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Acrostic poem of betrayal20 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
Congratulations on an excellent first post. It's eloquent, presented in an original way, and it powerfully expresses the theme of betrayal. Very well done. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
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Congratulations on an excellent first post. It's eloquent, presented in an original way, and it powerfully expresses the theme of betrayal. Very well done. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 02-Oct-2024
Comment from DonandVicki
This is one of several acrostics that I have reviewed this evening and I can say this is the best. I got the strong sense of betrayal in the short, but to the point poem. well crafted. Love blinds.
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This is one of several acrostics that I have reviewed this evening and I can say this is the best. I got the strong sense of betrayal in the short, but to the point poem. well crafted. Love blinds.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2024
Comment from jake cosmos aller
a great first posting I look forward to reading more. I like the way you
build the tension to the very last word which sums up the feeling of the poem nicely.
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a great first posting I look forward to reading more. I like the way you
build the tension to the very last word which sums up the feeling of the poem nicely.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2024
Comment from Cindy Decker 3
Author,
Congrats on your first Fanstory entry. You'll find we are a friendly, caring community--an outlet to express your thoughts and hopes.
I really like your betrayal poem. It's caustic and to the point.
Your photo complements your poem well.
Best wishes,
Cindy
Just a suggestion: your poem would read better if you used dashes, instead of commas after 'never' and bliss.
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Author,
Congrats on your first Fanstory entry. You'll find we are a friendly, caring community--an outlet to express your thoughts and hopes.
I really like your betrayal poem. It's caustic and to the point.
Your photo complements your poem well.
Best wishes,
Cindy
Just a suggestion: your poem would read better if you used dashes, instead of commas after 'never' and bliss.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2024
Comment from artisart4u
This is a nice poem about betrayal.
I like your picture and the way you put your acrostic poem together.
Congratulations on being Recognized and good luck with your poem.
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This is a nice poem about betrayal.
I like your picture and the way you put your acrostic poem together.
Congratulations on being Recognized and good luck with your poem.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2024
Comment from estory
The halting rhythm here seems to capture the halting steps towards healing a relationship. I always like it when form and framework underscores the theme. estory
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The halting rhythm here seems to capture the halting steps towards healing a relationship. I always like it when form and framework underscores the theme. estory
Comment Written 01-Oct-2024
Comment from Boogienights
This is a very powerful poem with a,lot of emotion to it. I feel that the writer has lived this and that's why it has impact. Best of luck in the contest. :)
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This is a very powerful poem with a,lot of emotion to it. I feel that the writer has lived this and that's why it has impact. Best of luck in the contest. :)
Comment Written 01-Oct-2024
Comment from Frank Malley
This is a skillful poem that uses the form wherein each line's first letters end up spell a word, in this case: Betrayal. And each line addresses feelings that precede and follow betrayal. There are strong words - Yank - ; there are repeated words that emphasize the recurrence of injury through a willingness to love; there sonic constructions - "blinded by bliss" - whose sound may hide a bitter realization. A sense of individual existence is imagined by the line "Across your world and into mine." And the bitter use of the word 'laugh' acutely pinpoints the cruel realities that endings of love can include.
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This is a skillful poem that uses the form wherein each line's first letters end up spell a word, in this case: Betrayal. And each line addresses feelings that precede and follow betrayal. There are strong words - Yank - ; there are repeated words that emphasize the recurrence of injury through a willingness to love; there sonic constructions - "blinded by bliss" - whose sound may hide a bitter realization. A sense of individual existence is imagined by the line "Across your world and into mine." And the bitter use of the word 'laugh' acutely pinpoints the cruel realities that endings of love can include.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2024
Comment from gansach
First, congratulations on your First Milestone post and welcome! This is a great entry for the Betrayal Poetry competition. I like that you have done it as an acrostic. I've reviewed several entries so far, and yours is unique. It is also very well done. Good photo to illustrate it. Nice presentation with the bold first letters to emphasize the Acrostic. My only suggestion would be to use a little larger print size to make it easier to read. Nicely done! Best wishes!
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First, congratulations on your First Milestone post and welcome! This is a great entry for the Betrayal Poetry competition. I like that you have done it as an acrostic. I've reviewed several entries so far, and yours is unique. It is also very well done. Good photo to illustrate it. Nice presentation with the bold first letters to emphasize the Acrostic. My only suggestion would be to use a little larger print size to make it easier to read. Nicely done! Best wishes!
Comment Written 01-Oct-2024
Comment from mermaids
The theme of betrayal comes through in your words. Welcome to Fanstory, I see this is your first post. Excellent acrostic form and use to words to create a feeling of betrayal.
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The theme of betrayal comes through in your words. Welcome to Fanstory, I see this is your first post. Excellent acrostic form and use to words to create a feeling of betrayal.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2024