Hunted!
A FLASH - of what's to be17 total reviews
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This sounds impossible but it isn't really. My twin cousins lived hundreds of miles apart. One choked at a basketball game on a hot dog. The other choked for no reason and lost consciousness at a teacher's meeting. They called each other later and found out it had happened at the same time to both of them.
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This sounds impossible but it isn't really. My twin cousins lived hundreds of miles apart. One choked at a basketball game on a hot dog. The other choked for no reason and lost consciousness at a teacher's meeting. They called each other later and found out it had happened at the same time to both of them.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2024
Comment from Carol Clark2
Wow, this leaves the reader wondering about all sorts of things. Interesting flash story. Revenge by a prison inmate, a woman being hunted, and a sister who has a premonition -- all in one story. Smiles & hugs! Carol
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Wow, this leaves the reader wondering about all sorts of things. Interesting flash story. Revenge by a prison inmate, a woman being hunted, and a sister who has a premonition -- all in one story. Smiles & hugs! Carol
Comment Written 29-Oct-2024
Comment from Julie Helms
I cheated and saw in other comments that you are teasing for an upcoming novel idea. :-)
You have a whole bunch of questions to follow through with...why was she being hunted? What was her connection to the inmate? Is he in prison because of her? How could he 'reach' her? Was she killed? Has she always had some supernatural connection to her sister etc.
Very fertile ground for a novel!
her sister suddenly sees a vision
(I would keep this in past tense to match the rest of the story: suddenly saw.)
Great flash!
Julie
:-)
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I cheated and saw in other comments that you are teasing for an upcoming novel idea. :-)
You have a whole bunch of questions to follow through with...why was she being hunted? What was her connection to the inmate? Is he in prison because of her? How could he 'reach' her? Was she killed? Has she always had some supernatural connection to her sister etc.
Very fertile ground for a novel!
her sister suddenly sees a vision
(I would keep this in past tense to match the rest of the story: suddenly saw.)
Great flash!
Julie
:-)
Comment Written 29-Oct-2024
Comment from royowen
A hah, they say revenge is sweet they say, even though it may be saccharine, you've done a great job with this, flash fiction is very similar to a haiku, with a aha moment such as this great story is Carol, well done, blessings Roy
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A hah, they say revenge is sweet they say, even though it may be saccharine, you've done a great job with this, flash fiction is very similar to a haiku, with a aha moment such as this great story is Carol, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 29-Oct-2024
Comment from patcelaw
This is very well written and I enjoyed very much listening to it. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. I also wish you a very good weekend and may God bless you. Patricia
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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This is very well written and I enjoyed very much listening to it. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. I also wish you a very good weekend and may God bless you. Patricia
Comment Written 29-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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Thak you for reading and reviewing and for all the kind wishes. I send the same to you. Hope you are feeling better.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I don't understand it at all. Am I having a dumb day? Can you explain it to me, and I will read it again. Have a very good and fright filled week, Happy Halloween. Karen
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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I don't understand it at all. Am I having a dumb day? Can you explain it to me, and I will read it again. Have a very good and fright filled week, Happy Halloween. Karen
Comment Written 29-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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A woman is being chased down by a car behind her and she is ran off the road and crashes. Far away, her sister has a vision of the crash. And the man who orchestrated the crash is behind bars, laughing and saying, Revenge is sweet." It's a teaser for an upcoming book.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from karenina
This is my third attempt to submit my review. I have no clue why it is being rejected. I'll try one more time and (apparently) keep it simple and without anything someone could insinuate is "computer-like"--
Good flash. I've known people who've had premonitions of a loved one's death as it occurred far away.
I'd say more, but I want this review to GET to you!
Karenina
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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This is my third attempt to submit my review. I have no clue why it is being rejected. I'll try one more time and (apparently) keep it simple and without anything someone could insinuate is "computer-like"--
Good flash. I've known people who've had premonitions of a loved one's death as it occurred far away.
I'd say more, but I want this review to GET to you!
Karenina
Comment Written 29-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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You are the best, my sweet. I've been working on an outline for the upcoming book (maybe) and this came to me as a "tease" for the beginning of the story. Thank you so much for always being here to support me.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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From ghosts to the paranormal as in ESP? That sounds interesting! I'm looking forward to your next novel... but begin it whenever YOU are ready, okay?
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You'll be the first to know...Love ya!
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Hurrah! (And I'll STILL fall behind!)
(grin)
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You might because after I wrote the rough outline...this stories got a lot of subplots that I have work into the storyline and then tie them all together. usually I say it's a piece of cake but I'm not so sure about this one.
Comment from Teri7
Carol, you are coming up with some really good short stories on here. You used great descriptive words and very good imagery from your words and the artwork you chose. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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Carol, you are coming up with some really good short stories on here. You used great descriptive words and very good imagery from your words and the artwork you chose. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 29-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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This one is a quick thought on what my next book might be. Did it make you interested to learn more? I hope so.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
As always, you give us so much using so few words. This twist is great but sure left the reader with lots of questions which I have no doubt was intentional but could also be viewed as cruel lol. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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As always, you give us so much using so few words. This twist is great but sure left the reader with lots of questions which I have no doubt was intentional but could also be viewed as cruel lol. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Marilyn. It's a "tease" for an upcoming new book. Hope it makes you interested in reading. I also hope you are having a nice vacation.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Ric Myworld
There is a whole lot of story in these few short words. I guess flash is more of a structure, grid, or outline, hitting the high spots, or the low spots if you're driving a drunken car in the fog. :-) Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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There is a whole lot of story in these few short words. I guess flash is more of a structure, grid, or outline, hitting the high spots, or the low spots if you're driving a drunken car in the fog. :-) Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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It's a "tease" for my next novel. Hope it spikes your interest.... Thanks for stopping by and saying hello. Take care.
Smiles, Carol