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Comment from Esther Brown
What a fabulous idea. I want to be there! I am such a novice on this site, but recognize most of the people you describe so well. The only conventions I have ever been to are medical. No alcohol for participants attending classes, won't get our credits. I can't wait to read all the entries. Esther
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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What a fabulous idea. I want to be there! I am such a novice on this site, but recognize most of the people you describe so well. The only conventions I have ever been to are medical. No alcohol for participants attending classes, won't get our credits. I can't wait to read all the entries. Esther
Comment Written 28-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Esther.
Gretchen and I would love it if you'd add your own chapter to the story. You're a good writer, Esther. You'd make it delightful! Please give it some thought. xoxox
Comment from Ulla
Hi to both of you, this was hilarious. I really enjoyed reading this and how you presented so many writers from here. I may take you up on the invite and add a little input myself. We'll see. You just nailed it. Ulla xcx
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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Hi to both of you, this was hilarious. I really enjoyed reading this and how you presented so many writers from here. I may take you up on the invite and add a little input myself. We'll see. You just nailed it. Ulla xcx
Comment Written 28-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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We would LOVE that, Ulla!! The more, the merrier!
Comment from Cindy Decker 3
Rachelle,
Sorry Ruby (my faithful dog) and I couldn't make the Fanstory Convention!
We decided not to go, because someone stole our designer gowns and we were left with jeans and t shirts until our wardrobes could be replenished. lol. Even reading your story in my cozy abode, I feel horribly undressed.
Were there any dogs there?
Seriously,
Your work is absolutely as stunning as your descriptions of the garb and personalities of your convention.
I felt I knew most of the characters you describe; your narration is exquisite.
Exceptional story, Rachelle.
Best wishes,
Cindy
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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Rachelle,
Sorry Ruby (my faithful dog) and I couldn't make the Fanstory Convention!
We decided not to go, because someone stole our designer gowns and we were left with jeans and t shirts until our wardrobes could be replenished. lol. Even reading your story in my cozy abode, I feel horribly undressed.
Were there any dogs there?
Seriously,
Your work is absolutely as stunning as your descriptions of the garb and personalities of your convention.
I felt I knew most of the characters you describe; your narration is exquisite.
Exceptional story, Rachelle.
Best wishes,
Cindy
Comment Written 28-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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Wowie zowie! What a wonderful review!! Thank you for the warmth and encouragement! Xoxoxo
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Wowie zowie! What a wonderful review!! Thank you for the warmth and encouragement! Xoxoxo
Comment from Neonewman
This was hilarious! I lost it on sooooooo maaaaaany levels, lol. I knew Jane Babies would crash the party! Not really; I had forgotten about her until the end, lol. SAS shoes I have to wear at work. I nearly crapped my pants when I got to this part. OMG! I still have Gretchen's to read.
Believe it or not, I found I small blip, sorry.
Laugh(t)er fills the room once again. What can I say? You're a great teacher.
I will check out the YOUR INVITED.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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This was hilarious! I lost it on sooooooo maaaaaany levels, lol. I knew Jane Babies would crash the party! Not really; I had forgotten about her until the end, lol. SAS shoes I have to wear at work. I nearly crapped my pants when I got to this part. OMG! I still have Gretchen's to read.
Believe it or not, I found I small blip, sorry.
Laugh(t)er fills the room once again. What can I say? You're a great teacher.
I will check out the YOUR INVITED.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 28-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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Thanks for the catch and all the kudos, Sweet Steve!! I appreciate the ❤️. Xoxoxo
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Thanks for the catch and all the kudos, Sweet Steve!! I appreciate the ❤️. Xoxoxo
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Anytime, sunshine.
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lol.
xoxox
Comment from Carol Clark2
I love all the details you put into the outfits that each FanStorian is wearing. It's great that you asked each one about his or her clothing. Oh, no, Jane is there, so the drama will continue. So much fun! Carol
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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I love all the details you put into the outfits that each FanStorian is wearing. It's great that you asked each one about his or her clothing. Oh, no, Jane is there, so the drama will continue. So much fun! Carol
Comment Written 28-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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FEAR NOT! Gretchen's chapter gets rid of her!!
Thanks for the wonderful review!
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Yes, I've read her chapter, and several additions by FS friends. Such a fun idea!
Carol
Comment from pome lover
Well, Rachelle,
That is so New York and glitzy I am in awe. And the descriptions of everything and everybody sounds so you - not that I know you at all, but from your remarks and reactions, throughout this story - full of life and fun and self assurance and a fast-paced life, and, of course, not an ounce of reticence.
I would be mute.
Well, the appearance of Lady Jane and your reaction to her in YOUR dress ought to be a scene to remember. She is the most obtuse person - a real obnoxious villain who deserves expunction. hmm, not sure that's the correct word, never-the-less, she does.
Katharine
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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Well, Rachelle,
That is so New York and glitzy I am in awe. And the descriptions of everything and everybody sounds so you - not that I know you at all, but from your remarks and reactions, throughout this story - full of life and fun and self assurance and a fast-paced life, and, of course, not an ounce of reticence.
I would be mute.
Well, the appearance of Lady Jane and your reaction to her in YOUR dress ought to be a scene to remember. She is the most obtuse person - a real obnoxious villain who deserves expunction. hmm, not sure that's the correct word, never-the-less, she does.
Katharine
Comment Written 27-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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I'd say you have nailed it, Katharine. I appreciate your affirmation and support here and certainly hope you contribute a chapter, yourself. What it all looks like from your vantage point at the convention would be a fabulous read. We hope you'll join the fun!!
xoxoxo
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Thank you! I may not can get one ready in time, but will give it a shot.
Crazy start to the convention, that's for sure.
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Ohhhh yeah!!
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Thursday at midnight. You and tht creative mind of yours have lots of time!!
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thanks, Rachelle! I posted it. It was fun.
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YAAAAAY! I'm so HAPPY, Katharine! I'll read and review tonight after I'm done with lessons!! Xoxoxo
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you're so cute. thanks!!!
Comment from Michele Harber
Note to self: If there ever is a real FanStory convention, Gretchen's out on her ass. I'm going with Rachelle! Last time I was in AC, I stayed at Harrah's, and we were treated like the low-rollers we were: The garage was across the street, and we had to schlep our luggage across a bridge, where we took an elevator that stopped one level above the lobby where we had to check in, forcing us to take our bags down one flight by stairs or escalator. The room was decent enough, but I had to share it with two other people. Granted, they were my husband and daughter, but still ...!
It was very strange to not see any Amish people in your story, but it was a lot of fun to "meet" some of my fellow FanStorians in a more personal setting. It was obvious how much fun you had writing this, which made it that much more fun for those of us reading it. I'm really sorry I had to "miss the party," but I can only wonder what sort of compromising position you'd have put me in if I'd "shown up," considering you have Lea Tonin "horse-whipping" poor Jim Wile, and Bill Schott doing his best John Travolta. Jane Babies' interruption of the festivities provides the perfect cliff-hanger (or, should I say, cliiiiiiiiiif haaaaaaanger).
I'm looking forward to your next chapter--and to everyone else's contributions. This should be fun.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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Note to self: If there ever is a real FanStory convention, Gretchen's out on her ass. I'm going with Rachelle! Last time I was in AC, I stayed at Harrah's, and we were treated like the low-rollers we were: The garage was across the street, and we had to schlep our luggage across a bridge, where we took an elevator that stopped one level above the lobby where we had to check in, forcing us to take our bags down one flight by stairs or escalator. The room was decent enough, but I had to share it with two other people. Granted, they were my husband and daughter, but still ...!
It was very strange to not see any Amish people in your story, but it was a lot of fun to "meet" some of my fellow FanStorians in a more personal setting. It was obvious how much fun you had writing this, which made it that much more fun for those of us reading it. I'm really sorry I had to "miss the party," but I can only wonder what sort of compromising position you'd have put me in if I'd "shown up," considering you have Lea Tonin "horse-whipping" poor Jim Wile, and Bill Schott doing his best John Travolta. Jane Babies' interruption of the festivities provides the perfect cliff-hanger (or, should I say, cliiiiiiiiiif haaaaaaanger).
I'm looking forward to your next chapter--and to everyone else's contributions. This should be fun.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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I believe it's going to be quite the week on FanStory; that is for sure.
And may I just say that I absolutely love your reviews. They're as hilarious as they are plucky and spot-on. You're my go-to person for honest feedback and assessments. xoxox
Comment from Lea Tonin1
What a super cool idea! You are so inventive, and your writing is precise, crisp and clear. I really like how you brought it a whole bunch of people from pan story into your story, which is that I think a really great and fine personal touch. There's only one thing to do of course, with such a fine piece of writing contribute in what small way that I can. Thank you for this and for your awesome idea and Gretchen as well, I'll be looking forward to reading more!
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2024
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What a super cool idea! You are so inventive, and your writing is precise, crisp and clear. I really like how you brought it a whole bunch of people from pan story into your story, which is that I think a really great and fine personal touch. There's only one thing to do of course, with such a fine piece of writing contribute in what small way that I can. Thank you for this and for your awesome idea and Gretchen as well, I'll be looking forward to reading more!
Comment Written 27-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2024
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There's just one chapter left. Thanks for these encouraging words. I appreciate them very much. Thanks for adding your pizzazz to the pre-convention dinner party. You and Jim Wile starting the extra fun with your horseplay!! xoxox
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Lol
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Rachelle,
it sounds like the party is underway right from the time the elevator door opens. I didn't realize that so many in our writing group had such grand tastes in clothes. I fear that for someone like me the whole thing would be overwhelming, but I'm sure enjoying reading about the arrival of the guests, with the exception of course of Jane. How did she manage to find out where you all were? She's just a bit dense isn't she? I think you should hire a gigolo for her and send her packing to her room so she doesn't spoil the party for the rest of you. Well done gal, a real delight to read. Are you girls planning on putting this into a book? It might be something to think about.
Have a blessed evening gal.
Tom
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2024
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Hello Rachelle,
it sounds like the party is underway right from the time the elevator door opens. I didn't realize that so many in our writing group had such grand tastes in clothes. I fear that for someone like me the whole thing would be overwhelming, but I'm sure enjoying reading about the arrival of the guests, with the exception of course of Jane. How did she manage to find out where you all were? She's just a bit dense isn't she? I think you should hire a gigolo for her and send her packing to her room so she doesn't spoil the party for the rest of you. Well done gal, a real delight to read. Are you girls planning on putting this into a book? It might be something to think about.
Have a blessed evening gal.
Tom
Comment Written 27-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2024
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Thanks, Tom! I appreciate all these kind words.
People like Jane have a way of showing up exactly when you don't want them to the MOST...you know, like at a private party.
Have you read Gretchen's chapter? You'll love to read how Jane outdoes herself in the Wreaking Chaos department.
I don't know if we'll publish this or not. We haven't talked about that yet. Stay tuned, I guess.
xoxox
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hey Rachelle.
This is an outstanding narrative. You've done a truly wonderful job. I snickered at some descriptions, laughed out loud at some others, but I was particularly fascinated by my description. I would not have any trouble getting up off the floor as long as I had my mahogany walking stick in hand. That would be very helpful. It's also a classy piece. It's a beauty. The only problem would be if Jane tries to get it. I would not permit that. ;-O
Robert
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2024
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Hey Rachelle.
This is an outstanding narrative. You've done a truly wonderful job. I snickered at some descriptions, laughed out loud at some others, but I was particularly fascinated by my description. I would not have any trouble getting up off the floor as long as I had my mahogany walking stick in hand. That would be very helpful. It's also a classy piece. It's a beauty. The only problem would be if Jane tries to get it. I would not permit that. ;-O
Robert
Comment Written 27-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2024
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In that case, Robert, you could smite her with it...and, given her lack of popularity, the remaining attendees would hold up finger scores for you, like judges at the Olympics!
So glad you enjoyed this chapter, and I hope you'll participate in providing one of your own. Everyone would love to know what the convention looked like through your eyes!
xoxoxo
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hahaha.