Lovely
contest entry2 total reviews
Comment from Patty Mazzurco
Your poem has a clear and uplifting tone, with a focus on the simplicity and beauty of human connection. The structure effectively highlights the emotions and intentions behind the gesture.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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Your poem has a clear and uplifting tone, with a focus on the simplicity and beauty of human connection. The structure effectively highlights the emotions and intentions behind the gesture.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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Thank you
Comment from samantha0930
The poem doesn't really need the picture. There's no reason for it to be there, and it's also blurry and doesn't look great because of it. You use "happy" and "happiness" right next to each other, which makes it sound repetitive. It also doesn't follow the rules of the contest. You did use 14 words and have 2 stanzas, but you're only supposed to have 7 lines, and yours has 9, and I don't feel like it creates a picture to visualize, other than you said that someone is smiling. The purple colors are quite pleasant, and I'm glad that you can still read it considering the colors are very similar, because sometimes that can be a problem. I can't claim the poem is bad or anything, but it could definitely use some work. Especially you should try to fix your number of lines to being 7, because it might get it disqualified for not following the prompt rules.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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The poem doesn't really need the picture. There's no reason for it to be there, and it's also blurry and doesn't look great because of it. You use "happy" and "happiness" right next to each other, which makes it sound repetitive. It also doesn't follow the rules of the contest. You did use 14 words and have 2 stanzas, but you're only supposed to have 7 lines, and yours has 9, and I don't feel like it creates a picture to visualize, other than you said that someone is smiling. The purple colors are quite pleasant, and I'm glad that you can still read it considering the colors are very similar, because sometimes that can be a problem. I can't claim the poem is bad or anything, but it could definitely use some work. Especially you should try to fix your number of lines to being 7, because it might get it disqualified for not following the prompt rules.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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Thank you I have fixed the poem