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Viewing comments for Chapter 163 "A Loft Bed"
Because my portfolio is too messy and I have OCD.

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Comment from SimianSavant
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I grew up with such a thing as well. My dad built a 10x12' cabin in the woods with lofted beds when he first immigrated and we would visit it in the winter months. Good times.

Colors and pic go together well. The one thing that might elevate this piece further is a different font. Perhaps try the Bungee one? It looks kinda wood-like.

Best regards,

&129421;

 Comment Written 11-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
    I'll definitely look at the Bungee font. Thanks for the suggestion.
Comment from Pam (respa)
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-Thanks for sharing the picture and notes.
-That sounds like an ambitious project,
but you pulled it off and wrote a good poem.
-Very good opening lines that establish the premise.
-A very good concluding line showing what is possible.
-A good entry; good luck!

 Comment Written 11-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
    Thank you for your detailed review!
reply by Pam (respa) on 13-Aug-2024
    You are very welcome.