It's a Private Party
A Flash - You weren't invited.20 total reviews
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Oh this was a creepy flash fiction, Carol and I for one am glad I wasn't invited.
You've really got your creepy going well leading up to Halloween. Well done,
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2024
Oh this was a creepy flash fiction, Carol and I for one am glad I wasn't invited.
You've really got your creepy going well leading up to Halloween. Well done,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 26-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2024
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Thanks, Valda! Trying to get all the creepiness out of me by the time the month ends. LOl Thank you for reading and commenting. Have a great day!
Smile, Carol
Comment from patcelaw
A delight for a short fiction story and I enjoyed listening to it. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. I also wish you a wonderful day and may God bless you with all good things.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2024
A delight for a short fiction story and I enjoyed listening to it. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. I also wish you a wonderful day and may God bless you with all good things.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2024
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Thanks, Patricia! Trying to get all the creepiness out of me by the time the month ends. LOl Thank you for reading and commenting. Have a great day!
Smile, Carol
Comment from Ric Myworld
It's Halloween time and everyone is getting ready for a scare. I'm a lover of all things scary, not the blood and guts, and it appears, you like it too.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2024
It's Halloween time and everyone is getting ready for a scare. I'm a lover of all things scary, not the blood and guts, and it appears, you like it too.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2024
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Thanks! Trying to get all the creepiness out of me by the time the month ends. LOl Thank you for reading and commenting. Have a great day!
Smile, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
Eerie, I guess it is that time of year. The ghosts don't sound like the kind in you recent stories who all seem very lovable and capable of solving crimes.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2024
Eerie, I guess it is that time of year. The ghosts don't sound like the kind in you recent stories who all seem very lovable and capable of solving crimes.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2024
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Thanks! Trying to get all the creepiness out of me by the time the month ends. LOl Thank you for reading and commenting. Have a great day!
Smile, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
Eerie, I guess it is that time of year. The ghosts don't sound like the kind in you recent stories who all seem very lovable and capable of solving crimes.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2024
Eerie, I guess it is that time of year. The ghosts don't sound like the kind in you recent stories who all seem very lovable and capable of solving crimes.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2024
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i think this is a duplicate but oh Well, I will be glad to thank you again. Have a great day!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a Halloween story but I haven't quite figured it out. Did Layla stay and take pictures, or did Abby. Was Layla captured by the mirror. Sorry, some time I overanalyze things.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2024
This is a Halloween story but I haven't quite figured it out. Did Layla stay and take pictures, or did Abby. Was Layla captured by the mirror. Sorry, some time I overanalyze things.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2024
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Thanks! Trying to get all the creepiness out of me by the time the month ends. LOl Thank you for reading and commenting. Have a great day!
Smile, Carol
Comment from Julie Helms
One could stop right after your subtitle:you weren't invited. Okay, sounds good, see ya! Haha. This is a great creepy vignette. You squeezed a whole bunch of tension into just 50 words. My only suggestion would be to swap out 'was' in the last line with an actual action verb...an opportunity to squeeze in a bit more creepy!
Julie
:-)
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2024
One could stop right after your subtitle:you weren't invited. Okay, sounds good, see ya! Haha. This is a great creepy vignette. You squeezed a whole bunch of tension into just 50 words. My only suggestion would be to swap out 'was' in the last line with an actual action verb...an opportunity to squeeze in a bit more creepy!
Julie
:-)
Comment Written 23-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2024
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Thanks! Trying to get all the creepiness out of me by the time the month ends. LOl Thank you for reading and commenting. Have a great day!
Smile, Carol
Comment from LJbutterfly
I knew this story was going to be creepy when I looked at the picture and read the opening line that said, "Don't go." Abby was bold and went inside anyway. It didn't turn out good. The ending was mysterious AND creepy. A great Halloween story.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2024
I knew this story was going to be creepy when I looked at the picture and read the opening line that said, "Don't go." Abby was bold and went inside anyway. It didn't turn out good. The ending was mysterious AND creepy. A great Halloween story.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2024
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Thanks! Trying to get all the creepiness out of me by the time the month ends. LOl Thank you for reading and commenting. Have a great day!
Smile, Carol
Comment from Carol Clark2
OK, this one is a little creepy. 'Tis the season for Halloween stories. Layla's reflection in the mirror leaves the reader to wonder about the happenings in that house. Can't say she wasn't warned! Good job! Carol
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2024
OK, this one is a little creepy. 'Tis the season for Halloween stories. Layla's reflection in the mirror leaves the reader to wonder about the happenings in that house. Can't say she wasn't warned! Good job! Carol
Comment Written 23-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2024
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Thanks! Trying to get all the creepiness out of me by the time the month ends. LOl Thank you for reading and commenting. Have a great day!
Smile, Carol
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Comment from royowen
Heh heh, oh yes, don't go where we are not wanted it's a warning to all of us on this day, written in the annals of horror, we don't know what we are up against when it comes to creepy stories, heh heh, well done, Carol, good story, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2024
Heh heh, oh yes, don't go where we are not wanted it's a warning to all of us on this day, written in the annals of horror, we don't know what we are up against when it comes to creepy stories, heh heh, well done, Carol, good story, blessings Roy
Comment Written 23-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2024
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Yes, when we get into the Halloween spirit things get mighty creepy and I think I would prefer to stay as far away as possible. thanks for the awesome review.
Smiles, Carol
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Well done