The Guy You Love to Hate
A Teikei-shi for the club43 total reviews
Comment from Carlos' girl
The title caught my eye. Very cute. I like this poetry form with the rhymes and you did a good job with it. We all know that guy who thinks he's great... Ugh!
Nice job Debi
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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The title caught my eye. Very cute. I like this poetry form with the rhymes and you did a good job with it. We all know that guy who thinks he's great... Ugh!
Nice job Debi
Comment Written 03-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Hi Judith, and thanks so very much for all the kind comments for this silly poem. Yes, LOL, I think we all have met this guy at some point in our life.
Thanks again and it was so good to hear from you. Love, Debi
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My pleasure
Comment from Patty Mazzurco
Hahaha
You've got a knack for getting straight to the point with a bit of attitude, and it works perfectly here.This made me smile! I love how you captured so much with just a few lines. It's short, sharp, and has a fun rhythm to it. The playful tone really comes through, and I can totally imagine the frustration mixed with humor. Love love love it!
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2024
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Hahaha
You've got a knack for getting straight to the point with a bit of attitude, and it works perfectly here.This made me smile! I love how you captured so much with just a few lines. It's short, sharp, and has a fun rhythm to it. The playful tone really comes through, and I can totally imagine the frustration mixed with humor. Love love love it!
Comment Written 31-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2024
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Patty, you are so sweet and always so gracious in your reviews. I just want you to know how very much you are appreciated. Thank you from the bottom of my heart, dear friend.
And I would like to ask if you'd mind sharing your birthday? I ask because if you would like one of my biographical poems for your birthday, I do them for my special friends and reviewers as a thank you, since I am not able to review much in return. Please just let me know one way or another.
Thanks again, my dear friend. Love, Debi
Comment from Ric Myworld
With over a 50% divorce rate, I guess it's safe to say that most people have made some bad choices in people. But some lucky people like you meet Mr. Right. :-) Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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With over a 50% divorce rate, I guess it's safe to say that most people have made some bad choices in people. But some lucky people like you meet Mr. Right. :-) Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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LOL, there are days I'd like to trade him in. Hehehe! But after fifty years it would be for just another old guy. So I might as well keep him. JK
I don't for the life of me know where I got it in my head to write this one, but I was just in one of those moods. LOL.. you know how that is, right?
Thanks Ric, you are the best. I especially appreciate your kind comment.
Love, Debi
Comment from Katiemae1977
Men! None of them are very effective communicators are they?
And I've always said the key to a good marriage is communication if you have to resort to sign language.
This is quite cute and fits the club requirements perfectly Debbi.
I got a kick out of it!
Katiemae1977
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Men! None of them are very effective communicators are they?
And I've always said the key to a good marriage is communication if you have to resort to sign language.
This is quite cute and fits the club requirements perfectly Debbi.
I got a kick out of it!
Katiemae1977
Comment Written 31-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Boy oh boy, Katie, after fifty years of marriage, I have to agree with you on that. My husband would do anything to avoid any kind of confrontation. So if it something that I need to discuss, forget it. Sorry, it just happened so LOL, you couldn't have come around at a better time. However, I love the guy and he treats me pretty good so I have to forgive him that he just hates discussing things. Thanks for your awesome review and comments. You are the best, my friend. Spot on today!! Love, Debi
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You are most welcome Debi. Best of luck to you and your husband!
Comment from Neonewman
A lot is said in this short, well-structured piece, Debi. I enjoy reading such work that tells these relatable tales. Thank you for sharing, my friend.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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A lot is said in this short, well-structured piece, Debi. I enjoy reading such work that tells these relatable tales. Thank you for sharing, my friend.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 31-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Awe, Steve, thanks so much for the awesome comments for my silly poem. I love trying something new. Especially since rhyming is my favorite, I just thought I'd pick on this guy today and make him look kinda narcissistic. LOL.. thanks again, dear friend.
Love, Debi
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Always a pleasure, Debi.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Ha ha ha, this is funny Debi and I enjoyed the humour and the clever rhyming and many women should take our advice here and choose wisely before they marry, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Ha ha ha, this is funny Debi and I enjoyed the humour and the clever rhyming and many women should take our advice here and choose wisely before they marry, love Dolly x
Comment Written 30-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Thank you so much, Dolly. Yes, I think too many of us knew this man, but left him high and dry. LOL. I have no idea what possessed me to write this silly verse, but it was a lot of fun. I guess that is what counts. Thanks for the kind comments, my sweet friend. Love and hugs! Debi
Comment from karenina
I've seen a couple of these on site now... I'm thinking Gypsy's club must be very popular! It is unusual to see rhyme in Japanese forms...and monorhyme is not required but (of course) you took it the extra step!
I'm thinking if the form is 5-7-5-7-7 it would always be 31 syllables, right? How could it be less?
(I'm probably overthinking this)
Your count is perfect, your monorhymes are perfect and I happen to think the theme is perfect!
Nothing worse than a mate who doesn't communicate!
My bet is this will do super well!
Karenina
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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I've seen a couple of these on site now... I'm thinking Gypsy's club must be very popular! It is unusual to see rhyme in Japanese forms...and monorhyme is not required but (of course) you took it the extra step!
I'm thinking if the form is 5-7-5-7-7 it would always be 31 syllables, right? How could it be less?
(I'm probably overthinking this)
Your count is perfect, your monorhymes are perfect and I happen to think the theme is perfect!
Nothing worse than a mate who doesn't communicate!
My bet is this will do super well!
Karenina
Comment Written 30-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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Hi sweetie, I think it is ok to use six syllables instead of seven, which makes no sense to me since this is the way it is written as a 5-7-5-7-7. So you are not over thinking at all. You are right on.
Which is usually the case and I appreciate all the very nice comments, my sweet friend. Love and hugs! Debi
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With every firm comes an exception!
It's hard to keep up with!
Comment from jessizero
I enjoyed this poem very much! It was funny, and it reminds me of people I have met over the years. Thank you so much for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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I enjoyed this poem very much! It was funny, and it reminds me of people I have met over the years. Thank you so much for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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LOL, I think too many of us have met this man, Jesse. The main thing is not to marry them. Haha. Thanks for the kind comments, my sweet friend. As always it is so appreciated. Love, Debi
Comment from Ulla
Hi Debi, sounds just like one of the candidates for president later this year. But maybe that's not who you were thinking of? I loved your poem. A lovely Japanese poetry form. Ulla xcx
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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Hi Debi, sounds just like one of the candidates for president later this year. But maybe that's not who you were thinking of? I loved your poem. A lovely Japanese poetry form. Ulla xcx
Comment Written 30-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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LOL, Ulla, the last thing I was thinking was politics, but I can see why you thought so when you first saw this. After all the word, debate can be political or in marriages. Haha. Thanks for having some fun with me with this poem.
I do love trying something different every once in a while, and also for the nice comments, my sweet friend. Love and hugs to you. Debi
Comment from Brenda Strauser
Hi Debi, I like your poem. How true this is. Some guys think they are always right. The picture goes well with the poem. I've never heard of this type of poem. Very good job. Love, Brenda
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Hi Debi, I like your poem. How true this is. Some guys think they are always right. The picture goes well with the poem. I've never heard of this type of poem. Very good job. Love, Brenda
Comment Written 30-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Brenda, LOL, I think too many of us have met this man. The main thing is not to marry them. Thanks for the kind comments, my sweet friend. As always it is so appreciated. Love, Debi