Stag
191 Poem4 total reviews
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Such a glorious image which your 1-9-1 reflects beautifully in the poignancy of your words. There is always a sense that this magnificent animal needs to be permanently on the run to escape his predator. I'm wondering if you needed to break the flow with a new sentence when you could have just put a comma and left out the one after 'odds.'
Born/wild, against the odds he lives to be /free. But an excellent contender and my favourite. Good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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Such a glorious image which your 1-9-1 reflects beautifully in the poignancy of your words. There is always a sense that this magnificent animal needs to be permanently on the run to escape his predator. I'm wondering if you needed to break the flow with a new sentence when you could have just put a comma and left out the one after 'odds.'
Born/wild, against the odds he lives to be /free. But an excellent contender and my favourite. Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 19-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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Hi Debbie,
Thank you, thank you. You've come to the rescue again! It's like having my own editor! Punctuation is not my strong point (can you guess?) I've made the change and it is much better. Thank you so much for your interest, time and help xx
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No, I don't blame you for wanting to put a full-stop there and in prose we probably would. It's just that in a short verse like this where fluency is important, it can seem a bit jarring. I can still see that image as I type...
Comment from Cindy Decker 3
Author,
I live in Ann area full of all kinds of hunting. I like that you brought attention to this beautiful creature!
Some in my family hunt, and although I can shoot a rifle, I choose not to.
Here's hoping this hunting season is fruitful for the elk, deer, bear, turkey, etc.
Good luck in the contest!
Cindy
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2024
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Author,
I live in Ann area full of all kinds of hunting. I like that you brought attention to this beautiful creature!
Some in my family hunt, and although I can shoot a rifle, I choose not to.
Here's hoping this hunting season is fruitful for the elk, deer, bear, turkey, etc.
Good luck in the contest!
Cindy
Comment Written 19-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Cindy.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
These are magnificent animals and are often prized and they appear on cushions and bedspreads every year at Christmas, a fine poem, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2024
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These are magnificent animals and are often prized and they appear on cushions and bedspreads every year at Christmas, a fine poem, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 19-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2024
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Thank you Dolly.
Comment from Kahlani
Lucky stag. I wish we were born to be free, but I guess, like anyone, this stag has had his challenges. This is a lovely, reflective poem. So much is conveyed with so few words.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2024
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Lucky stag. I wish we were born to be free, but I guess, like anyone, this stag has had his challenges. This is a lovely, reflective poem. So much is conveyed with so few words.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Kahlani.