Jack and Chloe
finding a good life together27 total reviews
Comment from nancy_e_davis
This is really a cute story. At first it sounded like she was in a bar and then you did the switch. Kudos! That was great! You have a knack for stories I must say. Nancy
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2012
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This is really a cute story. At first it sounded like she was in a bar and then you did the switch. Kudos! That was great! You have a knack for stories I must say. Nancy
Comment Written 09-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2012
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Thank you, Nancy, for such a thoughtful review. Yep, when writing this, I set out to make the reader think exactly what you thought--that Chloe was in a bar. I'm glad it worked! Thank you again, my friend.
Connie
Comment from Writingfundimension
I am not allowed to give this six stars, but just know it absolutely deserves one, Connie. This is fantastic!! You have a real gift for bring the reader into your story, and it's not just a technique, it's more of a soulfulness that is a pure gift. You have to do more of this, Connie. I can see why it got the award. A totally heart-warming story, so very well told. Sigh ... I'm happy that Jack and Chloe ended up together. Love ya, Bev
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2012
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I am not allowed to give this six stars, but just know it absolutely deserves one, Connie. This is fantastic!! You have a real gift for bring the reader into your story, and it's not just a technique, it's more of a soulfulness that is a pure gift. You have to do more of this, Connie. I can see why it got the award. A totally heart-warming story, so very well told. Sigh ... I'm happy that Jack and Chloe ended up together. Love ya, Bev
Comment Written 08-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2012
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Awww . . . What a nice review, Bev. Thank you! I honestly wasn't expecting a review, but I'm glad you read it and liked it. And thank you for the virtual six stars as well. Seems so long ago that I wrote this, and I'd like to do more fiction writing if only I had the patience. I can't imagine ever attempting a novel as you are doing. Thank you again, my dear friend, for looking this up and for the time you spent reading and reviewing. Lots of hugs to you. Connie
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Oh, it was my pleasure, Connie. Xxx Bev
Comment from Anjoon
This is such a great story Connie. Engaging from the start and so cleverly written. You played so effortlessly with my imagination. I was unknowingly invited to create an entire scene in my head before suddenly having my assumptions challenged! Loved it. Congratulations on the win!
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2011
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This is such a great story Connie. Engaging from the start and so cleverly written. You played so effortlessly with my imagination. I was unknowingly invited to create an entire scene in my head before suddenly having my assumptions challenged! Loved it. Congratulations on the win!
Comment Written 08-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2011
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Thank you, Anjoon, for your wonderful review and lighting up that plus sign! I must admit I was pretty shocked when I won the FanStory contest with this little story. I love dogs, so this was a fun one to write. Thanks again, and my best to you on this sunny day (at least it's sunny where I am). Connie :>)
Comment from Sue Ann Burrell
Connie, this is a real keeper! Clever and very humorous. I like the twist, how it takes you from "Is this girl for real...can she really be this desperate and full of herself?" To "Oh, great, a Pom!" Jack goes from disgusting to endearing.
Great job!
Blessings!
Sue Ann
reply by the author on 12-May-2011
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Connie, this is a real keeper! Clever and very humorous. I like the twist, how it takes you from "Is this girl for real...can she really be this desperate and full of herself?" To "Oh, great, a Pom!" Jack goes from disgusting to endearing.
Great job!
Blessings!
Sue Ann
Comment Written 12-May-2011
reply by the author on 12-May-2011
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Thank you so much, Sue Ann, for your wonderful review. I had a good time writing this one and hoped to fool my readers. Thanks again. Connie
Comment from georgehandy
Hi Connie,
I read your fine story, very nice description which keptme in tune. Congratuliations of the win. Was the final 'Jack and I' used intentnally as a misplced whatever? Just wondering. George
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2011
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Hi Connie,
I read your fine story, very nice description which keptme in tune. Congratuliations of the win. Was the final 'Jack and I' used intentnally as a misplced whatever? Just wondering. George
Comment Written 19-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2011
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Thank you, George, for your review. I'm not sure what you're asking me about the final "Jack and I" being a "misplaced whatever." Sorry-wish I could answer your question. Thanks again for your positive review. Connie :>)
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Sorry if my note was cryptic. Toward the end you wrote "Jack and I" Would it be correct to have written Jack and me.
or am I missing something? Just hope to help.
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I believe "Jack and I" is correct. You could take the names and put them at the beginning of the sentence: "Jack and I were riding in the backseat . . " That's usually the little test I would tell my students to use when unsure about whether to use "I" or "me." I always welcome suggestions and constructive criticism, but in this case I think I might be right. Thanks again for your review, George. Connie
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Thank you for your reply. As I am rather new to the detailed tools of writing I know that this group will have much to offer me. Thank you for your gentle understanding and guidance here. I very much appreciate it Connie. best george This lesson with what you taught is very valuable. I always thought that TS Elliottā??s use of let us go then you and I . was a bit of a spoof on breaking the rule. Is it, or I guess, after what you wrote, he was using proper syntax? I thought it all along should have been you and me. And to think, I have memorized most of Proofrock in my 20s for the sounds.
Comment from Jetco
This is really wonderful a grand story with a surprise that a reader begins to suspect but nonetheless is taken by surprise. This story is superb and would have given you a 6 star rating if I had it to give. Thank you for sharing this. A beautiful story for the kiddies at bedtime.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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This is really wonderful a grand story with a surprise that a reader begins to suspect but nonetheless is taken by surprise. This story is superb and would have given you a 6 star rating if I had it to give. Thank you for sharing this. A beautiful story for the kiddies at bedtime.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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Thank you so much for your very positive review. Connie
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Connie:)
Somehow I missed this wonderful story when you posted it. I can certainly see why it is a contest winner.
This was an especially good time for me to read this story. I spent much of yesterday at the Houston humain society, while our new kittens were neutered. While I was there I saw a family walk out with a newly adopted dog. He was old and scraggy and walk with a limp. at first I wondered why anyone would choose that dog to adopt. then a young boy came running up to him and hugged him. "He looks just like old Ben the boy shouted. Look he likes me already."
The boy's father explained, "Our family dog was very old and just died. This dog looks and acts just like him. This dog looks old and scruffy, but he is quite young. His owner died and the poor dog ended up living on his own for about a month before someone brought him to the shelter. A little love and he'll be the perfect replacement."
I had a warm feeling as I watched the dog go out the door.
I'm glad your story won.
Roger
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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Hi Connie:)
Somehow I missed this wonderful story when you posted it. I can certainly see why it is a contest winner.
This was an especially good time for me to read this story. I spent much of yesterday at the Houston humain society, while our new kittens were neutered. While I was there I saw a family walk out with a newly adopted dog. He was old and scraggy and walk with a limp. at first I wondered why anyone would choose that dog to adopt. then a young boy came running up to him and hugged him. "He looks just like old Ben the boy shouted. Look he likes me already."
The boy's father explained, "Our family dog was very old and just died. This dog looks and acts just like him. This dog looks old and scruffy, but he is quite young. His owner died and the poor dog ended up living on his own for about a month before someone brought him to the shelter. A little love and he'll be the perfect replacement."
I had a warm feeling as I watched the dog go out the door.
I'm glad your story won.
Roger
Comment Written 05-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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Thank you, Roger, for calling my story a "wonderful" story. I am so happy you liked it. I am glad you saw a family take that scruffy dog. Being an animal lover, I hate to think of any animal being put to sleep because nobody wants it. Good for you that you were having your kittens neutered. Thank you again. Connie
Comment from MikiB
An exceptional writing on this story shown here. You really took me by surprise with the talking dogs! Lol. Very good story and at least they took Jack too! I had entered this contest but my story was nothing like yours. Congrats!
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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An exceptional writing on this story shown here. You really took me by surprise with the talking dogs! Lol. Very good story and at least they took Jack too! I had entered this contest but my story was nothing like yours. Congrats!
Comment Written 05-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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Thank you, MikiB, for your generous rating and review. I truly appreciate it. Connie :-)
Comment from MissMerri
I was so sure I'd already reviewed this story because I remember some of my comments and thoughts, but maybe it was a PM? Anyway, I love the story and think it was a most clever and original approach to the writing prompt. To create two doggie characters that have such loveable and relatable personalities couldn't have been easy, but you have done it wonderfully here. Their conversation is actually quite believable somehow, and the transformation in Chloe as she learns to love Jack is sweet. I'm so glad you won this contest, and I know it will mean many more people will discover what a wonderful writer you are, so that makes it extra special. Love, A.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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I was so sure I'd already reviewed this story because I remember some of my comments and thoughts, but maybe it was a PM? Anyway, I love the story and think it was a most clever and original approach to the writing prompt. To create two doggie characters that have such loveable and relatable personalities couldn't have been easy, but you have done it wonderfully here. Their conversation is actually quite believable somehow, and the transformation in Chloe as she learns to love Jack is sweet. I'm so glad you won this contest, and I know it will mean many more people will discover what a wonderful writer you are, so that makes it extra special. Love, A.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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Thank you, Adonna, for all your wonderful comments. I must admit that I'm riding a little high today. I never dreamed I'd even place in one the big FS contests, so this will make my day much brighter. I am so happy you were my first fan, and that I am your fan as well.. I guess that sounds a little corny, but its heartfelt nevertheless. Hope to see you very soon. Love, Connie
Comment from RebelRose
What a sweet and heartwarming story. Very imaginative and creative. I can clearly see how it won first place. Congratulations on your win. Well done.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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What a sweet and heartwarming story. Very imaginative and creative. I can clearly see how it won first place. Congratulations on your win. Well done.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I'm glad you liked it. Connie