God's Pod
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Comment from Michael Ludwinder
What a creative and imaginative retelling of the Red Sea crossing! I loved the inclusion of dolphins as divine guides. It's a beautiful reminder of the connection between faith and nature. Fantastic work!
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2024
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What a creative and imaginative retelling of the Red Sea crossing! I loved the inclusion of dolphins as divine guides. It's a beautiful reminder of the connection between faith and nature. Fantastic work!
Comment Written 13-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2024
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Thank you for your positive words. I appreciate you taking time to read and review my unique story. Elaine
Comment from lancellot
Overall, it is a good deviation from the classic story, but it has some issues, raises questions.
notes:
How will a fish guide so many to safety?!
-Um, wouldn't his first thought be, "How is this fish speaking?! Am I still high from last night?"
"Pharoah's army is not far off. The distance is becoming closer".
"Do not worry about them. Trust in your God".
-Move the periods inside the quote marks.
I would lose the fire breathing sea-dragon. It takes away from the story and purpose of running away from the soon to be dead army.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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Overall, it is a good deviation from the classic story, but it has some issues, raises questions.
notes:
How will a fish guide so many to safety?!
-Um, wouldn't his first thought be, "How is this fish speaking?! Am I still high from last night?"
"Pharoah's army is not far off. The distance is becoming closer".
"Do not worry about them. Trust in your God".
-Move the periods inside the quote marks.
I would lose the fire breathing sea-dragon. It takes away from the story and purpose of running away from the soon to be dead army.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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Thank you so much for your suggestions. Mose's people would hold onto the dolphins' fins as they swam across.