haiku (ominous dark clouds)
Haiku Poem5 total reviews
Comment from jessizero
This was a great pictureless haiku. You got the syllable count right, and your formatting helped illustrate your poem. I liked the thought of it being "a child's new playground." Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2024
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This was a great pictureless haiku. You got the syllable count right, and your formatting helped illustrate your poem. I liked the thought of it being "a child's new playground." Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2024
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Thank you very much
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Thank you very much
Comment from papa55mike
The simple things always bring the biggest smiles, and jumping in muddy puddles is one. What a wonderfully written poem. Good luck in the contest! Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2024
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The simple things always bring the biggest smiles, and jumping in muddy puddles is one. What a wonderfully written poem. Good luck in the contest! Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 18-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2024
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Thank you very much
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Thank you very much
Comment from Begin Again
That ominous dark cloud must have brought lots of rain and sounds like it made a pond. Definitely painted a picture within a few syllables. Thanks for sharing.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2024
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That ominous dark cloud must have brought lots of rain and sounds like it made a pond. Definitely painted a picture within a few syllables. Thanks for sharing.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 18-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2024
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Thank you very much
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Thank you very much
Comment from Sue Smith
Having the black background and blue writing works very well to create the right atmosphere when it's a no picture contest. It sets the tone from the start. I also liked the idea behind the haiku. It's so easy to see a rainy day as dreary or a nuisance and this shows it in a different light. But I did hesitate over the word 'pon. I stopped to think that 'oh yes, you mean upon' and also to wonder why you used it. Couldn't you just say on? Sorry if there's an underlying reason for using it that I haven't picked up on, but it did make me falter over an otherwise very successful haiku
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2024
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Having the black background and blue writing works very well to create the right atmosphere when it's a no picture contest. It sets the tone from the start. I also liked the idea behind the haiku. It's so easy to see a rainy day as dreary or a nuisance and this shows it in a different light. But I did hesitate over the word 'pon. I stopped to think that 'oh yes, you mean upon' and also to wonder why you used it. Couldn't you just say on? Sorry if there's an underlying reason for using it that I haven't picked up on, but it did make me falter over an otherwise very successful haiku
Comment Written 18-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2024
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Thank you very much, just my choice of words I guess
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Thank you very much, just my choice of words I guess
Comment from royowen
When I was a young boy I loved the rain, I would Create a cubby lean to with the rain beating against the canvass, this is a beautifully written haiku, well done, good luk, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2024
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When I was a young boy I loved the rain, I would Create a cubby lean to with the rain beating against the canvass, this is a beautifully written haiku, well done, good luk, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 18-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2024
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Thank you very much