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When wealth and power aren't enough10 total reviews
Comment from estory
I think it's a good story articulating the warmth of family, and the sense of loss we feel when it's not there in our lives. You have penned a moving scene of an old lady determined to reach back out of her current isolation for the warmer family moments in her life. The Thanksgiving setting is perfect for symbolizing that. I thought the dialogue was nice and crisp, realistic, and the overall movement from Henrietta taking leave of her hired man, somewhat dismissively, to a moment when she leaves her home to him and bequeaths something of her family warmth to his, is well orchestrated. estory
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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I think it's a good story articulating the warmth of family, and the sense of loss we feel when it's not there in our lives. You have penned a moving scene of an old lady determined to reach back out of her current isolation for the warmer family moments in her life. The Thanksgiving setting is perfect for symbolizing that. I thought the dialogue was nice and crisp, realistic, and the overall movement from Henrietta taking leave of her hired man, somewhat dismissively, to a moment when she leaves her home to him and bequeaths something of her family warmth to his, is well orchestrated. estory
Comment Written 08-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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My apologies for being so far behind with my thank yous but please know that I appreciate your time, comments and stars. It means a greate deal to me when people truly understand what's behind the story. Thank you.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
Carol, I am getting used to reading some of your stories through moist eyes! This was heartbreaking but in a good way. Good luck in the contest. You've got my vote.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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Carol, I am getting used to reading some of your stories through moist eyes! This was heartbreaking but in a good way. Good luck in the contest. You've got my vote.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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Forgive me for being so far behind in telling you how much I appreciate your time and support in my writing. Life has handed me another one of those "circumstances I didn't expect" and I am falling behind. Nothing new, right? Just know that your thoughts on my writing mean a lot to me. Thank you.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Forgive my cut and paste... I promise to do better!
Comment from Ulla
Aw, that was a wonderful write and sort, Carol. You really caught the spirit of that special Thanksgiving that she was to relive once again. What a lovely entry for the contest. All the best of luck. Ulla xxx
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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Aw, that was a wonderful write and sort, Carol. You really caught the spirit of that special Thanksgiving that she was to relive once again. What a lovely entry for the contest. All the best of luck. Ulla xxx
Comment Written 07-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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Forgive me for being so far behind in telling you how much I appreciate your time and support in my writing. Life has handed me another one of those "circumstances I didn't expect" and I am falling behind. Nothing new, right? Just know that your thoughts on my writing mean a lot to me. Thank you.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Forgive my cut and paste... I promise to do better!
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is a heartwarming and delightful ghost story. The ghosts of the past are friendly and welcoming. The plot is well developed as the story flows to a very satisfying ending. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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This is a heartwarming and delightful ghost story. The ghosts of the past are friendly and welcoming. The plot is well developed as the story flows to a very satisfying ending. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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Forgive me for being so far behind in telling you how much I appreciate your time and support in my writing. Life has handed me another one of those "circumstances I didn't expect" and I am falling behind. Nothing new, right? Just know that your thoughts on my writing mean a lot to me. Thank you.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Forgive my cut and paste... I promise to do better!
Comment from Wendy G
A fine story and a wel, written one. A positive message about kindness and a warning about priorities where greed and power come before family. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024
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A fine story and a wel, written one. A positive message about kindness and a warning about priorities where greed and power come before family. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 07-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024
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Thanks, Wendy...It was a different type of ghost story, I suppose, but I wanted to deliver a message which you understood. Thank you for reading and enjoying. Thanks for the kindness and the stars. Have a great day!
Comment from marilyn quillen
wonderful heart touching story but maybe a little too heart touching, you made me cry!!!or maybe I'm just a big crybaby, either way it was excellent and sooo well written, thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2024
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wonderful heart touching story but maybe a little too heart touching, you made me cry!!!or maybe I'm just a big crybaby, either way it was excellent and sooo well written, thanks for sharing
Comment Written 05-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2024
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Thanks for enjoying this story so much. I truly appreciate the review and the stars. I was worried the reader might not understand the ending and that her family were ghosts and they were there for her.
Have a great day!
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Wow, this story is so enjoyable! I love how you brought Henrietta's character to life with such detail. I love how she went from stern employer to someone deeply touched by the warmth and memories of family. And that ending was so heartwarming. It left me with a sense of peace and hope. Thank you for sharing such a heartfelt Thanksgiving tale!
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Wow, this story is so enjoyable! I love how you brought Henrietta's character to life with such detail. I love how she went from stern employer to someone deeply touched by the warmth and memories of family. And that ending was so heartwarming. It left me with a sense of peace and hope. Thank you for sharing such a heartfelt Thanksgiving tale!
Comment Written 04-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Thank you, Michael. I am pleased that you enjoyed this story. It was definitely a different type of ghost story, but one with a warm, happy ending. Have a great day!
Comment from Jacob1395
This was a really heartwarming piece, it reminded me a little bit of A Christmas Carol, and I thought both Henrietta and Jacob's personalities came through really well. A well written piece. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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This was a really heartwarming piece, it reminded me a little bit of A Christmas Carol, and I thought both Henrietta and Jacob's personalities came through really well. A well written piece. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Thank you so much. I didn't think of that as I wrote it, but you are right. Henrietta found what she'd been missing, just like Scrooge. Have a great day!
Comment from royowen
What an absolutely divine offering dear friend, I think of all those gorgeous people that have inspired me, but have gone to their reward, the tally is mounting as I age, but I'm a better person for having known them, truly made in God's image, enjoying thanksgiving eternally, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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What an absolutely divine offering dear friend, I think of all those gorgeous people that have inspired me, but have gone to their reward, the tally is mounting as I age, but I'm a better person for having known them, truly made in God's image, enjoying thanksgiving eternally, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 04-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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I'm certainly glad that you enjoyed my story.. a different ghost story, but then I always enjoy happy endings better than getting scared. Thanks so much for your kindness. Have a great day!
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My pleasure
Comment from RodG
This story is very touching because (1) of how you set the scenes, both when Jacob fetches the car and in Henrietta's old house as "family" appear, (2) of the way you characterize Henrietta and Jacob through dialog, and (3) because you emphasize the theme of FAMILY. Rod
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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This story is very touching because (1) of how you set the scenes, both when Jacob fetches the car and in Henrietta's old house as "family" appear, (2) of the way you characterize Henrietta and Jacob through dialog, and (3) because you emphasize the theme of FAMILY. Rod
Comment Written 04-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Family is very important to all of us. I liked the "gathering" to take Henrietta home...happy endings are far better than scary ones. Have a great day!