An Echo of The Past
The cover-ups from those in powers.7 total reviews
Comment from JanPerry
I enjoy your wording and turn of phrase. I did this one but didn't comply to all the silly rules
Good work on this one and well said.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
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I enjoy your wording and turn of phrase. I did this one but didn't comply to all the silly rules
Good work on this one and well said.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Jan. :) Sorry about writing late. I was not myself for a while. No computer, :)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A haunting memory of past recollections as we free ourselves of yesterday's problems. An unusual form for the club, much enjoyed, love Dolly x x x x x x
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2024
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A haunting memory of past recollections as we free ourselves of yesterday's problems. An unusual form for the club, much enjoyed, love Dolly x x x x x x
Comment Written 08-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Dolly. I'm glad you enjoyed it. :) Shelly comes out with the weirdest forms but some we try and some we forget.
Comment from shelley kaye
"learn the rules like a pro, so you can break them like an artist. " -picasso
actually the middle lines:
"fluttering wings of what we've seen,
the memories of where we're been."
flow very well together in this well-written poem
a great pinch of poetry!
thank you for sharing!
shelley :)
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2024
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"learn the rules like a pro, so you can break them like an artist. " -picasso
actually the middle lines:
"fluttering wings of what we've seen,
the memories of where we're been."
flow very well together in this well-written poem
a great pinch of poetry!
thank you for sharing!
shelley :)
Comment Written 08-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Shelly. :) and I corrected the "we're been to we've been. Still, Picasso painted from the heart and so do I. Mistakes will always be. :)
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I really enjoyed reading your poem! Your use of imagery is excellent. It's clear that you've put a lot of thought into crafting this, and the result is both moving and beautifully written. Keep up the fantastic work - I'm looking forward to seeing more of your writing!
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2024
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I really enjoyed reading your poem! Your use of imagery is excellent. It's clear that you've put a lot of thought into crafting this, and the result is both moving and beautifully written. Keep up the fantastic work - I'm looking forward to seeing more of your writing!
Comment Written 08-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Michael, I'm glad you liked it. :)
Comment from lyenochka
Your poem is thought-provoking and made me think about life in the past and memories. Some of it made me think of politicians who just talk with "Our speech is just an echo in the wind" but then later when I see the murky waters transformed, it made me think of how God's written Word transforms us.
I was puzzling over how to do that repeated line so I'm glad you modified it to work for you.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2024
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Your poem is thought-provoking and made me think about life in the past and memories. Some of it made me think of politicians who just talk with "Our speech is just an echo in the wind" but then later when I see the murky waters transformed, it made me think of how God's written Word transforms us.
I was puzzling over how to do that repeated line so I'm glad you modified it to work for you.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Helen. :) The way I figure poetry is those that write it want to be known by what the write, but once in a while it's best to correct their writing.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
I have no idea what a "pinch poem" is, but it sounds like you "did it your way." I like that "those murky waters are transformed into clear streams" and "ghosts have nothing to say because we died free." With a pen and a little imagination, anything is possible.
"the memories of where we're been" - change "we're" to "we've"
Happy writing!
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2024
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I have no idea what a "pinch poem" is, but it sounds like you "did it your way." I like that "those murky waters are transformed into clear streams" and "ghosts have nothing to say because we died free." With a pen and a little imagination, anything is possible.
"the memories of where we're been" - change "we're" to "we've"
Happy writing!
xo
Pam
Comment Written 07-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2024
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Pam, would you be my...What's that word?...Editor? I love what you say to me. :) Thank you for reading. :) I was going to call it a pinche poem. Pinche is Spanish for ... I didn't like it too much. :)
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I'd be the last person you'd want for an editor - I'm not a poet:-)
Comment from SimianSavant
I don't quite follow so much of what is written here but I can feel it. "Died free" was the hardest part for me to digest logically and sonically (doesn't have quite the ring of John Stark's "Live Free or Die"). Lines 2-4 I thought were the strongest, and line 5 the most intriguing. Hope this helps!
Regards,
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reply by the author on 09-Aug-2024
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I don't quite follow so much of what is written here but I can feel it. "Died free" was the hardest part for me to digest logically and sonically (doesn't have quite the ring of John Stark's "Live Free or Die"). Lines 2-4 I thought were the strongest, and line 5 the most intriguing. Hope this helps!
Regards,
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Comment Written 07-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2024
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Hey, Simian, it does not matter if you understand it but if you feel it.
I don't do this. Everything that the winner of a...let's say a war does... is written in the pages of history by they that won. Those that died have nothing to say. They did what was expected of them.
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Maybe they have quite a bit to say thanks to you
