The Cyber Space Garden
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Venus odyssey Garden of Tulips"The garden of peaceful serenity and beauty,
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Comment from jadapenn
This is a sizzling little poem with all it's bright colours. I love this space odyssey. It gives one a sense of escape and freedom.
Well written. jada
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2009
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This is a sizzling little poem with all it's bright colours. I love this space odyssey. It gives one a sense of escape and freedom.
Well written. jada
Comment Written 15-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2009
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Humble thanks, jadapenn
Comment from JMRoland
Hi Lyner,
Fantasy excursions to distant planets allow you all sorts of creative license, including the growing of flowers where life as we know it cannot exist.(I understand the temperature on Venus averages 900 degrees Fahrenheit, which would melt lead and just about everything else.) I love the title, the colors used, the lovely photo, and the fresh idea of space travel in a "Space Jitney" combined with beautiful gardens. Spellcheck: saffire-sapphire; piston-pistil. One other thing- sapphire generally refers to the color blue, but evidently, according to one dictionary I consulted, can be applied to red also, so you are okay with that.
JMR
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2009
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Hi Lyner,
Fantasy excursions to distant planets allow you all sorts of creative license, including the growing of flowers where life as we know it cannot exist.(I understand the temperature on Venus averages 900 degrees Fahrenheit, which would melt lead and just about everything else.) I love the title, the colors used, the lovely photo, and the fresh idea of space travel in a "Space Jitney" combined with beautiful gardens. Spellcheck: saffire-sapphire; piston-pistil. One other thing- sapphire generally refers to the color blue, but evidently, according to one dictionary I consulted, can be applied to red also, so you are okay with that.
JMR
Comment Written 14-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2009
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Thanks, JMRoland
I will make the corrections.
Comment from Diny
This is an interesting twist on the Haiku style- space odyssy- garden theme? well theres a new idea!- bravo for your creativity- Write on-DINY
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2009
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This is an interesting twist on the Haiku style- space odyssy- garden theme? well theres a new idea!- bravo for your creativity- Write on-DINY
Comment Written 14-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2009
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Humble thanks, Diny
Comment from K-Patrick
The haiku is a textbook example of one. However, I find that it might have worked better if you incorporated more of a fantasy feel into the haiku itself. For instance, instead of making it about top-bred tulips, call it something that could spark that it an alien occurance, though beautiful or eerily not. Personally, it felt that without the background it was a mundane flower haiku.
"Beauty is no quality in things themselves: it exists merely in the mind which contemplates them." -- David Hume (1757)
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2009
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The haiku is a textbook example of one. However, I find that it might have worked better if you incorporated more of a fantasy feel into the haiku itself. For instance, instead of making it about top-bred tulips, call it something that could spark that it an alien occurance, though beautiful or eerily not. Personally, it felt that without the background it was a mundane flower haiku.
"Beauty is no quality in things themselves: it exists merely in the mind which contemplates them." -- David Hume (1757)
Comment Written 14-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2009
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zhumble Thanks, K-Patrick
Comment from mandydakin
beautiful expression a lovely description of these flowers i love the way you enhance there beauty with words very nicely done bless you mandy
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2009
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beautiful expression a lovely description of these flowers i love the way you enhance there beauty with words very nicely done bless you mandy
Comment Written 14-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2009
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Humble Thanks, mandydakin