His Silence
Viewing comments for Chapter 85 "His Silence - Chapter 84"Why did a 14 year old boy murder his parents?
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Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
What could be scarier than a smiling woman arriving in the room where you are being held prisoner, and she has a knife? Good move to up the fear at this point as there has been a lot of what is going on with no answers.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
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What could be scarier than a smiling woman arriving in the room where you are being held prisoner, and she has a knife? Good move to up the fear at this point as there has been a lot of what is going on with no answers.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Carol, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Another excellent chapter. I had no trouble following the law. End your dialogue it's really good. I notice with every chapter you write gets better and better.My interest becomes stronger is stronger. And it looks like the characters are teetering on the edge of danger or being found out as it were. I really enjoyed this. Thank you for your submission. And I really wish you an awesome holiday for you and your wife. Yours and the best night too!
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
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Another excellent chapter. I had no trouble following the law. End your dialogue it's really good. I notice with every chapter you write gets better and better.My interest becomes stronger is stronger. And it looks like the characters are teetering on the edge of danger or being found out as it were. I really enjoyed this. Thank you for your submission. And I really wish you an awesome holiday for you and your wife. Yours and the best night too!
Comment Written 17-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Lea, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from BethShelby
So Mary knows all about Max. I assume she has a way of accessing her messages. It seem she is the one who is more dangerous than Oliver. I don't seems the most scary. I wonder if she is the one who killed Danielle's parents. I don't know why she would have wanted Danielle to come there in the first place.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
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So Mary knows all about Max. I assume she has a way of accessing her messages. It seem she is the one who is more dangerous than Oliver. I don't seems the most scary. I wonder if she is the one who killed Danielle's parents. I don't know why she would have wanted Danielle to come there in the first place.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Beth, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Begin Again
Oh no...Mary knows about Max. How did that happen? Max didn't turn on her, did he? Things aren't looking good for Danielle and Callum unless they can over power Mary and get out of there and then I don't know how they escape. Guess you've got me sitting here,,,waiting!!!
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
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Oh no...Mary knows about Max. How did that happen? Max didn't turn on her, did he? Things aren't looking good for Danielle and Callum unless they can over power Mary and get out of there and then I don't know how they escape. Guess you've got me sitting here,,,waiting!!!
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 17-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Carol, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
How did Mary find out about Max? Oh my! This is getting intense. I really like this story. You're doing a good job writing this and I can't wait to read more.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
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How did Mary find out about Max? Oh my! This is getting intense. I really like this story. You're doing a good job writing this and I can't wait to read more.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Barbara, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Oh my gosh!!!!! No!!!!!
Okay, deep breath. So, Mary is behind all of this nonsense, or at least it seems that way. Of course, Oliver did lock them in. But Max??? Hmmm is he on their side.
Lots of questions, but your story is really building up the suspense beautifully.
Great job, very engaging,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
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Oh my gosh!!!!! No!!!!!
Okay, deep breath. So, Mary is behind all of this nonsense, or at least it seems that way. Of course, Oliver did lock them in. But Max??? Hmmm is he on their side.
Lots of questions, but your story is really building up the suspense beautifully.
Great job, very engaging,
Rhonda
Comment Written 17-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Rhonda, I'm really pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from papa55mike
A nice setup chapter for the wiz-bang ending, and all of the secrets will come pouring out. What a wonderfully written chapter. Best of luck with your book!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2024
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A nice setup chapter for the wiz-bang ending, and all of the secrets will come pouring out. What a wonderfully written chapter. Best of luck with your book!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 17-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2024
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Thank you, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Peter Jarvis
His Silence - Chapter 84" plunges readers into a suspenseful, tense situation where Danielle and Callum find themselves trapped and struggling to understand their dire circumstances. The chapter effectively captures the fear and uncertainty of the characters, with vivid descriptions that make the reader feel the claustrophobia of the setting.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2024
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His Silence - Chapter 84" plunges readers into a suspenseful, tense situation where Danielle and Callum find themselves trapped and struggling to understand their dire circumstances. The chapter effectively captures the fear and uncertainty of the characters, with vivid descriptions that make the reader feel the claustrophobia of the setting.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2024
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Thank you, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
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Take care and keep writing!
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Jacob,
What a great chapter to your book. What have you got Danielle and Callum into. It appears they have a big problem they need to figure out how to get out of. Mary is a mean old bitch. Keep writing my friend.
Well done
Cecilia
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2024
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Jacob,
What a great chapter to your book. What have you got Danielle and Callum into. It appears they have a big problem they need to figure out how to get out of. Mary is a mean old bitch. Keep writing my friend.
Well done
Cecilia
Comment Written 17-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Cecilia, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Oh so that's what all this is about! Spying is the name of the game here. I could sense Danielle's anguish and then her anger with Mary was palpable, with spittle flying out of her mouth. I still think it would be clearer and helpful to the reader to use the device of italics with thought processes, e.g. It's alright, he's OK. Also proper inverted commas instead of apostrophes. But this has notched up a gear and I'm looking forward to reading more. Thanks for sharing, Jacob. Debbie
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2024
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Oh so that's what all this is about! Spying is the name of the game here. I could sense Danielle's anguish and then her anger with Mary was palpable, with spittle flying out of her mouth. I still think it would be clearer and helpful to the reader to use the device of italics with thought processes, e.g. It's alright, he's OK. Also proper inverted commas instead of apostrophes. But this has notched up a gear and I'm looking forward to reading more. Thanks for sharing, Jacob. Debbie
Comment Written 17-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Debbie, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.