Comment from Bellringer

Excellent

Keimosobie, frightening observations of society but well written. As you say, mankind can be his own worst enemy. Yet there is no place to run on this small planet unless one becomes a hermit. Reversal of such a state of affairs begins with the individual. Your last line says, "look what we do to people." As individuals we can decide to be caring in our own way. Thought provoking message. Blessings, Hector

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2012

Thank you

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

it is an inate part of us to flee from unpleasant situations. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read.

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2012

Thank you I do try

reply by c_lucas on 23-Jan-2012

You're welcome, keimo. Charlie

Comment from Anisa-

Good

I thought this was a good idea for a poem, and I enjoyed reading it. It just doesn't seem complete to me, like maybe it ended to soon? The picture you chose to go with it is really neat.

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2012

I tried expanding I am only a fourteen and don't have alot of expersions

reply by Anisa- on 23-Jan-2012

Oh, you're quite young to have three children and be married already! ;)
It's a good job considering your age. Keep writing for sure.

reply by the author on 23-Jan-2012

I'm just the daughter stole my father's account he won't notice ~.<