Famitree Flames
Hybrids endangered29 total reviews
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
The artwork is simply divine. Have you written any fantasy stories? I am sure I am not the only one who would like to know how this all came about. Like:
Charlotte opened her eyes slowly. She rises up and realizes that she was not in her bed. She had been sleeping on the ground. She quickly sees that she must still be asleep dreaming. She must be. She is encased in bark, of all things, and leaves are coming out of her fingers and toes. She can and does move but, not the way she used to. She kind of slowly glides. She hears all kinds of sounds she never heard before. Insects, birds, squirrels. And, she realizes someone or something is trying to talk to her. It is a big tree, with a man's face on it.
He was thanking me for becoming his wife. I can't even pinch myself. And, I can't seem to faint either.
Think about it. you could make some good stories. Karen
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2025
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The artwork is simply divine. Have you written any fantasy stories? I am sure I am not the only one who would like to know how this all came about. Like:
Charlotte opened her eyes slowly. She rises up and realizes that she was not in her bed. She had been sleeping on the ground. She quickly sees that she must still be asleep dreaming. She must be. She is encased in bark, of all things, and leaves are coming out of her fingers and toes. She can and does move but, not the way she used to. She kind of slowly glides. She hears all kinds of sounds she never heard before. Insects, birds, squirrels. And, she realizes someone or something is trying to talk to her. It is a big tree, with a man's face on it.
He was thanking me for becoming his wife. I can't even pinch myself. And, I can't seem to faint either.
Think about it. you could make some good stories. Karen
Comment Written 11-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2025
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Well, that's extremely good.You're a fantastic writer! I i'm talk about leaving it as poems in a story or i'm going to include the poetry in chapters and write the story.I don't know.I'll hit the mull on it for a while. you have my brain thinking for sure! Thank you again for your review.I'm certainly happy to have you here.Glad you like my pictures too. I hope you and yours are doing well.Thanks again!
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Your pictures are glorious. You could make money doing calendars, I'd buy one. I finally finished my Western. Karen
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Awesome i'm gonna take a peek!
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I will go post it now. :-)
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I did it! Now, I have to write a biography. I set goals for myself. I like the challenges. My favorites are comedy mysteries, but I like to stretch. Karen
Comment from kiwisteveh
Revision and altered rating.
Apologies, I see the rules do allow for altered rhyme scheme. Put you back to a five where this belongs.
Good luck!
It is interesting what you have done here, but sadly it doesn't conform to the required format for a Minute Poem where the rhyme scheme has to be AABB in each stanza. I'm guessing this will be disqualified from the contest.
On the plus side the coining of words like Humitree, Manitree etc. is excellent and the one-word triple rhymes paired with the first line rhymes would have been good too if it didn't break the rules.
Good luck.
Steve
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Revision and altered rating.
Apologies, I see the rules do allow for altered rhyme scheme. Put you back to a five where this belongs.
Good luck!
It is interesting what you have done here, but sadly it doesn't conform to the required format for a Minute Poem where the rhyme scheme has to be AABB in each stanza. I'm guessing this will be disqualified from the contest.
On the plus side the coining of words like Humitree, Manitree etc. is excellent and the one-word triple rhymes paired with the first line rhymes would have been good too if it didn't break the rules.
Good luck.
Steve
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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I'd say you would be correct normally. Except in this case, the contest says we do not have to follow the iambic parameter or the exact rhyme scheme. As long as it rhymes, and we follow the syllable count which is 844484448444 per stanza, which it does comply with. However, it had been the case. You wouldn't have saved me because it's still 19 days till it's due so I do. Thank you very much for that. Certainly, need to hear it. Thank you much for your kind review.
And for your words of encouragement and for having an eagle eye, I hope you have a most amazing night. Thanks again!
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Okay. I knew the contest rules gave options for using the iambic meter, but didn't realise they also allowed variations in the rhyme.
I actually think the meter is important for this form as it gives the poem it's distinctive tick-tock sound which relates to the name of the form.
But as you say, you're well within the rules so I'll simply wish you good luck!
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I do thank you for pointing that out. So absolutely. Should you review again? You see something I don't want to know about it, because that's how we develop, how we evolve as writers. I appreciate so very much. Thank you so much for reading and offering your comments and your right.Thank you!
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Yep, the 4-star rating was mostly because I thought you hadn't followed the rules. I'll go and raise it.
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Thank you so much!
Comment from jake cosmos aller
another great poem in your epic Sci-Fi series. You need to put them all together into one document, then create a substack microblog, import your contact info and blog it for the world. you can even do a podcast if you convert your document into an MP3 using Zamzar first. send me an email to authorjakecosmosaller@gmail.com if interested and I can post it on my blog as well.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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another great poem in your epic Sci-Fi series. You need to put them all together into one document, then create a substack microblog, import your contact info and blog it for the world. you can even do a podcast if you convert your document into an MP3 using Zamzar first. send me an email to authorjakecosmosaller@gmail.com if interested and I can post it on my blog as well.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Thank you very kind of you.I sent you an email! At the risk of sounding like a bone head, I only get about half of what you're saying, yeah, microblog, substack, right? I know what a blog is...lol
Thank you so much for reading and rating once again. I appreciate it! Have a great night!
Comment from Elias Noor
This poem uses inventive language and rhythm to create a unique world with the "tree" motif. The rhyme and structure add a musical quality, but the meaning feels somewhat abstract. Adding more context or imagery could make the themes more accessible and impactful.
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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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This poem uses inventive language and rhythm to create a unique world with the "tree" motif. The rhyme and structure add a musical quality, but the meaning feels somewhat abstract. Adding more context or imagery could make the themes more accessible and impactful.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Hello Elias, thank you for your review! I appreciate your time and effort. This poem had a specific syllable count and only one word lines as per the contest rules. It's called the minute call hafter.Get a theme too of creation.Which again is part of the contest. However, you thank you for taking the time to read and read. It's much appreciated.Hope you have a great day! I create my own pictures too! Hope you like!
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your poem is full of energy. I like how you use different types of "tree" names to show the process. You've created something that feels alive! Keep exploring this unique style - it's really interesting!
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Your poem is full of energy. I like how you use different types of "tree" names to show the process. You've created something that feels alive! Keep exploring this unique style - it's really interesting!
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Hi Michael! Thank you so much for your reading and your time and your encouraging words as always. Great to see and read your reviews! Hope you have an amazing day.Thank you again!
Comment from Tina Crute
The dramatic art would demand a poem of high drama also and you do not disappoint with your well-penned, creative story poem. The enjoyment of the poem continues after the reading, also. I wonder what's next for the Famitree? You have stretched my brain with your vivd poem>)
Tina
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2025
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The dramatic art would demand a poem of high drama also and you do not disappoint with your well-penned, creative story poem. The enjoyment of the poem continues after the reading, also. I wonder what's next for the Famitree? You have stretched my brain with your vivd poem>)
Tina
Comment Written 06-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2025
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Thank you, tina, lovely compliment.Appreciate it so much! I'm glad you like the pictures and the poem I had fun making both. The series will continue on a little bit. I think that new characters coming aboard. I thank you so much for your kind words and your encouraging comments.Hope you have an awesome night!
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Wait...you MADE the picture? I didn't get that. You have a cool brain.
You are welcome for the review:)
Tina
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Yes I did thx!
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Just...wow!
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I'm glad you like them. I hoped to make a visual impact. Thank you.You're kind.Words really are encouraging.I appreciate it!
Comment from Nicki.B
Another great addition to your collection and the perfect entry for the minute poetry contest. All syllable counts and rhyming schemes are spot on and you have very powerful words throughout for the procreation of your hybrid creature family. Excellent work
Best Wishes
Nicki
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2025
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Another great addition to your collection and the perfect entry for the minute poetry contest. All syllable counts and rhyming schemes are spot on and you have very powerful words throughout for the procreation of your hybrid creature family. Excellent work
Best Wishes
Nicki
Comment Written 06-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2025
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Nicki, I thank you once again for your kind review! Really? Glad you like it really glad one that people like it. You know, but especially those who come and eat offer a word like you do and I appreciate it very much. I hope that your christmas was great.And that new year's was even greater.Had an awesome night and thank you again!
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I had a great Christmas and New Years Lea thanks so much! You too enjoy the rest of the evening xox
Comment from Bill Schott
This minute poem, Famitree Flames, has the proper formatting and sees the uniting of family values as the world begins growing into the new people's positive reality.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2025
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This minute poem, Famitree Flames, has the proper formatting and sees the uniting of family values as the world begins growing into the new people's positive reality.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2025
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You have very good insight Bill!. Yeah, you have a wave getting to the meat of the matter. I appreciate that really more than most. Your reviews are very precise.How i'm the money. Thank you for this great rating, and for your time.Above all. I hope you have an awesome evening!
Comment from samandlancelot
Hi Lea,
Your artwork is outstanding! I love the colors, the tone, and the way it looks like the wind is blowing through the branches of their hair. Also, the striations of muscles for the arms/branches. The looks of pleasure and unity on their faces, where their eyes gaze. The final word in your poem, "decimation," disturbs the entire beautiful setting.
Patricia
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2025
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Hi Lea,
Your artwork is outstanding! I love the colors, the tone, and the way it looks like the wind is blowing through the branches of their hair. Also, the striations of muscles for the arms/branches. The looks of pleasure and unity on their faces, where their eyes gaze. The final word in your poem, "decimation," disturbs the entire beautiful setting.
Patricia
Comment Written 05-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2025
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Yes, there's a incident of a forest fire in the next poem. I just left a teaser on the end. A couple people have mentioned it, so I suppose it's a bit effective. Lol. How was your new year? I hope it was great. I will help.The new year brings you everything you wish for. Thanks again for your review for your time and your rating! Have a great night!
Comment from Jim Wile
This was another cool format to showcase your magnificent series of poems about this extraordinarily unique family, Lea. Such a novel idea. And the accompanying artwork brings it all to life in a most remarkable way. This is a very entertaining series.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2024
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This was another cool format to showcase your magnificent series of poems about this extraordinarily unique family, Lea. Such a novel idea. And the accompanying artwork brings it all to life in a most remarkable way. This is a very entertaining series.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2024
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Yay, Jim, i'm so happy you like it! Yeah, I think i'm a introduce more characters two and see, maybe they'll have a conflict or something. We'll see how it goes in in which direction it takes me. I shall carry on though. Thank you again, Jim. Amazing to have your review and you're great rating. Enjoy your evening. I made you knew you're be amazing!
