Seven Hues of Hope
Rainbows are a beautiful and powerful symbol2 total reviews
Comment from CM Pickard
Trying to come up with a rhyming scene while doing justice to a prompt is hard and you've done a good job.
For me, this was pretty but felt superficial. For example sprinkling in a few spots where you show us the magic or effects by tweaking your metaphors a bit?
However, I appreciated how you focused on the colors and built from there, lifting the poem from being cliché and creating what with a few tweaks would really shine.
(PS would have given 3.5 stars but system won't allow)
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2024
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Trying to come up with a rhyming scene while doing justice to a prompt is hard and you've done a good job.
For me, this was pretty but felt superficial. For example sprinkling in a few spots where you show us the magic or effects by tweaking your metaphors a bit?
However, I appreciated how you focused on the colors and built from there, lifting the poem from being cliché and creating what with a few tweaks would really shine.
(PS would have given 3.5 stars but system won't allow)
Comment Written 02-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2024
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Thank you for your honest and balanced. I am fairly new to the world of poetic prose
Take care
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi
This is a well rhymed and metered poem showing the science behind the forming of a rainbow. I like the personification of the rainbow.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest.
Enjoy the weekend.
Joan
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2024
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Hi
This is a well rhymed and metered poem showing the science behind the forming of a rainbow. I like the personification of the rainbow.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest.
Enjoy the weekend.
Joan
Comment Written 02-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2024
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Thank you Joan for your lovely review.
Stay well and safe
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