Reflections For The New Day
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Comment from G.B. Smith
Jewell, you continue to impress the dickens out of me. This is wonderfully thought out and the message is one of reflection for us all
Bear
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2011
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Jewell, you continue to impress the dickens out of me. This is wonderfully thought out and the message is one of reflection for us all
Bear
Comment Written 13-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2011
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Glen, my dear. How funny you show up today in my reviews! Contact me. I have a q for you. JJ Thanks so much for stopping in!
Comment from Graceheart
Love the contrasting emotions displayed here, both are very moving to the heart...yet I feel you must isolate and let go of those emotions that haunt from the past, loved it!
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2011
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Love the contrasting emotions displayed here, both are very moving to the heart...yet I feel you must isolate and let go of those emotions that haunt from the past, loved it!
Comment Written 13-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2011
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Working on it. That's what this poem is about.
Comment from Judian James
This is pretty good Jewell and I thought I was "gettin' it" until the last line. It was like getting smacked-side-the-head and I found myself asking, 'was this about suicidal thoughts?' So, I went back and read it again ... Nope, I don't think that's what you're wanting to convey, so why the "I choose life"? "One blink they've disappeared
yet they linger as afterglow" nice line. A few thoughts:
perhaps, "Then" in front of "Stinging" so the break from the pleasant thoughts process isn't so abrupt and get rid of "though" in the next line: "Then stinging thoughts return like hungry ..." Just a thought. I like "I choose" it's "life" that I think should be changed out for "change" or "growth" ... You know? You know!
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2011
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This is pretty good Jewell and I thought I was "gettin' it" until the last line. It was like getting smacked-side-the-head and I found myself asking, 'was this about suicidal thoughts?' So, I went back and read it again ... Nope, I don't think that's what you're wanting to convey, so why the "I choose life"? "One blink they've disappeared
yet they linger as afterglow" nice line. A few thoughts:
perhaps, "Then" in front of "Stinging" so the break from the pleasant thoughts process isn't so abrupt and get rid of "though" in the next line: "Then stinging thoughts return like hungry ..." Just a thought. I like "I choose" it's "life" that I think should be changed out for "change" or "growth" ... You know? You know!
Comment Written 12-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2011
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I am conveying that negative thoughts don't bring life or light they bring darkness or death to what is alive in our being ...a little on a different perspective, I guess. but honestly, I debated that last line too so I will take your advise and change it ...I really do appreciate your honest critique. I always like the way you think. THANK YOU
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my pleasure. You do the same for me.
Comment from Diny
great choice!- I am at a different PC on break and can only be here for a momoent - I choose to read you!- be well and as always hugs and warm thoughts- Di
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2011
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great choice!- I am at a different PC on break and can only be here for a momoent - I choose to read you!- be well and as always hugs and warm thoughts- Di
Comment Written 11-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2011
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Aaaw! Thanks you!
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Jj,
This is a marvelous poem with excellent verbiage and a gentle flow. You are so right we can life in the past and let it dictate everything we do or we can chose to forge and live our life. Well done....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2011
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Hi Jj,
This is a marvelous poem with excellent verbiage and a gentle flow. You are so right we can life in the past and let it dictate everything we do or we can chose to forge and live our life. Well done....blessings, chey
Comment Written 10-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2011
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Thanks chey!
Comment from Jean Lutz
The spiritual battle will continue, but we know the armor to use to win. Both words and art I find inspiring. So good to have you back writing on FanStory again.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2011
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The spiritual battle will continue, but we know the armor to use to win. Both words and art I find inspiring. So good to have you back writing on FanStory again.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2011
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Ahhh yes, Jean! I see you and your muse are still hanging out! ;+)
Comment from pixiemillie
A wonderful write which gives us pause as well as a decision to make. . .ours and ours alone. 'whatsoever things are pure, whatsoever things are lovely. . .think on THESE things for what a man thinketh in his heart so is he'. True for a woman as well, Jewel.
Love the snippets,mimmicking, fluttering butterflies.
PS. Have you no art in FanArt? I've looked for some but couldn't find any.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2011
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A wonderful write which gives us pause as well as a decision to make. . .ours and ours alone. 'whatsoever things are pure, whatsoever things are lovely. . .think on THESE things for what a man thinketh in his heart so is he'. True for a woman as well, Jewel.
Love the snippets,mimmicking, fluttering butterflies.
PS. Have you no art in FanArt? I've looked for some but couldn't find any.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2011
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I used to have my art there and sure there is a dormant portfolio. I need to pay for the subscription again! I really want to get active again.
thanks for the insightful review!
Comment from Gungalo
Your thinking is wonderful and the resulting life a pearl. It does one good to pause and reflect ... all the good in the world. It's a wonderful write, my friend!!
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2011
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Your thinking is wonderful and the resulting life a pearl. It does one good to pause and reflect ... all the good in the world. It's a wonderful write, my friend!!
Comment Written 10-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2011
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Thanks, beautiful poet!
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Smiling!
Comment from c_lucas
It takes a little training, but one should focus on the positive and delete the negative. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2011
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It takes a little training, but one should focus on the positive and delete the negative. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2011
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thanks c
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ou're welcome.
Comment from Kingsland
Life was made for living and giving. To show compassion and having love in your heat for everyone. I really enjoyed reading this very positive piece of poetic artistry. It was just a joy to have written this response for... John
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2011
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Life was made for living and giving. To show compassion and having love in your heat for everyone. I really enjoyed reading this very positive piece of poetic artistry. It was just a joy to have written this response for... John
Comment Written 10-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2011
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John, it's always a pleasure to hear from you.
