Midnight Blues
The colour blue mixes with whispers of midnight.2 total reviews
Comment from bonespur
This seems like a good candidate for the contest. The rhyming scheme seems good and the subject matter interesting. Good job and good luck. Have a blessed day
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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This seems like a good candidate for the contest. The rhyming scheme seems good and the subject matter interesting. Good job and good luck. Have a blessed day
Comment Written 23-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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Thank you🙂
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You're welcome
Comment from Snowball30
The poem rhymes but sadly there is a lack of rhythm. You need to concentrate on that so there is a smooth flow through the words. The last line of the second stanza sounds particularly awkward. Likewise, the last stanza is too wordy and needs more conciseness. Please forgive this criticism. I am trying to be helpful.I wish you luck with the contest. I can offer no alternative to the title. The one you have given this poem seems appropriate.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2024
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The poem rhymes but sadly there is a lack of rhythm. You need to concentrate on that so there is a smooth flow through the words. The last line of the second stanza sounds particularly awkward. Likewise, the last stanza is too wordy and needs more conciseness. Please forgive this criticism. I am trying to be helpful.I wish you luck with the contest. I can offer no alternative to the title. The one you have given this poem seems appropriate.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2024
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Thank you.I will work on making my poem more concise👍