Fishin' Buddies
a children's story28 total reviews
Comment from kad175
This is a lovely story but I'm not sure it is really appropriate for young children, i.e. cremation, the results of the stroke. Perhaps this could have been explained to Davey in a little gentler yet still remaining true to the facts. The dialogue rings true but leaves this reader wanting more description. Still a good story and the message is well received in the short length.
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reply by the author on 23-Mar-2013
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This is a lovely story but I'm not sure it is really appropriate for young children, i.e. cremation, the results of the stroke. Perhaps this could have been explained to Davey in a little gentler yet still remaining true to the facts. The dialogue rings true but leaves this reader wanting more description. Still a good story and the message is well received in the short length.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2013
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Thanks for the review.
Comment from ameen786
Hi Bev, what a lovely story my friend, I am going to read this to my own grandson, he just turned six. Was Michael and his grandpa the inspiration for the story? Regardless, a wonderful read, thank you my friend.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2011
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Hi Bev, what a lovely story my friend, I am going to read this to my own grandson, he just turned six. Was Michael and his grandpa the inspiration for the story? Regardless, a wonderful read, thank you my friend.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2011
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Hi, ameen. You words have my heart singing. So happy to hear that you liked my story which was inspired by the sad situation of my father's (Mike's grandfather) dementia. Writing this helped me to ease the pain of seeing my dad disappear a little each day. You have blessed me with kindness today, my friend. Thank you for your generosity! Warm regards, Bev
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I shall pray for your father, may God give you the strength and courage to face the challenge.
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I so appreciate your kindness! Blessings to you...Bev
Comment from Mara del Mar
It's a nice story, though sad, because our loved ones are no longer with us physically, we feel your presence by receiving the warm memories and love they gave us with his teaching. Wonderful work, congratulations and good luck.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2011
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It's a nice story, though sad, because our loved ones are no longer with us physically, we feel your presence by receiving the warm memories and love they gave us with his teaching. Wonderful work, congratulations and good luck.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2011
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Good morning Mara. Thank you so much for reading my story and offering such generous words of support. I really appreciate it! Warm regards, Bev
Comment from MyYiaYia
What a nice, sweet story that could be a young child's memory of a beloved grandfather. Although it has its sad moments, that is life, and you handled it very well. Deb :0)
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2011
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What a nice, sweet story that could be a young child's memory of a beloved grandfather. Although it has its sad moments, that is life, and you handled it very well. Deb :0)
Comment Written 15-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2011
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Hi, Deb. What a sweet and gracious review! I really appreciate you taking time out to read my essay. You've made my day! Kindest regards, Bev
Comment from quashdog
Heartwarming story. I liked the special bond between granchild and his grandpa. It read very realistic from a child's point of view, simply and matter of factly told.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Heartwarming story. I liked the special bond between granchild and his grandpa. It read very realistic from a child's point of view, simply and matter of factly told.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Hi, quashdog. Good to hear from you! Thanks for reading my story and for your generous review. I very much appreciate your time! Warm regards, Bev
Comment from ScarletClearwater
It's sometimes hard to get a short story to emote anything speacial to a reader. This story was sweet and serene even after the grandpa died. It was still a good feeling story which proved that loss, when leveled with love, are a beautiful thing. Great job and wonderful ending.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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It's sometimes hard to get a short story to emote anything speacial to a reader. This story was sweet and serene even after the grandpa died. It was still a good feeling story which proved that loss, when leveled with love, are a beautiful thing. Great job and wonderful ending.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Hi, ScarletC. Thank you so much for your heart-warming review! I really appreciate the kind words of support. Glad you liked the story about Grandpa and Davey. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading your short story. It was definitely from a child's perspective. I felt the heartache the little boy felt missing his grandpa.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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I enjoyed reading your short story. It was definitely from a child's perspective. I felt the heartache the little boy felt missing his grandpa.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Thanks so much for your generous and lovely review. I really appreciate it! Kind regards, Bev
Comment from Cumbrianlass
This is a wonderful story, and it brought a tear to my eye, because I spent many many happy hours, when I was a child, fishing with my father. It brought back so many memories. You captured the emotions perfectly. Thanks so much.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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This is a wonderful story, and it brought a tear to my eye, because I spent many many happy hours, when I was a child, fishing with my father. It brought back so many memories. You captured the emotions perfectly. Thanks so much.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Hi, Avril. I'm so happy that you could relate to my story and that it brought back happy memories for you. That's the highest compliment I've received yet. Much appreciate your generosity! Warm regards, Bev
Comment from Darla9
Very well written story and I love your choice of the artwork.
I remember him patting me on the back so hard, I almost dropped the fish back in the water!
Very funny!!!:)
Great job, I enjoyed the read.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Very well written story and I love your choice of the artwork.
I remember him patting me on the back so hard, I almost dropped the fish back in the water!
Very funny!!!:)
Great job, I enjoyed the read.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Hi, Darla9. I really appreciate your generous review. Thank you so much for stopping by! Warm regards, Bev
Comment from missy98writer
Bev,
your story titled Fishin' Buddies' is splendidly written. Your art work is lovely. Excellent narrative, great characterization, good dialogue and very descriptive writing. In a minimum amount of words for a maximum effect you established a setting, conflict, and a resolution to your story. I like Grandpa and Davey. I could see them fishing together at Crystal lake. I like he tells his granddad "I'm not ever getting married. I don't even like girls." I was sadden when he recalls his grandfather death. I guess he started liking girls after all because I guess the person whispering in his ear is his significant other. What a moving story. I wish you good luck in the writing prompt. You did an excellent job writing this moving piece. Have a blessed day.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Bev,
your story titled Fishin' Buddies' is splendidly written. Your art work is lovely. Excellent narrative, great characterization, good dialogue and very descriptive writing. In a minimum amount of words for a maximum effect you established a setting, conflict, and a resolution to your story. I like Grandpa and Davey. I could see them fishing together at Crystal lake. I like he tells his granddad "I'm not ever getting married. I don't even like girls." I was sadden when he recalls his grandfather death. I guess he started liking girls after all because I guess the person whispering in his ear is his significant other. What a moving story. I wish you good luck in the writing prompt. You did an excellent job writing this moving piece. Have a blessed day.
Melissa.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Dear Melissa, Thanks for your generous support for my writing today. My father is permanently in place in a nursing home so this was for him. He has dementia and won't ever read it. I hope on some deeper level, he'll be touched by all the positive and kind words everyone has been offering. I so appreciate your support and generosity, missy. Thank you very kindly! Bev