Comment from Aiona

Excellent

This poem fits the 5-7-5 syllable format, and definitely describes something in nature. Something I've always wanted to visit, by the way. The picture chosen goes well with the poem.

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2024

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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2024

Thank you.

Comment from Pamusart

Excellent

Hi

This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that.

This is a true haiku. All about nature and has a good satori line.

Since with the first two lines we don't know that you're talking about Dawn, the third line is effectively a surprise That is what a good satori line does

I like the sulking hills I hope they can find the reason for the Dawn being mournful. Maybe it can be fixed. Just kidding

I enjoyed reading your poem

Good job. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2024

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024

Thank you for reading and the great comments, Pam.

Comment from Michael Ludwinder

Excellent

Your haiku beautifully captures a sense of mystery. The word choices are terrific. I loved "folklore mysteries" combined with "sulking hills". That creates a haunting atmosphere. Wonderful!

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2024

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024

Thank you, Michael.