Inhale
Embrace the freedom11 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This 3-2-1, Inhale, has the proper formatting and finds that moment when the past has been left behind and the new life, which begins with this breath, begins. Nice.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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This 3-2-1, Inhale, has the proper formatting and finds that moment when the past has been left behind and the new life, which begins with this breath, begins. Nice.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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Oh my goodness - thank you!! Okay, you've now put a permanent smile on my face as I get ready to leave for the store this afternoon... guess I'll have to write again soon... lol! This one is really 'from my heart' and my reminder when my emotions try to tank: that along with doing something in the garden as my personal therapy...LOL!! :) Thanx again, Mr. Bill -- it feels good to be back! ;) Yvette
Comment from June Sargent
We do need to just let go at times and breathe. Life is so full of stress these days that we can be easily overwhelmed. Anxiety can destroy us. So I myself have taken up tai chi and am learning to inhale...
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
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We do need to just let go at times and breathe. Life is so full of stress these days that we can be easily overwhelmed. Anxiety can destroy us. So I myself have taken up tai chi and am learning to inhale...
Comment Written 22-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
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Thanx so much for your thoughtful review, June -- and congrats on the tai chi! I was thinking of something like that... my yard has been my therapy these past three years!! :-) Yvette
Comment from Nicki.B
I love this. Sometimes it is just a matter if letting go and I feels Luke a scak of potatoes has been lift from your shoulders and your hearts feels free again. A lovely entry for the 321. Well done and good luck!
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
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I love this. Sometimes it is just a matter if letting go and I feels Luke a scak of potatoes has been lift from your shoulders and your hearts feels free again. A lovely entry for the 321. Well done and good luck!
Comment Written 22-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
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Thank you for your review, Nicki -- so glad you could relate to this 'shorty'! :) Have a wonderful week ahead! :-) Yvette
Comment from CD Richards
I don't think I'm alone in saying I find it hard how to judge a poem with only 6 syllables, even though I've written a few of similar length myself.
The reason I've given this the maximum rating is because I think it is well presented, and has a message that in a sense is immediately obvious, but also open to interpretation by the reader. That's quite something to achieve in 5 words.
What should we be letting go of, to raise our spirits? Anger, emotional baggage, fear, doubt, past disappointments... so many possibilities.
My only point of contention would be the title - "Inhale". Although that's what we must do to take in the fresh, clean atmosphere, it's the act of exhaling that, in my mind, releases the staleness, and is literally "letting go". Then again, "Inhale" definitely sounds better than "Exhale" as a title!
That's not a serious criticism, just a random thought that the title prompted.
Anyway, I think you've done a great job in this limited format, and wish you all the best in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
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I don't think I'm alone in saying I find it hard how to judge a poem with only 6 syllables, even though I've written a few of similar length myself.
The reason I've given this the maximum rating is because I think it is well presented, and has a message that in a sense is immediately obvious, but also open to interpretation by the reader. That's quite something to achieve in 5 words.
What should we be letting go of, to raise our spirits? Anger, emotional baggage, fear, doubt, past disappointments... so many possibilities.
My only point of contention would be the title - "Inhale". Although that's what we must do to take in the fresh, clean atmosphere, it's the act of exhaling that, in my mind, releases the staleness, and is literally "letting go". Then again, "Inhale" definitely sounds better than "Exhale" as a title!
That's not a serious criticism, just a random thought that the title prompted.
Anyway, I think you've done a great job in this limited format, and wish you all the best in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
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Wow!! So, you just made my weekend, sir!! Thank you! It's been a while since I really let my heart find my pen (long story, but let's go with 'I am feeling my new self in a different place and different situation')... it honestly feels good!! Still find the tear now and again, but this life is so beautiful I refuse to waste any of it: Forward always!!! :) ;) I do so appreciate that those few words could touch you as they -- in one form or another -- were sortof a motto these past couple of years... and still are.
And I do miss you and your random thoughts -- so thanks for that, too -- bring them on, I say... The world needs more 'random honesty' and less 'form fitting'...lol! I promise to do the same...
You take care out there and thanx so much... again! :-) :-) Yvette
Comment from jaded831
Your poem captures the free feeling one has from just letting go, from life's daily pressures. I feel sorry for those not privileged enough to do so, such as in war areas. Your poem reminds us how lucky we are.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
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Your poem captures the free feeling one has from just letting go, from life's daily pressures. I feel sorry for those not privileged enough to do so, such as in war areas. Your poem reminds us how lucky we are.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
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Thank you for your review, my lady -- so glad you could relate to this 'shorty'! :) Have a wonderful week ahead! Yvette
Comment from nancyjam
What a wonderful feeling when we let go of our worries, anger, sorrow, etc. Your 3-2-1 poem makes such an impact in just a few words.
The picture is an added bonus. Good luck inn the contest.
Nancy
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
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What a wonderful feeling when we let go of our worries, anger, sorrow, etc. Your 3-2-1 poem makes such an impact in just a few words.
The picture is an added bonus. Good luck inn the contest.
Nancy
Comment Written 21-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
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Thank you for your review, Nancy -- so glad you could relate to this 'shorty'! :) Have a wonderful week ahead! Yvette
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Oh, I absolutely LOVE this one! Succinct but oh-so meaningful, and your artwork to complement it could not be more perfect. In my opinion, this has Winner's Circle ALL over it! Good luck to you, Mystery Writer!! Xo
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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Oh, I absolutely LOVE this one! Succinct but oh-so meaningful, and your artwork to complement it could not be more perfect. In my opinion, this has Winner's Circle ALL over it! Good luck to you, Mystery Writer!! Xo
Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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Thank you so very much for your review, Rachelle!! :-) :-) So good to know my sentiment found its way into your world! ;-) ;-)
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
This is so incredibly powerful! The way you share such a deep emotion with just a few words is really beautiful. This is a beautiful poem that I really enjoyed. Great job with the contest prompt!
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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This is so incredibly powerful! The way you share such a deep emotion with just a few words is really beautiful. This is a beautiful poem that I really enjoyed. Great job with the contest prompt!
Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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Thanks so much for your thoughtful review, Michael -- so good to hear that my sentiment found its way to you!
Comment from Begin Again
Awesome! Yes, opening your heart and mind and letting nature, God, and life into your heart, mind and soul.... what a head rush!
Great poem for so few words!
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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Awesome! Yes, opening your heart and mind and letting nature, God, and life into your heart, mind and soul.... what a head rush!
Great poem for so few words!
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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Thanks so much for your thoughtful review, Carol -- so good to hear that my sentiment found its way to you!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and presentation.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-A good opening line with a good premise.
-Very good closing lines that show how
that has made your heart feel.
-A good entry; good luck!!
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reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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-Nice image and presentation.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-A good opening line with a good premise.
-Very good closing lines that show how
that has made your heart feel.
-A good entry; good luck!!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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Thanks so much for your thoughtful review, Pam -- appreciate your taking the time!
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You are very welcome.