The Red Dress
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "The Red Dress chapter twenty one"The story of a teenage girl
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Comment from wordsfromsue
A lovely chapter! Ah, to be young and dance the night away. You're doing a super job with the visuals and details.
I'm really enjoying the story development.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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A lovely chapter! Ah, to be young and dance the night away. You're doing a super job with the visuals and details.
I'm really enjoying the story development.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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Yes, this was one of my favourites. When I was writing it, it was almost as though I was there. Thank you! Alexis x
Comment from Gooloom
So would be lover Richard is a friend now. Lisa is lucky. Its a great feeling having men lusting for her, and her lover feeling so J----. Plot withing plots and you my dear are now an expert at story telling. Write it in script form and send it to a well known director. He might just make a film out of it. I can give you the name of a famous production house in India. He will lap up your story. What say you ? Gooloom
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2012
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So would be lover Richard is a friend now. Lisa is lucky. Its a great feeling having men lusting for her, and her lover feeling so J----. Plot withing plots and you my dear are now an expert at story telling. Write it in script form and send it to a well known director. He might just make a film out of it. I can give you the name of a famous production house in India. He will lap up your story. What say you ? Gooloom
Comment Written 29-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2012
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Getting it turned into a film is my main ambition, and I'm already talking to a producer in California, and a script writer here in Scotland to that end. Big prayers being said every night! Alexis x
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Lovely to read and sink my teeth into. Wow!!:)
You've penned this well capturing not only the emotions but I also think the deeper emotion of uncertain jealousy. Which can rake havoc with any new relationship.
I enjoyed the chapter. Full points for the two love birds...keeping this up....Carla will find out long before she returns...
These two are like rabbits....how come no one around them seems to notice but Richard?? Hot moments in a guest room...:O
Thanks for sharing, as always a hot little chapter..
Maureen
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"it. The frustration of having to watch her talk and dance with other people, including Vikki's cousin for the (rearlier) part of the evening, had driven him crazy."
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"irritated to see that she was with Richard again. Unbeknown to Alan, he was the only guy at the party who Lisa felt safe with, because (very) other guy she'd ..."
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reply by the author on 30-Jan-2012
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Lovely to read and sink my teeth into. Wow!!:)
You've penned this well capturing not only the emotions but I also think the deeper emotion of uncertain jealousy. Which can rake havoc with any new relationship.
I enjoyed the chapter. Full points for the two love birds...keeping this up....Carla will find out long before she returns...
These two are like rabbits....how come no one around them seems to notice but Richard?? Hot moments in a guest room...:O
Thanks for sharing, as always a hot little chapter..
Maureen
Edit Check:
"it. The frustration of having to watch her talk and dance with other people, including Vikki's cousin for the (rearlier) part of the evening, had driven him crazy."
// earlier
"irritated to see that she was with Richard again. Unbeknown to Alan, he was the only guy at the party who Lisa felt safe with, because (very) other guy she'd ..."
// every
Comment Written 29-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2012
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Well spotted WC (Ithink all other reviewers were still in the bedroom upstairs by the time they read those two bits because nobody else picked up on them! You mustn't miss tonight's episode. You'll love it!
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Hey I'm getting tired of these bloody cold showers.....:(
Aha, see I am da best wc....spotted two wee spags :) an now a glass of wine ...it will warm me up after these bloody cold showers....:))
Love
wc
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Can't wait for your reaction to the next one! I'm in a hotel room in Wakefield tonight, so should get some peace to edit. Unless I go down to the bar for a glass of wine..... Nah, editing the next chapter is more important, although there was this very nice guy at breakfast who was acting very friendly.... BC xxx
Comment from rwilliam
Unbeknown to Alan, he was the only guy at the party who Lisa felt safe with, every other guy who'd danced with her, having tried it on.--This doesn't make sense to me but it may be the language thing. It's the last part... having tried it on. ? Sorry, lol.
YAY!!!!!! I LOVE the way the story is going! I am soo pulling for these two, which makes me nervous because usually they don't work out. ( MAKE It WORK OUT! ) Lol
Great writing, my friend!!
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2012
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Unbeknown to Alan, he was the only guy at the party who Lisa felt safe with, every other guy who'd danced with her, having tried it on.--This doesn't make sense to me but it may be the language thing. It's the last part... having tried it on. ? Sorry, lol.
YAY!!!!!! I LOVE the way the story is going! I am soo pulling for these two, which makes me nervous because usually they don't work out. ( MAKE It WORK OUT! ) Lol
Great writing, my friend!!
Comment Written 29-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2012
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I'll see what I can do, but I'm not making any promises! Alexis x
Comment from Misrael
This is another general fiction that seems more like a romance to me.But is was still very good. Good job good work and good read.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2012
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This is another general fiction that seems more like a romance to me.But is was still very good. Good job good work and good read.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2012
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Yes, this part is certainly in the romance band. Thank you so much for your review. Alexis x
Comment from LisaSilva
Well, you were right, Richard is a likable person. If Alan and Lisa are to be glued by true commitment, they should disclose all that they know. Lisa should tell Alan that Richard knows and won't tell or something, I would think. Not telling you what to write, of course, I'm just a frustrated advice columnist;) Very interesting writing, once again!
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2012
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Well, you were right, Richard is a likable person. If Alan and Lisa are to be glued by true commitment, they should disclose all that they know. Lisa should tell Alan that Richard knows and won't tell or something, I would think. Not telling you what to write, of course, I'm just a frustrated advice columnist;) Very interesting writing, once again!
Comment Written 28-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2012
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Yes, I thought you would like him. Mind you, when you look that good, I suppose the idea of befriending a girl who's not interested in you, could be interesting. My thanks again for your insightful input. Alexis x
Comment from Malerie
Don't know where this is going. It appears that Alan needs lots of reassuring about his relationship with Lisa. Lisa may be in over her head; I don't think that she is mature enough to be in a serious relationship. Alan, on the other hand, is too eager to leave his long time girlfriend but I'm guessing that she is probably ready to end the relationship as well; thanks for another good chapter, as always, keep writing, I'll keep reading.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2012
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Don't know where this is going. It appears that Alan needs lots of reassuring about his relationship with Lisa. Lisa may be in over her head; I don't think that she is mature enough to be in a serious relationship. Alan, on the other hand, is too eager to leave his long time girlfriend but I'm guessing that she is probably ready to end the relationship as well; thanks for another good chapter, as always, keep writing, I'll keep reading.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2012
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You are spot on with your observations. Thank you so much for your review. Alexis x
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, alexis, i am not caught up with the end. i liked reading this chapter where richard was smart enough to realize the love between alan and lisa and alan still felt jealousy over him.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2012
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this is very well written, alexis, i am not caught up with the end. i liked reading this chapter where richard was smart enough to realize the love between alan and lisa and alan still felt jealousy over him.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2012
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Thank you so much for your lovely review. Take care Alexis x
Comment from AlexAX
Great chapter again, I'm sure that will continue right to the end though :) The party was a success and who would of known that Richard would keep their secret, even though he seems to think she should of liked him more if she didn't have another interest in mind lol Looking forward to when he tells Carla, wondering how that goes. I saw this .. Unbeknown to Lisa(,) Alan. Alex :)
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2012
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Great chapter again, I'm sure that will continue right to the end though :) The party was a success and who would of known that Richard would keep their secret, even though he seems to think she should of liked him more if she didn't have another interest in mind lol Looking forward to when he tells Carla, wondering how that goes. I saw this .. Unbeknown to Lisa(,) Alan. Alex :)
Comment Written 28-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2012
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Got it! Thank you so much. I need all the eyes I can get without my trusted glasses! Don't write Richard off quite yet... Alexis x
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You're welcome :) ooooh sounds intriguing :) Alex.
Comment from Cybt
I am glad I stopped to review this. I just read this one chapter and though I haven't read the previous ones yet, this caught my curiosity and held my attention. I can't wait to read the previous chapters. Good work!
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2012
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I am glad I stopped to review this. I just read this one chapter and though I haven't read the previous ones yet, this caught my curiosity and held my attention. I can't wait to read the previous chapters. Good work!
Comment Written 28-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2012
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Thank you so much! Glad to say you've joined just as it's all 'hotting up' after chapter fifteen. Only another twenty five or so to go! Alexis x