The Minute Poem
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "Admission Free"minute poems
104 total reviews
Comment from Mightierthanthesword
Wow! This is just beautiful, the idea of an artwork is excellent and runs right through the novel with subtle hints. An original and sparkling viewpoint brings new life to snow, so often seen as an inconveniance.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2009
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Wow! This is just beautiful, the idea of an artwork is excellent and runs right through the novel with subtle hints. An original and sparkling viewpoint brings new life to snow, so often seen as an inconveniance.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2009
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Geez, I had a senior moment and had to click on the damn poem to remind myself which one this one is. LOL Thank you, Oli. Brooke :-)
Comment from Nicnac
Okay, now this limitation of sixers is becoming annoying. LOL
Brooke, you are a genius. You constantly amaze me! You spit out these works of art in the blink of an eye and they are spectacular! Please share you secret.! haha
I, as you already know, am trying to play catch-up just reviewing the works that I missed while I was away. I'm barely finding the time to do that - much less do any writing. ;) As you spoke of in another poem I reviewed earlier -- If I controlled the hands of time... I'd slow the clock to give me time to write!! ;)
As a lover of nature, I thoroughly enjoyed this minute poem. I love the snow (for a day or so - ha)and the way it gives a sparkling clean blanket of beauty. You have displayed that beauty so well in this poem.
A gust of air assaults packed flakes,
and carving makes <--These lines are LOVELY
~Nic
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2009
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Okay, now this limitation of sixers is becoming annoying. LOL
Brooke, you are a genius. You constantly amaze me! You spit out these works of art in the blink of an eye and they are spectacular! Please share you secret.! haha
I, as you already know, am trying to play catch-up just reviewing the works that I missed while I was away. I'm barely finding the time to do that - much less do any writing. ;) As you spoke of in another poem I reviewed earlier -- If I controlled the hands of time... I'd slow the clock to give me time to write!! ;)
As a lover of nature, I thoroughly enjoyed this minute poem. I love the snow (for a day or so - ha)and the way it gives a sparkling clean blanket of beauty. You have displayed that beauty so well in this poem.
A gust of air assaults packed flakes,
and carving makes <--These lines are LOVELY
~Nic
Comment Written 07-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2009
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Oh, if only I could spit out words in the blink of an eye - you should be here to watch me sweat bullets over each and every line and word within the line! I truly appreciate your taking the time to read my work that you missed while gone! :-) Brooke
Comment from miamia
Excellent all the way through and a delightful read. Thanks for this one. I especially like this image:
and carving makes --
a sculpture cast
from wind's cold blast.
But I would omit the dashes here.
- miamia
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2009
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Excellent all the way through and a delightful read. Thanks for this one. I especially like this image:
and carving makes --
a sculpture cast
from wind's cold blast.
But I would omit the dashes here.
- miamia
Comment Written 05-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2009
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Thank you, miamia, for your positive review :-) Brooke
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you are welcome, my pleasure. Hope you get a chance to read my 'At The Flower Market.' I think you will like it. - mia
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I did read it and review it! :-) I love it
Comment from Diane Marie
I like this poem very much and couldnt find one fault. The language used paints a vivid picture, I felt like I was there. Well done!
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2009
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I like this poem very much and couldnt find one fault. The language used paints a vivid picture, I felt like I was there. Well done!
Comment Written 05-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2009
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Thank you, Diane Marie, for your lovely comments! Brooke
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
Brooke, your observations (and the conversion of them to beautiful poetry) are beautiful as ever.
Tell me - do you actually THINK in verse? Poetry seems to come so naturally from you.
Nothing to criticise or moan about.
All the best.
Kat
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2009
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Brooke, your observations (and the conversion of them to beautiful poetry) are beautiful as ever.
Tell me - do you actually THINK in verse? Poetry seems to come so naturally from you.
Nothing to criticise or moan about.
All the best.
Kat
Comment Written 05-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2009
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Kat, I so wish it just spilled out of me naturally - I spend lots and lots of times writing and revising and then revising again each line - changing words, changing lines - it is so nice to hear it sounds like it just came out naturally!! :-D
Thanks so much, Brooke
Comment from Dave-Aranda-Richards
Picture in nice. You painted a cold time with words. Your daugher, I am sure and me too-are happy to be in Souther Cal where its tan-time.
Dave
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2009
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Picture in nice. You painted a cold time with words. Your daugher, I am sure and me too-are happy to be in Souther Cal where its tan-time.
Dave
Comment Written 05-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2009
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Oh, believe me, she knows she has the best part of the weather deal!! :-) Glad to see a new post from you, my friend. Brooke
Comment from rhymelord
Evocative, mental imagery, the usual soft flow of rhyme and metre. I have been away for a few days, but nothing has changed. You are still Numero Uno at this type of work.
Regards
Reg
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2009
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Evocative, mental imagery, the usual soft flow of rhyme and metre. I have been away for a few days, but nothing has changed. You are still Numero Uno at this type of work.
Regards
Reg
Comment Written 04-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2009
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Reg, what a sweetheart you continue to be. I'm about to turn in for the night, and now I can do so with a smile :-) Thank you ever so much!!!!! Brooke
Comment from tteach
a priceless gift --
admission free,
God's gallery.
When I see snow (rarely does this happen!), I am amazed by the beauty. I love to sit inside a semi-warm house and watch the flakes drift down. That's my love of snow. Simply as a viewer. Walking in it, being cold, nope. Not for me.
So, I do understand your poem. It's beautiful, but after awhile you yearn for warmer days.
well done
terry
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2009
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a priceless gift --
admission free,
God's gallery.
When I see snow (rarely does this happen!), I am amazed by the beauty. I love to sit inside a semi-warm house and watch the flakes drift down. That's my love of snow. Simply as a viewer. Walking in it, being cold, nope. Not for me.
So, I do understand your poem. It's beautiful, but after awhile you yearn for warmer days.
well done
terry
Comment Written 04-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2009
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I'm with you - I need a good, tight window between me and the snow! Thanks, Brooke :-)
Comment from QuietMtnSunrise
An enjoyable read for sure. Our snow melted away in one day and it was a dark cloud of rain that followed. Such is the life in the Emerald City. I really like the line, "Tree's shadows painted on the snow."
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2009
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An enjoyable read for sure. Our snow melted away in one day and it was a dark cloud of rain that followed. Such is the life in the Emerald City. I really like the line, "Tree's shadows painted on the snow."
Comment Written 04-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2009
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Thank you for your warm review, Brooke :-)
Comment from Stephen C Winter (Vs
Dear Brooke,
Snow can have its own charm, as you point out it can be annoying but this poem is very descriptive of what you can see from your window.
I love your following words
Each sparkling crystal in each drift,
a priceless gift --
admission free,
How true, I never take for grantted the beauty of nature and how what God has given us is here for the taking.
Steve
God's gallery.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2009
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Dear Brooke,
Snow can have its own charm, as you point out it can be annoying but this poem is very descriptive of what you can see from your window.
I love your following words
Each sparkling crystal in each drift,
a priceless gift --
admission free,
How true, I never take for grantted the beauty of nature and how what God has given us is here for the taking.
Steve
God's gallery.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2009
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Steve, thank you for your most thoughtful response - I always appreciate your visits. Brooke