Naani (Wealth)
The measure of Wealth22 total reviews
Comment from Veekz
Brilliant, truthful and fabulous little read. I love both the message it portrays and the rhyme works great with it.
No changes needed AT ALL, this is just so wonderful as it is :)
All the best in the contest!
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2011
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Brilliant, truthful and fabulous little read. I love both the message it portrays and the rhyme works great with it.
No changes needed AT ALL, this is just so wonderful as it is :)
All the best in the contest!
Comment Written 02-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2011
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Thank you, Veekz, for those kind words and your good luck wishes. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment from penelope
That's so true, and many of us should remember this in these difficult economic times. I can see why you chose that artwork. It's like an explosion of light and happiness, a cosmic picture. I love your Naani. Penelope
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2011
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That's so true, and many of us should remember this in these difficult economic times. I can see why you chose that artwork. It's like an explosion of light and happiness, a cosmic picture. I love your Naani. Penelope
Comment Written 01-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2011
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Hi, Penelope. Thanks for your kind review, my friend, and warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment from LoveLifeKnight
why then i dont need to win the lottery or a contest, though that would be very very nice, particularly the contest thing. thank you very much for the reminder!
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2011
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why then i dont need to win the lottery or a contest, though that would be very very nice, particularly the contest thing. thank you very much for the reminder!
Comment Written 31-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2011
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Hi, LoveLifeKnight (love your pseudonym by the way!). No need for the lottery (but it may put a guilded edge on your wealth?! LOL). Thanks for your generous review. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment from L.lora
Yes, your words ring so true
even in their sparsity--they
say so very much. Your lines
are smooth and make for a wise
and enjoyable read. no nits or
spags, good luck with your
contest...Lora
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2011
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Yes, your words ring so true
even in their sparsity--they
say so very much. Your lines
are smooth and make for a wise
and enjoyable read. no nits or
spags, good luck with your
contest...Lora
Comment Written 30-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2011
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Hi again, Lora. Thank you for your kind review, and yes, wealth is so much more than money. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment from Fiona Hymn
We lose sight of what wealth is a lot. You have sent a powerful message in so few words, the depth of this write is breathtaking. You have creatively used the words and restrictions of the syllable count of the Naani leaving us with a coherent read. Wonderfully done.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2011
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We lose sight of what wealth is a lot. You have sent a powerful message in so few words, the depth of this write is breathtaking. You have creatively used the words and restrictions of the syllable count of the Naani leaving us with a coherent read. Wonderfully done.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2011
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Hi, Fiona, thank you friend for your lovely comments and generous rating. Warmest regards, Marijke
Comment from Rama Rao
A Short but excellent poem with a beautiful idea. it's said You are not poor if you have a good set of friends. You have expanded the idea to include family members.
A great job.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2011
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A Short but excellent poem with a beautiful idea. it's said You are not poor if you have a good set of friends. You have expanded the idea to include family members.
A great job.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2011
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Hi Ramarao, my family members are some of my best friends. (I always believe that friends are the family we choose. I am blessed that my family are also the friends I choose!). Thank you my friend, and warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment from adewpearl
Your poem is in 4 lines and has 25 syllables, so it is in good naani form - it is also about the human condition, appropriate to the form. I like that you've introduced rhyme into your poem, and alliteration, and I very much like the sentiment you express. Good luck in the contest, Marijke :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2011
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Your poem is in 4 lines and has 25 syllables, so it is in good naani form - it is also about the human condition, appropriate to the form. I like that you've introduced rhyme into your poem, and alliteration, and I very much like the sentiment you express. Good luck in the contest, Marijke :-) Brooke
Comment Written 30-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2011
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Thank you, Brooke, wasn't sure whether the rhyme should be there. But I thought it appropriate on this occasion, I'm pleased you like it. Thanks for your good luck wishes, and warmest regards, Marijke :o)
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I always rhyme mine - if it's an option, I take it. LOL
Comment from pencat9
Well said. Your statement is short, sweet, and to the point. A lot of other people write poems that have a lot of different meanings or the one meaning is very confusing. But I understand yours. I like that.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2011
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Well said. Your statement is short, sweet, and to the point. A lot of other people write poems that have a lot of different meanings or the one meaning is very confusing. But I understand yours. I like that.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2011
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Wow, thank you so much, pencat9, for those wonderful comments and your generous six star rating. Both are truly appreciated. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
I haven't seen much Naani poetry. Is there a reason for such a long last line? I would have been inclined to break it into 2 lines. At present I am reading Stephen Fry's book, 'The Ode Less Travelled'. I am loving it, but haven't got far yet.
Giddy
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2011
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I haven't seen much Naani poetry. Is there a reason for such a long last line? I would have been inclined to break it into 2 lines. At present I am reading Stephen Fry's book, 'The Ode Less Travelled'. I am loving it, but haven't got far yet.
Giddy
Comment Written 29-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2011
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Hi, Giddy, thanks for your review. The requirements of the Naani allows only four lines, between 20 and 25 syllables. Generally there are three shorter lines and one long line. Warmest regards, my friend, Marijke :o)
Comment from Aussie
I liked your banana poem. And wish you well in the Banana contest. 'Store not your treasures here on earth where rust and moth doth corrupt, rather store your treasures in heaven.' Well written my friend.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2011
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I liked your banana poem. And wish you well in the Banana contest. 'Store not your treasures here on earth where rust and moth doth corrupt, rather store your treasures in heaven.' Well written my friend.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2011
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Hi, Kay, I like that, girl! Banana Contest! I love your take on this, and would imagine that would be a terrific Naani:
Store not your treasures
here on earth
where rust and moth doth corrupt,
rather store your treasures in heaven
Sounds like a winner to me!
Thanks, friend, and hope you are having a lovely weekend.
Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
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Thank you Marijke - the quote is from the Bible. Love, Kay.