Maintaining Equilibrium
A kanshi poem15 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This is a very good question to pose. It could even make a powerful debate.: "Do all countries feel this grim? Beleaguered spirits jostled?" I especially like the last stanza.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2024
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This is a very good question to pose. It could even make a powerful debate.: "Do all countries feel this grim? Beleaguered spirits jostled?" I especially like the last stanza.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2024
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Thanks very much, Liz. I am so anti-political, but this assignment from the weekly Japanese Poetry Club made me stretch myself by examining how I feel. Thanks for your affirmation that it turned out well. I was SOOO out of my element with this one!! xoxox
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Sounds like you were able to balance it out.
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I think you're giving me more credit than I deserve!! xoxo
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Credit where credit is due
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I am also very antipolitical anti-religious anti-anti.
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Ah! No wonder we like each other! xo
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lol
Comment from judiverse
Great work! The artwork itself seems to have multiple meanings. Beautiful interpretation of the Kanshi form and great comments about it in your notes. I like your use of rhyme. Your sentiments echo mine. I'm afraid America's light has dimmed. I believe it's a cultural decline. I've recently seen articles by people who want to rewrite the Constitution. It's happened to great countries in the past. As was said in the Pogo comic strip, we have met the enemy and it is us. I hope the anger will not get completely out of control. I haven't read any of the Kanshi, but I would imagine they deal with similar issues. Sorry to be late with this, but I am so behind in getting to my PM. judi
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2024
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Great work! The artwork itself seems to have multiple meanings. Beautiful interpretation of the Kanshi form and great comments about it in your notes. I like your use of rhyme. Your sentiments echo mine. I'm afraid America's light has dimmed. I believe it's a cultural decline. I've recently seen articles by people who want to rewrite the Constitution. It's happened to great countries in the past. As was said in the Pogo comic strip, we have met the enemy and it is us. I hope the anger will not get completely out of control. I haven't read any of the Kanshi, but I would imagine they deal with similar issues. Sorry to be late with this, but I am so behind in getting to my PM. judi
Comment Written 04-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2024
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My goodness; you NEVER have to apologize for being "late" in reviewing me. I am always appreciate whenever a review arrives. I love to read whatever you write because it's always so well-thought-out and expressed. You never gloss over in your reviews. They're deep and meaningful. Thank you for this one. xoxox
Comment from Bill Schott
This kanshi poem, Maintaining Equilibrium, has the proper formatting and presents this question of stress on the fabric of society as it pushes through the present quarrels and aims for the bright future.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2024
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This kanshi poem, Maintaining Equilibrium, has the proper formatting and presents this question of stress on the fabric of society as it pushes through the present quarrels and aims for the bright future.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2024
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Yes, that is right. Thanks for the review, Bill. xoxo
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Thank you for participating in the Japanese Poetry Club Kanshi poem event. Good syllable count and connection between lines. Beautiful presentation and imagery.
Good job,
Gypsy
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2024
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Thank you for participating in the Japanese Poetry Club Kanshi poem event. Good syllable count and connection between lines. Beautiful presentation and imagery.
Good job,
Gypsy
Comment Written 02-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2024
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Good teacher; that's why!! Thanks for tge affirming review! Xo
Comment from Sugarray77
Hello Rachelle. You did a wonderful job penning this exceptional Kanshi. The flow of this verse was well crafted and the theme was poignant and well chosen. I really enjoyed reading it and stopped to pause and ponder your message. Thanks for sharing.
Melissa
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2024
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Hello Rachelle. You did a wonderful job penning this exceptional Kanshi. The flow of this verse was well crafted and the theme was poignant and well chosen. I really enjoyed reading it and stopped to pause and ponder your message. Thanks for sharing.
Melissa
Comment Written 02-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2024
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Wow. The ultimate compliment. Thank you, Melissa, for this really affirming review. It means the world to me because you're so good at every kind of poem there is. xoxox
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Rachelle,
I think you captured perfectly the feelings that abound in this country and apparently around the world. I believe we are being set up for a major change in how the whole world is going to be governed and it's not going to be good. I love the picture you chose, and the words you wrote were spot on gal. Well done.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2024
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Hello Rachelle,
I think you captured perfectly the feelings that abound in this country and apparently around the world. I believe we are being set up for a major change in how the whole world is going to be governed and it's not going to be good. I love the picture you chose, and the words you wrote were spot on gal. Well done.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 02-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Tom. The picture was supplied by the facilitator of this Japanese Poetry Club I've been doing this summer, Gypsy. She gives us a picture and teaches us a new Japanese poetry form every week. I've loved the way it's stretched me and made me smarter! It's been great, and she's taught me a lot. I appreciate your kind and encouraging words. xoxox
Comment from BethShelby
I don't know a lot about Japanese poetry but this seems to work in light of the way our country is behaving along political lines. There seems to be a lot of discontent and division and tempers flare even among family members. Nice done.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2024
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I don't know a lot about Japanese poetry but this seems to work in light of the way our country is behaving along political lines. There seems to be a lot of discontent and division and tempers flare even among family members. Nice done.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2024
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Yes, the acrimony is at a fever pitch. Battle lines are drawn as a result of it. I actually know people who've ended lifelong friendships because of their political affiliation!! It just boggles my mind.
Anyway, thank you for the astute review. I do appreciate it. xoxo
Comment from BethShelby
I don't know a lot about Japanese poetry but this seems to work in light of the way our country is behaving along political lines. There seems to be a lot of discontent and division and tempers flare even among family members. Nice done.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2024
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I don't know a lot about Japanese poetry but this seems to work in light of the way our country is behaving along political lines. There seems to be a lot of discontent and division and tempers flare even among family members. Nice done.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2024
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This double-posted, Beth.
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I don't know why. I only hit it once. Sorry. Maybe you get a extry review.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this club entry with us. Yes, it seems many countries are in as much of a turmoil as we, in the US are. I have many friends who live overseas for one reason or another. It's scary what's happening to the world.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2024
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Thank you for sharing this club entry with us. Yes, it seems many countries are in as much of a turmoil as we, in the US are. I have many friends who live overseas for one reason or another. It's scary what's happening to the world.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2024
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It's simply awful. My mantra keeps being: There's no good candidate!! I honestly think that, for the first time since 1974 when I began voting, this year I will vote for every office except the Presidency. I do not want to be responsible for either of those inferior candidates being at the helm of our country. UGH.
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I tend to agree with you, I can't seem to vote for either candidate.
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I tend to agree with you, I can't seem to vote for either candidate.
Comment from Lori Mulligan
This is a very soul stirring poem and I liked it very much. I also like how you provide descriptions below your poems about the style and tradition of the types of poems you write.
Thanks for a great poem and a great education!
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2024
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This is a very soul stirring poem and I liked it very much. I also like how you provide descriptions below your poems about the style and tradition of the types of poems you write.
Thanks for a great poem and a great education!
Comment Written 01-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2024
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I'm learning, myself. These poems are my weekly assignment from Gypsy in the club she facilitates called The Japanese Poetry Club.