Coming of Age
a 5-7-514 total reviews
Comment from tempeste
Ciao poet, you now have 3 votes.
We have all been there and we know how many crazy things we have done in our teens.
It is a phase and parents can only pray their kids survive it and realise there are consequences and become responsible.
There are those that get pregnant, others finish up crippled doing crazy daredevil things like walking on top of a moving train
They even post them on tic-toc .
Love the artwork.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Ciao poet, you now have 3 votes.
We have all been there and we know how many crazy things we have done in our teens.
It is a phase and parents can only pray their kids survive it and realise there are consequences and become responsible.
There are those that get pregnant, others finish up crippled doing crazy daredevil things like walking on top of a moving train
They even post them on tic-toc .
Love the artwork.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Thank you so much sweet Franca!
Comment from jake cosmos aller
a good poem about insomnia, wild things that appear in one's nightmares, and the problems facing young people just starting out in life and becoming obsessed with the dark side of life.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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a good poem about insomnia, wild things that appear in one's nightmares, and the problems facing young people just starting out in life and becoming obsessed with the dark side of life.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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Thanks so much Jake!
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Thanks so much Jake!
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi
This poem reminds us of the wild and stupid things we sometimes do in our youthful years. I like how the artwork matches the last line which is the title of the cover of the book of that name.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest.
Joan
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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Hi
This poem reminds us of the wild and stupid things we sometimes do in our youthful years. I like how the artwork matches the last line which is the title of the cover of the book of that name.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest.
Joan
Comment Written 12-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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Thanks so much Joan.
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Don't mention it.
Joan
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Great artwork and nice presentation.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-Effective imagery describing the teens
who are trying to prove they are brave
and can face anything.
-A very good closing line with the nod to the book.
-A very good entry; good luck!
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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-Great artwork and nice presentation.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-Effective imagery describing the teens
who are trying to prove they are brave
and can face anything.
-A very good closing line with the nod to the book.
-A very good entry; good luck!
Comment Written 12-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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Thank you Pam.
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You are welcome.
Comment from June Sargent
We have two teenage grandsons - I really understand your words here. Naturally, they loved hearing about where the wild things are as toddlers. Now, the adventure begins...let's hope they do so with wisdom.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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We have two teenage grandsons - I really understand your words here. Naturally, they loved hearing about where the wild things are as toddlers. Now, the adventure begins...let's hope they do so with wisdom.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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Thanks so much June!
Comment from Sue Smith
This is a great original take on the 5-7-5 format and I particularly like the internal rhyme between seeking and peek. I also thought the punctuation worked very well, that little pause before the third line gives it a nice bit of weight. It's difficult to show skill in just 3 lines but it's clearly here
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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This is a great original take on the 5-7-5 format and I particularly like the internal rhyme between seeking and peek. I also thought the punctuation worked very well, that little pause before the third line gives it a nice bit of weight. It's difficult to show skill in just 3 lines but it's clearly here
Comment Written 12-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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Thanks so much Sue.
Comment from Cindy Decker 3
Author, I like your 5-7-5 poem for its humor and truth. Teens are often little diablos who feel immortal and sometimes take risks they remember as adults with relief that they got through them alive. Sometimes, they're proud of accomplishments that took a lot of work and intellectual risks.
Great thought-provoking poem, Melissa.
Best wishes,
Cindy
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2024
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Author, I like your 5-7-5 poem for its humor and truth. Teens are often little diablos who feel immortal and sometimes take risks they remember as adults with relief that they got through them alive. Sometimes, they're proud of accomplishments that took a lot of work and intellectual risks.
Great thought-provoking poem, Melissa.
Best wishes,
Cindy
Comment Written 11-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2024
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Thank you so much Cindy. I really appreciate your wonderful words full of wisdom.
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Thank you so much Cindy. I really appreciate your wonderful words full of wisdom.
Melissa
Comment from Begin Again
So true! Once a young child crosses the line between being a kid and a teenager, all sorts of changes happen, including their attitude. The quiet one suddenly wants to see what he or she has been missing. Your poem says it all!
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2024
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So true! Once a young child crosses the line between being a kid and a teenager, all sorts of changes happen, including their attitude. The quiet one suddenly wants to see what he or she has been missing. Your poem says it all!
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 11-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2024
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Thanks so much Carol!
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Thanks so much Carol!
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Thanks so much Carol!
Comment from nancyjam
This is such a good entry for the contest. It's so true. Teens are adventuress and want to try new things, but often don't know exactly what they are venturing into.
Good luck in the contest.
Nancy
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2024
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This is such a good entry for the contest. It's so true. Teens are adventuress and want to try new things, but often don't know exactly what they are venturing into.
Good luck in the contest.
Nancy
Comment Written 11-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2024
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Thanks so much Nancy!
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You're welcome
Comment from Nicki.B
Haha I mist say this really did make me chuckle because it so true. My eldest daughter is 25 and I've got two more girls 14 and 12. So I'd like to think I've got experience.
The poem is great your choice of words, title and image come together perfectly. Well done!
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2024
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Haha I mist say this really did make me chuckle because it so true. My eldest daughter is 25 and I've got two more girls 14 and 12. So I'd like to think I've got experience.
The poem is great your choice of words, title and image come together perfectly. Well done!
Comment Written 11-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2024
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Thank you Nicki!!
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Thank you Nicki!!