Mindy
Another family addition20 total reviews
Comment from Ann Smith
This is so cute. I like the fact that your daughter had to tell you about the new addition. Animals do have a way of working themselves into our hearts. The details and images were clear and I'm glad you have a talented beagle that can sing. ann
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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This is so cute. I like the fact that your daughter had to tell you about the new addition. Animals do have a way of working themselves into our hearts. The details and images were clear and I'm glad you have a talented beagle that can sing. ann
Comment Written 05-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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She sings for food. Thanks Ann for readig and commenting on this short piece. John
Comment from Nicnac
This is adorable!
I gasped when I read the part where Mark fell back into the recliner. Of course, I thought he was holding a newborn baby! LOL
I loved the surprise ending.
Your story made me smile.
A well written and entertaining read. :)
Nic
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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This is adorable!
I gasped when I read the part where Mark fell back into the recliner. Of course, I thought he was holding a newborn baby! LOL
I loved the surprise ending.
Your story made me smile.
A well written and entertaining read. :)
Nic
Comment Written 05-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Thank you Nicnac for reading and commenting on my story. Best of all, I'm glad that you enjoyed it. John
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You're welcome. It is a charming story. :)
Comment from skye
Great set-up, wonderful imagery, and filled with the joy of the new pet.
This pet lasted for years of joy and happiness.
Wonderful story.
Well done.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Great set-up, wonderful imagery, and filled with the joy of the new pet.
This pet lasted for years of joy and happiness.
Wonderful story.
Well done.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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skye, thank you for reading my story and the positive comments. I appreciate it. John
Comment from Thesis
LOl, the things you do for your kids. Of course your wife wins, it's all part of the master plan, hers.
I can feel for you. My wife and two daughters control everything. Even the dog is a girl, lol. - Thesis
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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LOl, the things you do for your kids. Of course your wife wins, it's all part of the master plan, hers.
I can feel for you. My wife and two daughters control everything. Even the dog is a girl, lol. - Thesis
Comment Written 04-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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Well, besides Mindy, I have another dog, a Brittany Spaniel who is also a female. Thanks for reading and reviewing this fun piece, I appreciate it.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good form, good flow, good story, i enjoyed reading this. i enjoyed reading this and like how the story progressed. i wish you the best of luck in the contest
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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this is very well written with good form, good flow, good story, i enjoyed reading this. i enjoyed reading this and like how the story progressed. i wish you the best of luck in the contest
Comment Written 04-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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Thank you for reading and for the positive comments.
Comment from IndianaIrish
I sure enjoyed this story and the way you allowed the reader to believe you and your wife had another daughter. Well-worded and very entertaining story about your family. I have a few suggestions but didn't down the rating because I know you'll fix them if you agree with them. Best of luck in the contest with this great little story.
Blasting Peter Frampton's(,) "Do You Feel Like (We)we Do"(,) while painting the foyer of our new home.(this is a sentence fragment...so how about while I painted?)
(we)We were going
Quickly(,) I wrapped her in a blanket and attempted to hand her off to my daughter(,) Cindy(,)
I said to Mr. Hartman, (delete that and start this as a quote that "Although)although she is adorable and everyone seems to like her, her one eye is a little crossed, she's tiny and your asking price of $275 is a little steep.(") He wouldn't budge, and neither would I. When I said, ("Come)come on kids(,) it's time to go,(") Cindy started whimpering... new paragraph for your daughter's quote)"I l-l-love her, we can't go home without her."
I see this word mostly combined as purebred, but I'm not sure)pure bred Beagle.
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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I sure enjoyed this story and the way you allowed the reader to believe you and your wife had another daughter. Well-worded and very entertaining story about your family. I have a few suggestions but didn't down the rating because I know you'll fix them if you agree with them. Best of luck in the contest with this great little story.
Blasting Peter Frampton's(,) "Do You Feel Like (We)we Do"(,) while painting the foyer of our new home.(this is a sentence fragment...so how about while I painted?)
(we)We were going
Quickly(,) I wrapped her in a blanket and attempted to hand her off to my daughter(,) Cindy(,)
I said to Mr. Hartman, (delete that and start this as a quote that "Although)although she is adorable and everyone seems to like her, her one eye is a little crossed, she's tiny and your asking price of $275 is a little steep.(") He wouldn't budge, and neither would I. When I said, ("Come)come on kids(,) it's time to go,(") Cindy started whimpering... new paragraph for your daughter's quote)"I l-l-love her, we can't go home without her."
I see this word mostly combined as purebred, but I'm not sure)pure bred Beagle.
Indy :>)
Comment Written 04-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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Shucks, I'd nevera guessed I STILL had all them thar mistakes, sheeez, will eye ever lern. Thank you so much for those corrections and suggestions, I've already made the changes and modified a couple. I am glad you enjoyed my brief story of how we ended up with our fat little Beagle, Mindy. Thanks so much for taking time to read/comment and your suggestions. It's very meaningful to me. Later...
Comment from redrider6612
How cute! You really had me going there--I never guessed it was a dog. The story flowed well with nary a nit it sight. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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How cute! You really had me going there--I never guessed it was a dog. The story flowed well with nary a nit it sight. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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Redrider... thank you for reading and reviewing. You typically are much harder on my work, so maybe I'm getting better. Thanks again.
Comment from adewpearl
It's a beagle! I was so confused at first, trying to figure out why your 12 year old daughter knew your wife was pregnant before you did. LOL
You do such a good job of misdirection until the reveal - the humor had me laughing out loud. This is so amusing and well told :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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It's a beagle! I was so confused at first, trying to figure out why your 12 year old daughter knew your wife was pregnant before you did. LOL
You do such a good job of misdirection until the reveal - the humor had me laughing out loud. This is so amusing and well told :-) Brooke
Comment Written 04-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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Thank you Brooke, I honestly appreciate your reading my work and commenting on it. I'm glad I had you confused, that was my comical intention.
Comment from Rain Chapman
I am snickering, well, okay, I'm laughing, but only because I have a 'Mindy' of my own! Isn't it funny what you will do for your kids against your better judgement and then be greatful you did it afterwards? Thanks for sharing this terrific memory. Best of luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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I am snickering, well, okay, I'm laughing, but only because I have a 'Mindy' of my own! Isn't it funny what you will do for your kids against your better judgement and then be greatful you did it afterwards? Thanks for sharing this terrific memory. Best of luck in the contest!
Comment Written 04-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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Thanks Rain for reading and commenting. Funny how so many of us have things in common.
Comment from RKagan
This sweet and tender story made my day. Awww I love the line the overweight beagle. My cat is so fat and spoiled that I understand and completely relate. great story.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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This sweet and tender story made my day. Awww I love the line the overweight beagle. My cat is so fat and spoiled that I understand and completely relate. great story.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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Thank you for stopping to read and comment on the story.