, I feel somewhat ill after this chapter. I can't even write the pet names for the characters. He's psychotic as well? I am numbed into silence. I must surmise that this is a brilliantly written chapter to have such a profound effect on me.
Speechless and numb. :-(
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
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Alexis, I feel somewhat ill after this chapter. I can't even write the pet names for the characters. He's psychotic as well? I am numbed into silence. I must surmise that this is a brilliantly written chapter to have such a profound effect on me.
Speechless and numb. :-(
Comment Written 19-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
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Not sure whether that's good news or not! If I knew any of your friends I could ask! Thank you. Alexis x
Comment from rwilliam
Lisa broke away from his arms and got shakily to her feet, holding on to the edge of the desk which moments before had been her sacrificial altar.--Great writing! Such a visual!!
Wow, I am never disappointed with your writing! Such a great chapter!! I love how you 'show' us the pictures as she looks at them. I can so crawl into this character! Such a great read!!
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2012
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Lisa broke away from his arms and got shakily to her feet, holding on to the edge of the desk which moments before had been her sacrificial altar.--Great writing! Such a visual!!
Wow, I am never disappointed with your writing! Such a great chapter!! I love how you 'show' us the pictures as she looks at them. I can so crawl into this character! Such a great read!!
Comment Written 16-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2012
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I'm so glad to get your review, I've missed you! Only three to go. I really hope you enjoy them Alexis x
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Yeah for some reason your chapters haven't shown up on my box until the 13 so I"m doing a lot of catch up. LOVING it by the way! WOO HOO!! :-D
Comment from axelbeariter
In her haste to escape, she had only picked a different jailer./The best and most poignant line you've ever written so far in this tale. So many of us men are bastards and you've chronicled that scene succinctly.----believing he had chosen to stay with Carla,he/Put a space before he----He had tried to have Alan killed after she left Chelmsford./What a great turn of events and no reader could have suspected it wasn't an accident. You only gave us one clue; Alan claiming his brakes failed. Since you didn't harp on it only a more sophisticated reader than me would have suspected hanky panky----This is another great chapter. FS won't allow me to give you 6 stars at this time. I'll make it up when I can, but this is a six-star write. Axel
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2012
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In her haste to escape, she had only picked a different jailer./The best and most poignant line you've ever written so far in this tale. So many of us men are bastards and you've chronicled that scene succinctly.----believing he had chosen to stay with Carla,he/Put a space before he----He had tried to have Alan killed after she left Chelmsford./What a great turn of events and no reader could have suspected it wasn't an accident. You only gave us one clue; Alan claiming his brakes failed. Since you didn't harp on it only a more sophisticated reader than me would have suspected hanky panky----This is another great chapter. FS won't allow me to give you 6 stars at this time. I'll make it up when I can, but this is a six-star write. Axel
Comment Written 11-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2012
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I think that's one of the reasons I've been fairly vague about certain aspects of Nick's character, because I've been worried that I may inadvertently give the game away.I'm so glad you picked up on the new jailer line. It meant a lot to me, which is why I included it. A six would be appreciated any time, but for now I'm more than happy with your praise. Thank you. Alexis x
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The FS system will not allow me to give you a six. Apparently the rule is one six per month to only one writer. Axel
Comment from Gideon300
Nice writing. You show the emotional distress of the character well. And all the background history is interesting also. Your description of the alchol abusive behavior seems to be very clear and real. Good writing.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2012
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Nice writing. You show the emotional distress of the character well. And all the background history is interesting also. Your description of the alchol abusive behavior seems to be very clear and real. Good writing.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2012
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Thank you so much for your review, I really appreciate it. Alexis x
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, alexis, you did a great job writing this chapter, i didn't have any idea you were going to take it in this direction. you managed to fool me and that is hard to do. i enjoyed reading it. now she just has to get hold of eve brookes and share the pictures, but she has to get away from nick first
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2012
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this is very well written, alexis, you did a great job writing this chapter, i didn't have any idea you were going to take it in this direction. you managed to fool me and that is hard to do. i enjoyed reading it. now she just has to get hold of eve brookes and share the pictures, but she has to get away from nick first
Comment Written 11-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2012
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I'm so glad that you're still enjoying the journey, and really appreciate your reviews. Thank you. Alexis x
Comment from LisaSilva
Wow, Alexis, this is a really epic chapter! I read once in a book that the need to control others comes from thinking that they are a literal part of you and should follow your commands. Like if you told your hand to pick up a cup and it wouldn't listen.
This is just what I would have thought of a guy like Nick, but I never imagined he was that deceptive. I sure didn't see that one coming. Another six in spirit, I just don't have them. Love, Lisa
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2012
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Wow, Alexis, this is a really epic chapter! I read once in a book that the need to control others comes from thinking that they are a literal part of you and should follow your commands. Like if you told your hand to pick up a cup and it wouldn't listen.
This is just what I would have thought of a guy like Nick, but I never imagined he was that deceptive. I sure didn't see that one coming. Another six in spirit, I just don't have them. Love, Lisa
Comment Written 10-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2012
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Thank you so much, Lisa. What you say makes a lot of sense, I've never thought of it in that way before. A virtual six is still great, the fact that you review so honestly, means more than any markings. Thank you. Alexis x
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Wow you sure can write! I'm having heart palpitations...maybe its the gin.....never mind its coffee...
Fabulous read and boy is it getting bloody exciting!
Brilliant as ever and filled with great action as the pieces all fit together....
I know there are more twists and turns ....but boy this was a absolute fabulous read.
Keep writing else I may pull out my hair waiting....:)
Maureen
wc xxo
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2012
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Wow you sure can write! I'm having heart palpitations...maybe its the gin.....never mind its coffee...
Fabulous read and boy is it getting bloody exciting!
Brilliant as ever and filled with great action as the pieces all fit together....
I know there are more twists and turns ....but boy this was a absolute fabulous read.
Keep writing else I may pull out my hair waiting....:)
Maureen
wc xxo
Comment Written 10-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2012
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Oh, I so love your reviews! Every one inspires me to be better because I would hate to let you down. Thank you my friend. Alexis xxx
Comment from Malerie
Well, well, what has Nick done. I kinda of felt like he was somehow involved, especially when Alan's brakes failed. This is not good; Lisa keeps getting involved in matter way above her head. I'm sure this is where Alan comes back into the picture; another good chapter, keep writing, I'll keep reading (I wonder if Lisa is carrying something with her now)
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2012
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Well, well, what has Nick done. I kinda of felt like he was somehow involved, especially when Alan's brakes failed. This is not good; Lisa keeps getting involved in matter way above her head. I'm sure this is where Alan comes back into the picture; another good chapter, keep writing, I'll keep reading (I wonder if Lisa is carrying something with her now)
Comment Written 10-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2012
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The next chapter reveals all (well not quite, or the next eight chapters would be a bit disappointing)I love that your still reading. Thank you. Alexis x
Comment from MumEsGirl
Nice one finally you have given Lisa some backbone. Glad to see her looking for help.
I see her heading back to Richard now to sort this mess out. Our Nick is turning into a really slime ball. Murder no less. The plot thickens
kate
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2012
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Nice one finally you have given Lisa some backbone. Glad to see her looking for help.
I see her heading back to Richard now to sort this mess out. Our Nick is turning into a really slime ball. Murder no less. The plot thickens
kate
Comment Written 10-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2012
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Yes, it is about to get more complicated! Lets face it, Nick has raped her, she thinks Alan has screwed her, and gorgeous young lawyer is waiting in the wings. I don't know if lucky is the right word! Alexis x
Comment from CRYSTAL24K
One word: RIVETING! This chapter had me on the edge of my seat. I love how I could not predict what was going to happen and enjoyed the ride. The introduction of characters was finely woven into the fabric of the story naturally. Oftentimes new characters are obviously introduced with an unintentional bio in the story which interrupts the flow before continuing on. I have no criticism to offer. I loved reading the story and look forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2012
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One word: RIVETING! This chapter had me on the edge of my seat. I love how I could not predict what was going to happen and enjoyed the ride. The introduction of characters was finely woven into the fabric of the story naturally. Oftentimes new characters are obviously introduced with an unintentional bio in the story which interrupts the flow before continuing on. I have no criticism to offer. I loved reading the story and look forward to reading more.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2012
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I am so pleased you enjoyed it. Your review is so encouraging, and the word riveting such a huge compliment, I'm over the moon. Thank you so much. Alexis x