Veil of Secrets
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13 total reviews
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Wow this is quite a powder keg you have here for Donatelli and his team to unravel. Poor old Garth was hoping for a little romance with Rebecca, but that looks like it will be on the back burner. Great chapter Carol.
Cheers
Valda
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Wow this is quite a powder keg you have here for Donatelli and his team to unravel. Poor old Garth was hoping for a little romance with Rebecca, but that looks like it will be on the back burner. Great chapter Carol.
Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
Comment from Jacob1395
I did smile at what Garth said towards the end of the post, yes it doesn't seem as though the police never have a normal day in your books. Another exciting chapter, Carol. I really enjoyed reading it.
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I did smile at what Garth said towards the end of the post, yes it doesn't seem as though the police never have a normal day in your books. Another exciting chapter, Carol. I really enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Carol,
This book is messier than the last one. You sure do keep these detectives busy. No down time for the weary. They need to find Miriam, so they can get to the bottm f this mess.
Great job as us always my friend.
Cecilia
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Carol,
This book is messier than the last one. You sure do keep these detectives busy. No down time for the weary. They need to find Miriam, so they can get to the bottm f this mess.
Great job as us always my friend.
Cecilia
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
Comment from karenina
Oh, brother...Like these characters didn't have enough to contend with rival "gangs" springing Doyle now we have the hint of some evil dark forces sneaking in to give this book an even sharper edge! I'll pull out my Rosary Beads and keep them nearby. Is there going to be an exorcism?
Just asking for a friend. (grin)
Karenina
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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Oh, brother...Like these characters didn't have enough to contend with rival "gangs" springing Doyle now we have the hint of some evil dark forces sneaking in to give this book an even sharper edge! I'll pull out my Rosary Beads and keep them nearby. Is there going to be an exorcism?
Just asking for a friend. (grin)
Karenina
Comment Written 07-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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There is going to be some dark times and I'm not sure who will come on top of this one.... It's a Royal Rumble between the Ghosts, the mob, the Chinese, and our gang.... Eleanor better call in back-up.
Smiles, Carol
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Uh-oh. I slept with my light on for six months after I saw the Exorcist. Give me a warning if it is going to be THAT dark!
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I hope it isn't...because I'd have to light up my whole house if it was.... it's just not all happy times like I prefer to write.
Smiles, Carol
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Dark and shadowy is fine. Evil and Satanic will lose me!
Comment from Ric Myworld
I'm guessing that it's because I've followed these characters for so long is why they seem to me like personal friends. Like all of us, they have their good and not-so good points, which makes them normal. LOL.
Thanks for sharing.
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I'm guessing that it's because I've followed these characters for so long is why they seem to me like personal friends. Like all of us, they have their good and not-so good points, which makes them normal. LOL.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2025
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Sorry Kiddo, no sixes left. This is a definite 6, though. What a heck of a start to the new story, we are only on chapter 3 and already knee-deep in mystery. We have good and evil ghosts, and I think it has to be the evil ghost Cornelius who holding Miriam. A live person couldn't do that. I think we are in for a really bumpy ride with this story, and I can't wait to get my teeth into it!! It's nice to see all the good guys working together. Well done my friend. Love and hugs, Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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Sorry Kiddo, no sixes left. This is a definite 6, though. What a heck of a start to the new story, we are only on chapter 3 and already knee-deep in mystery. We have good and evil ghosts, and I think it has to be the evil ghost Cornelius who holding Miriam. A live person couldn't do that. I think we are in for a really bumpy ride with this story, and I can't wait to get my teeth into it!! It's nice to see all the good guys working together. Well done my friend. Love and hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment Written 07-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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Early bird gets the worm or so they say. I was just suffering some serious jet lag and Oh my poor house syndrome when I got home. And I just learned I might have to return in February... Carissa is being sent out of state for some mandatory meetings... So Nana and the three girls will be on board. I love the thought of being with them but I'm not sure I am made for jumping from house to house like a bullfrog. LOL
As for the story, this is going to be definitely a little darker than the other ones, but I didn't want it to be hum-drum either. So we will see how it goes. I had a dream that I wrote a story with Eleanor being transported by accident to a land of Knights, ogres, fairies...well, you get the gist. I can't imagine what her reaction would be to that!!! My mind must have been on overload.
Have a great day and take care. I'm off to have another cup of coffee and start scrubbing door frames and cabinets. Oh fun!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from LJbutterfly
From the very beginning, there is a lot going on, and all of the crime stoppers are already trying to solve the mysteries. I most enjoy the fact that there are several avenues to follow...find Miriam, rescue the boy, explore the tunnels, find Doyle and Rossi, protect Rebecca, and determine what mobs are involved and why. You have a big job ahead of you, and I can't waite to read it.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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From the very beginning, there is a lot going on, and all of the crime stoppers are already trying to solve the mysteries. I most enjoy the fact that there are several avenues to follow...find Miriam, rescue the boy, explore the tunnels, find Doyle and Rossi, protect Rebecca, and determine what mobs are involved and why. You have a big job ahead of you, and I can't waite to read it.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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Thanks, Lorraine...I don't know how I get myself embroiled in such messes. LOL I start out with one plot and it snowballs into a mountain and I don't even know the way out...yet! I hope I can get this right.....
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a really convoluted plot. I don't think I understand all of it, but it is sure to make for an interesting story. Does the boy have a name and is he somehow part of someone in the story's family? I have a question not related to this. You always have such interesting titles. Is there a problem with the title of the book I have online now? Almost no one is reading it, although I am keeping it on the first page?
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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This is a really convoluted plot. I don't think I understand all of it, but it is sure to make for an interesting story. Does the boy have a name and is he somehow part of someone in the story's family? I have a question not related to this. You always have such interesting titles. Is there a problem with the title of the book I have online now? Almost no one is reading it, although I am keeping it on the first page?
Comment Written 07-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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I don't have that many followers and unfortunately for whatever reasons the ones I have are busy tending to their own lives and are not on FanStory. (Beth, Rhonda, Esther, Helen, and so many others). Maybe I should have waited to write the next Eleanor story. But it's started now.
.. Ao I'll write and hope that you and a few others will steer me in the right direction if I fall off the cliff.... Thank you for always being there. It means so much to me, especially now.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Carol Clark2
Wow, this is a complex plot, and it just got more involved. I'm glad you're keeping all the details and characters straight. I appreciate the list you include, which helps immensely when my brain gets tired. I do hope Eleanor finds Miriam soon. Hugs. Carol
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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Wow, this is a complex plot, and it just got more involved. I'm glad you're keeping all the details and characters straight. I appreciate the list you include, which helps immensely when my brain gets tired. I do hope Eleanor finds Miriam soon. Hugs. Carol
Comment Written 06-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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Eleanor won't give up until she finds what's happened to Miriam, but the problem might arise on how to deal with it.... My brain gets tired too and I wonder if I might have started the Eleanor story to soon after the last. Every one is gone for so many reasons.... but I've started and I have you and a few others to enjoy the ride with me, so I thank you very much.
Smiles, Carol
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FS friends will return and will likely read your new book from the beginning.
Comment from Wendy G
An excellent chapter, and I agree with Garth - they have so much on their plates now, and it's all urgent, and all dark and dangerous. They'll have to think and act quickly. The enemies are unscrupulous.
Wendy
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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An excellent chapter, and I agree with Garth - they have so much on their plates now, and it's all urgent, and all dark and dangerous. They'll have to think and act quickly. The enemies are unscrupulous.
Wendy
Comment Written 06-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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The enemy are many and their spirits so dark that the team will have to be vigilant on which way the action is coming from. It will be easy to be fooled by situations. I hope I can keep the story flowing smoothly and not drop off the edge myself.
Smiles, Carol
