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If I Could Be Again

A 1-9-1 poem

4 total reviews 
Comment from lyenochka
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Ah, yes, we can all relate to wanting to chase waves with the energy of a kid. My favorite part is their contagious laughter. Great scene captured in 11 syllables! Best wishes in the contest!

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2024


reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
    Thank you so much, lyenochka, for your kind praise of this very short poem. Have a great day! Rod
Comment from tempeste
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Ciao!

Im in bed it's 24.40 and I m taking a last peek on fanstory and I read your poem.

You wrapped up in those 11 syllables how I feel.

Everything I love is disappearing, our country is fallen apart and there is nothing but gloom on the horizon.

I still have my pine forest , I go there to escape from the grim reality.

I also wish I could be that CAREFREE child that loved to trap tadpoles in a corner of the creek and watch them grow. I was a tomboy ( biggrin)

Congratulations on your ribbon win , I'm surprised your bittersweet poem did not get a sixer .












 Comment Written 20-Oct-2024


reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
    FanStory is not accepting my replies again. Thank you so much, tempeste, for your praise, all those stars, and your continuous support. Rod
Comment from Begin Again
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The innocense of childhood and not fearing anything... not even a wave twice as tall as you. It's a shame that as we age, it disappears. Great poem.
Smiles, Carol

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2024


reply by the author on 19-Oct-2024
    Yes, it is a shame that innocence disappears with age. Many thanks for your kind praise, Carol.
Comment from Kahlani
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Oh, those were the days. What wonderful memories this poem and picture conjure up. I miss those days, but then again, I wouldn't have the wisdom I do today.

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2024


reply by the author on 19-Oct-2024
    Thank you, Kahlani, for sharing 9my poem and your comments.