Obsessed with the Moon
A man is obsessed with the moon29 total reviews
Comment from EeanBlack
Wow. This is very pretty. The image is absolutely stunning. You thank us for reading your poem, when, in reality, it is us who should thank you for the beauty of the poem. So many of you have serious talent. Thank you for the tears of joy. They are few and far between these days.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024
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Wow. This is very pretty. The image is absolutely stunning. You thank us for reading your poem, when, in reality, it is us who should thank you for the beauty of the poem. So many of you have serious talent. Thank you for the tears of joy. They are few and far between these days.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024
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Thank you EeanBlack for this wonderful detailed and lovely review.
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This is better than what kiwisteveh said to me. I guess he hates American politics or something. Thank you.
Comment from bob cullen
What a truly delightful poem. It's flow of words and the accompanying rhyme deliver poetry in its purest form. For me, it delivered pictures along with an enchanting melody. I hope your recovery is speedy and I look forward to reading more of your work.
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What a truly delightful poem. It's flow of words and the accompanying rhyme deliver poetry in its purest form. For me, it delivered pictures along with an enchanting melody. I hope your recovery is speedy and I look forward to reading more of your work.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2024
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Such a very good poem to take a break with. I have had four surgeries on my back alone, so you have my sympathy and good wishes, and prayers. I think that all we do and are is energy. And if 20 people send their wishes and prayers to you every day they build and add up to good energy for you. Since I have been on fan story my pain level is down. So you have my good thoughts
and kind wishes zooming their way to you. Great poem. Karen
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Such a very good poem to take a break with. I have had four surgeries on my back alone, so you have my sympathy and good wishes, and prayers. I think that all we do and are is energy. And if 20 people send their wishes and prayers to you every day they build and add up to good energy for you. Since I have been on fan story my pain level is down. So you have my good thoughts
and kind wishes zooming their way to you. Great poem. Karen
Comment Written 11-Sep-2024
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
I wish you nothing but the best in your recovery. I suffered a herniated disk and a bulged disk, one on top of the other, last Fall, and I'm still trying to get to a pain-free place. I'm certainly better.
I love the lovely rhymes here, and the image of "the sunset frames the ocean's door".
I'm not sure who this mysterious man is on the bench, or why he is obsessed with the moon, but I like that "she" is aware of him and will remain with him in his dreams.
My only critique is with the image you have used. Since the main focus of your poem is the moon, I would give us the image of the one you have written about.
I truly hope that you feel better soon.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024
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I wish you nothing but the best in your recovery. I suffered a herniated disk and a bulged disk, one on top of the other, last Fall, and I'm still trying to get to a pain-free place. I'm certainly better.
I love the lovely rhymes here, and the image of "the sunset frames the ocean's door".
I'm not sure who this mysterious man is on the bench, or why he is obsessed with the moon, but I like that "she" is aware of him and will remain with him in his dreams.
My only critique is with the image you have used. Since the main focus of your poem is the moon, I would give us the image of the one you have written about.
I truly hope that you feel better soon.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 11-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024
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Thank you Pam for your constructive criticism and for your detailed and lovely review
Comment from Harry Craft
Oh, sorry to hear about your back surgery. I hope you recover well. I really enjoyed reading this poem. The rhyming scheme was immaculate and the photo that went with it was very beautiful. Keep up the good work!
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024
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Oh, sorry to hear about your back surgery. I hope you recover well. I really enjoyed reading this poem. The rhyming scheme was immaculate and the photo that went with it was very beautiful. Keep up the good work!
Comment Written 11-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024
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Thank you Harry for your well wishes and detailed and lovely review
I spent eight weeks in the hospital, but I'm doing much better
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You are so welcome Pam. Get well!
Comment from rspoet
Hello Pam,
This is an excellent poem with wonderful imagery,
smooth meter and solid. The personification also
adds to the atmosphere of the moonlit night.
Nice choice of the sunset photograph which leads
to the coming of the moon.
Well done
Best wishes.
Robert
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Hello Pam,
This is an excellent poem with wonderful imagery,
smooth meter and solid. The personification also
adds to the atmosphere of the moonlit night.
Nice choice of the sunset photograph which leads
to the coming of the moon.
Well done
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 10-Sep-2024
Comment from Katiemae1977
This is splendid Pam. You've outdone yourself here. Flawless rhyme and meter along with a well moving flow makes this a spectacular read. So sorry to hear you're in rehab. I'm in a nursing home for good I'm afraid. I wish you a speedy and thorough recovery.
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977
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This is splendid Pam. You've outdone yourself here. Flawless rhyme and meter along with a well moving flow makes this a spectacular read. So sorry to hear you're in rehab. I'm in a nursing home for good I'm afraid. I wish you a speedy and thorough recovery.
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977
Comment Written 10-Sep-2024
Comment from Ulla
Hi, Pam, I hope you will be back home soon and recover well. As a sailor this poem really resonated with me. It's beautifully written. I simply loved it. All best, Ulla xcx
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024
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Hi, Pam, I hope you will be back home soon and recover well. As a sailor this poem really resonated with me. It's beautifully written. I simply loved it. All best, Ulla xcx
Comment Written 10-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024
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Thank you Ulla for your well wishes and your lovely review
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
I'm so glad you posted and said something in your notes about where you've been because I had noticed that you haven't been around for a few weeks. Hope you are healing and that your rehab is coming along at a good pace. Hurry back. you are missed. Thanks for sharing this lovely poem.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024
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I'm so glad you posted and said something in your notes about where you've been because I had noticed that you haven't been around for a few weeks. Hope you are healing and that your rehab is coming along at a good pace. Hurry back. you are missed. Thanks for sharing this lovely poem.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024
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Thank you Marilyn for your well wishes. I have been home for almost a month now, but I'm still catching up on everything here. Thank you for this lovely review
Comment from Shanbreen
Pam, my friend. I know you are in pain but I am amazed to see that you, in spite of your pain, posted a poem. I admire your dedication to writing poems.
I had to read this poem twice (getting old) to figure out the blending of the moon and the sailor as "she" and 'he". Cleverly done.
As usual, this is a beautifully written poem with a stunning visual. You must get better soon. We need to read more.
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Pam, my friend. I know you are in pain but I am amazed to see that you, in spite of your pain, posted a poem. I admire your dedication to writing poems.
I had to read this poem twice (getting old) to figure out the blending of the moon and the sailor as "she" and 'he". Cleverly done.
As usual, this is a beautifully written poem with a stunning visual. You must get better soon. We need to read more.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2024