Spirited Justice
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Comment from karenina
Oh no! The key was there for the taking? That's unfortunate! And isn't it coincidental (not) that Beckett gets beaten within an inch of his life NOW--
He's got to pull through. We can't let him be saddled with the murder of his daughter.
Listen to me. "we" -- That's what you do, Carol. You DRAW US IN!
I think you have a few evil eddie characters in one line.
When I try to copy it for you the system won't let me review go through...
They are easy to delete thank goodness.
You're driving this story forward with a clear head and deft imagination!
Karenina
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Oh no! The key was there for the taking? That's unfortunate! And isn't it coincidental (not) that Beckett gets beaten within an inch of his life NOW--
He's got to pull through. We can't let him be saddled with the murder of his daughter.
Listen to me. "we" -- That's what you do, Carol. You DRAW US IN!
I think you have a few evil eddie characters in one line.
When I try to copy it for you the system won't let me review go through...
They are easy to delete thank goodness.
You're driving this story forward with a clear head and deft imagination!
Karenina
Comment Written 31-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Two more chapters and you get to rest for the night.... I can't believe yu read them all and some get mad at me because I post one a day. Matthew said those who love the story will read as many as I give them and those who read for the money don't really care..... You make me so happy when you climb on board and tell the train to go!
Smiles, Carol
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I'll pay YOU to read. I don't care or look if it's two cents or $1.00--
I'm serious.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Yes, ma'am, some mighty fine descriptive writing that puts us readers right in the moment. Now, I only wish I had a six to reward this outstanding writing with the reward it deserves. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Yes, ma'am, some mighty fine descriptive writing that puts us readers right in the moment. Now, I only wish I had a six to reward this outstanding writing with the reward it deserves. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Thank you so much! I was just writing and finishing Chapter 18 and feeling tired, and then you came along and made me smile. A virtual six is welcomed, my friend. I've got to finish up Chapter 18, have a short in mind, and then off to another chapter. I think you might like Chapter 17. I hope so!
thank you as always.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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I like everything you write. As I've said forever, you need to be sending out submissions every day. One of my favorite writers "James Lee Burke," sent out a submission and was turned down 130 times. Then, someone picked it up, and it won tons of awards. Now he has about 70 books. It only takes that one person to take notice. Smiles and hugs back at ya! Ric
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You are awesome! I appreciate the faith you have in my abilities. Thank you!
Comment from Carol Clark2
This is a great chapter! So many emotions going on! The chapter is filled with great details at each step. It's too bad Jose found the key to the safe deposit box. That can't be good. Blessings. Carol
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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This is a great chapter! So many emotions going on! The chapter is filled with great details at each step. It's too bad Jose found the key to the safe deposit box. That can't be good. Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 30-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Yes, the key is Jose's hand is dangerous...and so many want it and what it will reveal. It's hard to know where it will end up. Thanks so much for the kind review and the stars...I am thrilled you are enjoying the story.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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Looking forward to reading the rest!
Comment from Ulla
Hi Carol, another great chapter. I'm catching up as it were. I loved the scene about the JH etc taking off, but then again I flew for twenty years. So probably biased. Garth is growing on me. Now on to the next chapter. Hugs, Ulla xxx
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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Hi Carol, another great chapter. I'm catching up as it were. I loved the scene about the JH etc taking off, but then again I flew for twenty years. So probably biased. Garth is growing on me. Now on to the next chapter. Hugs, Ulla xxx
Comment Written 29-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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Hurrah! i jogged a little memory for you while you read my story. That's awesome! I hope I got it right! Garth is a charmer and has a real good heart, once he gets through his pain over losing Allie. I'm glad you like him. You are so kind to me and the story. Thank you!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from royowen
So Garth as ever is involved in seeking out the disturbance in the prison, but is decidedly unhappy because the assigned person I'd in the ICU at the local hospital. Later Jose finds himself at Naomi's place cuts himself, great episode Carol, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2024
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So Garth as ever is involved in seeking out the disturbance in the prison, but is decidedly unhappy because the assigned person I'd in the ICU at the local hospital. Later Jose finds himself at Naomi's place cuts himself, great episode Carol, blessings Roy
Comment Written 28-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2024
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Thanks for another read and review, Roy. Always appreciate your time and comments.
Smiles, Carol
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Most welcome
Comment from LJbutterfly
Your detailed descriptions are the key to making your stories, chapters , and characters intriguing. An example of just a few of the following descriptions allows me to easily envision Garth.
The Cowboy stopped, his mouth in grumbling gear
Garth's jaw tightened as he absorbed the news.
Garth's eyes narrowed, his displeasure evident.
Garth spun around, his eyes blazing with barely restrained anger.
Then you move on to Jose, and what he sees, and how he feels and responds. This is magnificent.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2024
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Your detailed descriptions are the key to making your stories, chapters , and characters intriguing. An example of just a few of the following descriptions allows me to easily envision Garth.
The Cowboy stopped, his mouth in grumbling gear
Garth's jaw tightened as he absorbed the news.
Garth's eyes narrowed, his displeasure evident.
Garth spun around, his eyes blazing with barely restrained anger.
Then you move on to Jose, and what he sees, and how he feels and responds. This is magnificent.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Lorraine. I think when I write, I step into my characters shoes and imagine how they would look, feel and act. I want to feel the emotions and want the reader to do the same. I so appreciate your comments. I'm smiling again!!!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
Garth must be the most unlovable hero imaginable. He cries out to be beaten up - it's amazing what he gets away with. And then he turns around and pulls out all the stops (your writing of the cut in his hand is very fine). Suddenly we don't know which way to turn. kay
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2024
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Garth must be the most unlovable hero imaginable. He cries out to be beaten up - it's amazing what he gets away with. And then he turns around and pulls out all the stops (your writing of the cut in his hand is very fine). Suddenly we don't know which way to turn. kay
Comment Written 28-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2024
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Garth is the charming cowboy...He just hasn't been so charming at first because of the death of Allie. It's Jose who is the bad guy and got his hand cut with glass and is bleeding. Now that Eleanor has Garth in gear things will get better. And Angelo is in hot pursuit of Jose. thanks for the review and comments.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I had hoped Matthew or Garth would find that key first. I am so happy my cowboy is back!!!
Finally, Garth shrugged, "Considering you put your life on the line for that minute, it's yours." (shrugged. no sound, but I love Garth!!)
but the Warden quickly intervened. "I'll get one of the secretaries to make copies for you," he said, hoping to defuse the tension. (intervened, To me intervened would be saying a word)
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2024
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I had hoped Matthew or Garth would find that key first. I am so happy my cowboy is back!!!
Finally, Garth shrugged, "Considering you put your life on the line for that minute, it's yours." (shrugged. no sound, but I love Garth!!)
but the Warden quickly intervened. "I'll get one of the secretaries to make copies for you," he said, hoping to defuse the tension. (intervened, To me intervened would be saying a word)
Comment Written 28-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2024
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Now, Barbara, you and I both know that would be too easy.... These men have to fight for their success. And Eleanor's getting her work time in too. Poor lady is hopping from place to place...LOL thanks for the review and the support. It's fixed.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
So Garth is involved. I seems he I remember he had a wife die of cancer. At least I think I remember that. Jose is eager to find the papers because he he already suffering from the beating he got for not having them already. How will he know where to go to look for the safe deposit box?
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2024
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So Garth is involved. I seems he I remember he had a wife die of cancer. At least I think I remember that. Jose is eager to find the papers because he he already suffering from the beating he got for not having them already. How will he know where to go to look for the safe deposit box?
Comment Written 28-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2024
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Yes, in one of my first stories with Garth, his wife died from cancer. I am surprised you emembered...that was a very long time ago. As for Jose...if he gets a chance, the name of the bank is stamped on the key....
smiles, Carol
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
Bring on that safety deposit box! Enjoyable chapter, Carol. I found myself liking Garth and i'm not exactly sure why. lol He's really not all the likeable, is he? lol I like his grumpiness, I think.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2024
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Bring on that safety deposit box! Enjoyable chapter, Carol. I found myself liking Garth and i'm not exactly sure why. lol He's really not all the likeable, is he? lol I like his grumpiness, I think.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2024
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I guarantee you, Garth is the most lovable Cowboy you will ever meet, but he is human and having the lost the love of his life has been difficult. His smooth talking drawl and southern charm will get to you. LOL
Smiles and hugs, Carol