The Watcher
Who was watching who?22 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Carol
This is a well told and eerie story. This ghost seemed to be waiting for someone to free her to go on her way to heaven. Sarah was it. It seems Sarah died and her spirit is waiting to be freed.
This is a good entry for the club prompt.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a great day.
Joan
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Hi Carol
This is a well told and eerie story. This ghost seemed to be waiting for someone to free her to go on her way to heaven. Sarah was it. It seems Sarah died and her spirit is waiting to be freed.
This is a good entry for the club prompt.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a great day.
Joan
Comment Written 09-Apr-2025
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Carol, you do these ghostly stories so well as though you recognise that we're always living with the phantoms of the past. It's just that some see them and others don't. Your story is beautifully and poignantly told of a tragedy in which a little girl, Emily, died. And yet Sarah could see her as clearly as anything and a reciprocal connection was made. Thank you for sharing this hauntingly sweet story, Carol. As usual, it's flawlessly written and a very entertaining and imaginative read. Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2025
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Carol, you do these ghostly stories so well as though you recognise that we're always living with the phantoms of the past. It's just that some see them and others don't. Your story is beautifully and poignantly told of a tragedy in which a little girl, Emily, died. And yet Sarah could see her as clearly as anything and a reciprocal connection was made. Thank you for sharing this hauntingly sweet story, Carol. As usual, it's flawlessly written and a very entertaining and imaginative read. Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 05-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2025
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Hi, Debbie...I just read about your dinner with John, Sandra and Graham and I must admit I am jealous. I so wish I had been able to share it with all of you. Sounds like it was a blast. LOL
Thank you for the awesome comments and encouragement regarding my post. I don't usually do horror but this one seemed to come to me...must be because of Eleanor..I am getting used to ghosts. LOL
Take care of yourself and I hope you feel better soon. It was strange not to read one of your Bios on Sunday morning.
Smiles, Carol
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Me too. Wouldn't it be the best, hosted by John in reality. We wouldn't stop laughing long enough to sample his amazing cuisine! Thank you for your lovely thoughts:)
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a really good ghost story that perfectly explains the girl in the window. That she moved closer to Sarah each day was about as scary as anything could possibly be.
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This is a really good ghost story that perfectly explains the girl in the window. That she moved closer to Sarah each day was about as scary as anything could possibly be.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2025
Comment from Harry Craft
Well, thanks Carol. After reading this it scared the bejesus out of me lol! The girl was no longer in the window. She was standing outside on the overgrown lawn, staring directly at her. This was my favorite line in the whole story! Keep up the excellent work!
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Well, thanks Carol. After reading this it scared the bejesus out of me lol! The girl was no longer in the window. She was standing outside on the overgrown lawn, staring directly at her. This was my favorite line in the whole story! Keep up the excellent work!
Comment Written 19-Mar-2025
Comment from Kirsten Shonle
wow this was chilling. It really pulls the writer right in. To think the house was standing there as well for Sarah to see. So spooky. And the note with the birthday party. It must have been the little girl's birthday party. Just to meet a ghost is one thing but to get messages from the ghost is a whole other ball game.
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wow this was chilling. It really pulls the writer right in. To think the house was standing there as well for Sarah to see. So spooky. And the note with the birthday party. It must have been the little girl's birthday party. Just to meet a ghost is one thing but to get messages from the ghost is a whole other ball game.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2025
Comment from royowen
Hah hah, just love, she became the girl at the window, actuallY there have been quite a few responding to this piece of artwork, besides yours Carol, another most I imaginative post my friend, blessings Roy
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Hah hah, just love, she became the girl at the window, actuallY there have been quite a few responding to this piece of artwork, besides yours Carol, another most I imaginative post my friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 18-Mar-2025
Comment from Karen Cherry
This is suitably creepy. It is good. I read another one with the same picture also good. That picture has inspired a few people. It brings to mind the gothic stories I read when I was a teenager. Karen
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2025
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This is suitably creepy. It is good. I read another one with the same picture also good. That picture has inspired a few people. It brings to mind the gothic stories I read when I was a teenager. Karen
Comment Written 18-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2025
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It's from Marilyn's Horror Shop and she asked us to use the picture when we wrote...whether it be poem or prose. I don't do much horror but this was fun. Thanks so much.
Smiles, Carol
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I liked it. Karen
Comment from Carol Clark2
This is a good entry for the 'Watcher at the Window' prompt. There's just enough tension to make it a bit creepy but not overdone. I like that Sarah becomes the watcher at the end. Blessings. Carol
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This is a good entry for the 'Watcher at the Window' prompt. There's just enough tension to make it a bit creepy but not overdone. I like that Sarah becomes the watcher at the end. Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 17-Mar-2025
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Gee, this was a scary yet sweet story, and I almost gave in to follow that little girl in the house and keep her company. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
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Gee, this was a scary yet sweet story, and I almost gave in to follow that little girl in the house and keep her company. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2025
Comment from Ulla
Hi Carol, that is a great story and spooky to boot. I wonder what the message meant. I hope it was not a precursor for Sarah's demise. It's well written and sent a chill down my spine. Love, Ulla xx
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Hi Carol, that is a great story and spooky to boot. I wonder what the message meant. I hope it was not a precursor for Sarah's demise. It's well written and sent a chill down my spine. Love, Ulla xx
Comment Written 17-Mar-2025
