Acquired Wisdom
5-7-5 Poem24 total reviews
Comment from Allezw2
She still in chains? Or is it you ere this bit was posted? Listening to some newly freed, you might wonder what happened twixt the first blush and the first bash.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2024
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She still in chains? Or is it you ere this bit was posted? Listening to some newly freed, you might wonder what happened twixt the first blush and the first bash.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2024
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Thanks for stopping by.
Steve
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I am still not divorced. We have been separated for two and one half years. I paid for a divorce, and then all the addresses got changed and they told me I had to serve him, etc. So I have to wait until I can afford to hire someone else. I live in hope! Happy turkey day. Cute poem. Karen
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024
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I am still not divorced. We have been separated for two and one half years. I paid for a divorce, and then all the addresses got changed and they told me I had to serve him, etc. So I have to wait until I can afford to hire someone else. I live in hope! Happy turkey day. Cute poem. Karen
Comment Written 24-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024
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Oh, dear! perhaps you should send him my poem so he can see what freedom feels like!
Turkeys roam free around here. One even nested in our garden.
Thanks for the review.
Steve
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We eat ham. To us bacon is it's own food group. Karen
Comment from karenina
Hah! Laugh put loud funny! I have male friends who are only too happy to have escaped the rattling chains of a discontented wife....
I know from your posts you are not in that situation!
Karenina
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024
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Hah! Laugh put loud funny! I have male friends who are only too happy to have escaped the rattling chains of a discontented wife....
I know from your posts you are not in that situation!
Karenina
Comment Written 24-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024
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Yep. Not my situation for sure. However I've had to disillusion a few reviewers who congratulated me on my escape!
Thanks for stopping by.
Steve
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Heh. People should never assume!
:)
Comment from harmony13
The first two lines of this poem flow and connect well. The last line
says it all! I like the message implied in these words. Being divorced many years now there has been freedom experienced for me. The artwork is awesome and compliments this poem.
Happy Thanksgiving!....Maria
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024
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The first two lines of this poem flow and connect well. The last line
says it all! I like the message implied in these words. Being divorced many years now there has been freedom experienced for me. The artwork is awesome and compliments this poem.
Happy Thanksgiving!....Maria
Comment Written 24-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024
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Thank you, Maria.
Yes, the last line is the key to unlocking this. I'm quite proud of myself for thinking of it!
Steve
Comment from humpwhistle
Unless alimony is involved. Alimony is the antithesis of freedom--unless one party signs a pre-nup. I've been married, and I've been free. Hard for me to distinquish.
Of course your wife approves. She's lucky enough to be attached to a true romantic. I can't see her not trusting you. Nor can I see you giving her any reason to. Your poems of love and devotion might be the best I've ever read.
Steve, I think you and I will be holding our breaths for the next four years. Me? I'm keeping my head down.
Good luck.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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Unless alimony is involved. Alimony is the antithesis of freedom--unless one party signs a pre-nup. I've been married, and I've been free. Hard for me to distinquish.
Of course your wife approves. She's lucky enough to be attached to a true romantic. I can't see her not trusting you. Nor can I see you giving her any reason to. Your poems of love and devotion might be the best I've ever read.
Steve, I think you and I will be holding our breaths for the next four years. Me? I'm keeping my head down.
Good luck.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 23-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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Thanks, Lee. As you know I have not been in this situation which is probably why I forgot about alimony/child support. I think a lot of folks are keeping their heads down - the chaos is only just beginning. Good to see enough spine left among the Republican senators to not comply re Matt Gaetz. Not that Blondie Bondi will be much better..
Steve
Comment from Brenda Strauser
I like this poem. The words are so powerful and the picture is a good choice for the poem. I like your message here. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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I like this poem. The words are so powerful and the picture is a good choice for the poem. I like your message here. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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Thanks, Brenda.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
LOL!! That is so funny, and the last line was truly unexpected. Perfect for this little 5-7-5 poem. Very well done, and good luck in the contest!! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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LOL!! That is so funny, and the last line was truly unexpected. Perfect for this little 5-7-5 poem. Very well done, and good luck in the contest!! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 23-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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Thanks, Sandra.
I struggled for ages to find that last line. Then it occurred to me that what I needed was something to turn the whole serious mood on its head. Glad you liked it.
Steve
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Your wife or your ex-wife approves the contents of this message.
The thing that sets this apart from a message that's too simplistic (I'm free - I'm divorced!) is that second line. We don't taste bitterness created by the marriage, we taste the actual chains. I think that's brilliant. And you found a great image to drive it home.
Good luck in this contest - I've seen tons of entries over the last couple days.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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Your wife or your ex-wife approves the contents of this message.
The thing that sets this apart from a message that's too simplistic (I'm free - I'm divorced!) is that second line. We don't taste bitterness created by the marriage, we taste the actual chains. I think that's brilliant. And you found a great image to drive it home.
Good luck in this contest - I've seen tons of entries over the last couple days.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 23-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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Thanks, Pam.
Everybody wants to join in these short form contests - so little effort for such tempting reward!
Glad you enjoyed this.
Steve
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Congratulations on signing your divorce papers! True freedom comes from within but it surely is freeing to leave the ball and chain behind for good!
I love the artwork. It adds to the strong flavor of the 5-7-5 poem.
Good luck with the rest of your life!
Jesse
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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Congratulations on signing your divorce papers! True freedom comes from within but it surely is freeing to leave the ball and chain behind for good!
I love the artwork. It adds to the strong flavor of the 5-7-5 poem.
Good luck with the rest of your life!
Jesse
Comment Written 23-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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Thanks, Jesse. For the record, this is an imagined scenario. My wife and I just celebrated 50 years of marriage!
Steve
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Well, you sure fooled me.
Jesse
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Sorry 'bout that!
I've also written poems where the 'voice' is dead, is American, is a weasel, is a woman, is a God, is a killer, is Santa...
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I get that. I'm not used to reading fictionalized poetry on Fanstory.
That's all.
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It's OK. You certainly weren't the only one to think I must be celebrating my personal freedom!
Comment from rama devi
Deeply insightful first two lines and clever closing wit! Glad your wife approved the content. LOL. Eloquence in three lines - not an easy achievement! Great phonics in the first two lines with F and T alliteration. "tasted chains" - brilliant voicing! Excellent title and presentation too.
Warm Smiles,
rd
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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Deeply insightful first two lines and clever closing wit! Glad your wife approved the content. LOL. Eloquence in three lines - not an easy achievement! Great phonics in the first two lines with F and T alliteration. "tasted chains" - brilliant voicing! Excellent title and presentation too.
Warm Smiles,
rd
Comment Written 23-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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Hi, stranger! Thanks as always for the insight and kind words.
Anne and I celebrated our Golden Wedding back in July. She loved the poem!
Steve
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So nice! Congrats on your Golden Wedding anniversary! Of course she loved it! :)