Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

Hi Debi,
That nurse was very hard headed and should have been reprimanded for falsifying documents. I wonder what date they pick if someone is born exactly at midnight. Wow it must be a very stressful life you almost die so many times. It is wonderful to hear about whirlwind love stories that last.
I wish him a belated Happy Birthday. My husbands birthday is also on the 30th.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a wonderful weekend
Joan

 Comment Written 02-Nov-2024

Comment from ESOSTINE

Exceptional

The flow of this amazing tribute to Jakes on his birthday is very lyrical and could pass for a song. The humour embedded in the poem makes it more outstanding. Well done, dear Debi. I wish Jake a lovely birthday celebration with many more celebrations in the coming years.

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2024

Comment from Carol Hillebrenner

Excellent

I am not so sure about his music choices, but your poem is great as it covers many of the interesting things that Jake has done in his 69 years. He has lived an interesting life in his many times of cheating death.

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2024

Comment from LJbutterfly

Excellent

Jake has led a very interesting life, from traveling around the world, visiting all fifty states, living in South Korea, and being married 41 years. You have done a fantastic job incorporating all these facts and more in a beautiful poetic tribute to Jake. The stories you are able to tell in these birthday poems are fascinating and fun to read. I truly appreciate the work you put into them.

To Jake: I wish you a year of joy, peace and love.

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2024

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

Debi, This is a very interesting and well written birthday poem for Jake. You used great descriptive words and he has had a very interesting life thus far. Happy Birthday to Jake! Blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2024

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Very nice artwork and presentation, Debi.
-You did a good job with this tribute for Jake.
-He has led a very interesting life from not
having the right birth certificate to his travels
around the world, and his ancestry.
-A good comparison to the cat and nine lives.
-A very good closing couplet.
-Happy Birthday, Jake. I enjoyed your birthday poem.

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2024

Comment from bob cullen

Excellent

For both this one and the previous one you deserve a maximum, sorry. I've been too generous to other poets and have none left. Your poems never disappoint. But gee they make me envious.

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2024

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

My husband came back to us a few times, but thankfully not 24 instances, that would be very scary for both Jake and his wife. I love the artwork you've chosen for this birthday greeting for Jake. I hope he enjoyed his day, whichever one he celebrates on.
cheers,
valda

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2024

Comment from Aussie

Exceptional

Wow! Happy Birthday Jake. What a colorful life you have lived. The man whom God needs. You have kept your eyes on the prize and lived. Even tho' at times you have suffered, you have survived because you are loved. Many more birthdays come your way, live as you have always lived, with God's blessings and protection. Kace xx

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2024

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2024

Thanks sweetie, for this very kind message for Jake. I am glad that you took such an interest in him. I think Jake could benefit from someone like you.
He is a nice man but he is not a Christian and I have prayed for him many times, so I hope you have some luck with him. Maybe you could turn him around towards the Lord. Thanks so much, Kace. Love, Debi

reply by Aussie on 02-Nov-2024

I'm not a book-read Christian. Don't go to Church. In my culture, we worship God's handiwork, like hug a tree and always thank an animal for taking it's life. My race is ancient. Our God is Bahamie. Aboriginal name. No matter what we call Him, he is still God. My garden is my cathedral. Nature can teach us so much. If you are interested, I have written book chapters on The Dreamtime. Love, Kace. PS: my people have owned this Great Southern Land for 58,000 years until the British arrived! And yes, I love Jesus.

Comment from Heather Knight

Exceptional

To me at least it's obvious you aren't making fun of anyone, Debi.
I enjoyed reading this very much not only because you make life easier for us when we are going through a bad patch.
I think there are a couple of typos:
- six weeks' time
-forty-one
BTW, nurses are incredible sometimes.
Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2024

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reply by the author on 31-Oct-2024

Hahaha, you nut, you!! LOL.. yes, nurses are incredible. But obviously this one wasn't. I tried to train to be one and went thru the whole course and kept passing out in the doctor's arms during surgery and after two times we figured it wasn't for me.

So later went on to be a title one teacher. So with that being said look who just corrected my typos. LOL.. but you know I have lately gotten away from using punctuation in my poetry so I have to be aware of some needed. I do always get my commas and parenthesis.

Things like that, but I hate using periods since I was shamed horribly when I first got here for using them.

Anyway, thank you, Sweetie for all the little gifts you brought me. Especially the gift of you. I miss you, the little typos corrections and the generous six stars. You are a gem. Thank you so very much!!!
Lotsa love, Debi

reply by Heather Knight on 02-Nov-2024

You never know who to listen to when it comes to poetry.

Now I'm not using capitals at the beginning of lines (same reason as you with punctuation), but I guess we always have to take advice with a pinch of salt, because many of the great use capitals in their poems.

For me it's very difficult to point out a typo or a mistake, but I'm making an effort to write meaningful reviews because I think sometimes we just go through the motions till we have the right number of letters.

Sandra Cisneros once said that, after attending lots of Writing courses, she came to the conclusion that she'd never write properly till she found her own voice.

BTW, what is a title one teacher?

Lots of us here are or have been teachers. Funny!

P.S I love Cisneros' little novella The House on Mango Street.

reply by the author on 02-Nov-2024

The main rule of poetry is to be yourself and express it how you feel comfortable.
I'm sure that is how some of the greats made up their structures and formats.
About correcting, I know it is important, but what's more important is to look at what they are doing first. For instance, so many will give me advice to add an article or word, and I tell them that grammar is not as important to me as keeping my syllable count and meter. I will try every way possible to make it sound right, but it is always easy to understand. Otherwise I make people stumble and I try to keep it smooth. Does that make sense? LOL. It works for me tho and that is who I am here to please. Hugs.
A title one teacher is Chapter One. Are you familiar with them?

reply by the author on 02-Nov-2024

Gosh, Hon, I didn't mean that to sound like a lecture.
I was just expressing some of my feelings and what they say on the internet about writing poetry.

reply by Heather Knight on 02-Nov-2024

It didn't sound like a lecture at all! Maybe my answer did? x