Once Upon A Lifetime
Silly thought provoking poem… is it what it seems to be?9 total reviews
Comment from SimianSavant
Looks to me like an extracted blood vessel, or an upside down bolt of lightning. Who are you to decide it's a stick? Such imperialistic language, assuming it wants to be called that. What if it's a Spanish name and you misgendered it. Maybe it's gonna to go home now and slit its wrists, or burn down a school of twigs, and you could be held liable. I will leave you to think about your words.
Nice work,
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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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Looks to me like an extracted blood vessel, or an upside down bolt of lightning. Who are you to decide it's a stick? Such imperialistic language, assuming it wants to be called that. What if it's a Spanish name and you misgendered it. Maybe it's gonna to go home now and slit its wrists, or burn down a school of twigs, and you could be held liable. I will leave you to think about your words.
Nice work,
🦍
Comment Written 02-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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Thank you for your fun review. Can always expect another viewpoint on just about everything nowadays, right? Lol!
Comment from jake cosmos aller
I like this rhyming poem about a man picking up a stick and wondering what it all means was it a stick, or was it twig or was it something much more than that?
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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I like this rhyming poem about a man picking up a stick and wondering what it all means was it a stick, or was it twig or was it something much more than that?
Comment Written 02-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from Begin Again
It's all in the eye of the beholder or where ever his mind may take him or her at that moment. And of course, someone will always prefer to call it something else. Amusing poem, but so the truth.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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It's all in the eye of the beholder or where ever his mind may take him or her at that moment. And of course, someone will always prefer to call it something else. Amusing poem, but so the truth.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 02-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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Thanks, I appreciate your review.
Comment from Brenda Strauser
I enjoyed reading your poem. I liked how you used: once upon a lifetime. The rhyming was good. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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I enjoyed reading your poem. I liked how you used: once upon a lifetime. The rhyming was good. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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Thanks for your review and comment. I liked that wording as well.
Comment from Patty Mazzurco
This poem has a whimsical charm that captures a simple moment of contemplation in a light-hearted way. The playful pondering over whether a twig or a stick holds significance brings a smile, and the ease with which the man eventually lets it go reflects a relatable sense of weariness. The repetition of "Once upon a lifetime" adds a touch of timelessness to the otherwise ordinary scene, making it both amusing and endearing. Overall, it's a delightful piece that finds magic in the mundane.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2024
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This poem has a whimsical charm that captures a simple moment of contemplation in a light-hearted way. The playful pondering over whether a twig or a stick holds significance brings a smile, and the ease with which the man eventually lets it go reflects a relatable sense of weariness. The repetition of "Once upon a lifetime" adds a touch of timelessness to the otherwise ordinary scene, making it both amusing and endearing. Overall, it's a delightful piece that finds magic in the mundane.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2024
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Thank you so much for your great comments. I really appreciate it.
Comment from jessizero
I think this was a great rhyming poem, and it's definitely food for thought. I enjoyed the photo and the poem it inspired. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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I think this was a great rhyming poem, and it's definitely food for thought. I enjoyed the photo and the poem it inspired. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your review and comments. I appreciate it.
Comment from patcelaw
There are many people in this world who want to argue over insignificant things such as arguing over the stick or was it a twig or was it actually something that was important. I enjoyed your pool very much. And your rhyming is absolutely wonderful. Patricia.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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There are many people in this world who want to argue over insignificant things such as arguing over the stick or was it a twig or was it actually something that was important. I enjoyed your pool very much. And your rhyming is absolutely wonderful. Patricia.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your great review and comments. I appreciate them.
Comment from Pamusart
Hi gramalot8
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!
Your poem is very cute. It's almost commentary and Philosophy.
There is a movie called carrying a big stick and it's about who's the better man. Of course the hero is
But this philosophical question Has probably occurred to many of us because I believe a stick is bigger than a twig.
Were you worried about meter here? You know it should be examine; probably examine it
"Deciding to exam closer..."
I enjoyed reading your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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Hi gramalot8
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!
Your poem is very cute. It's almost commentary and Philosophy.
There is a movie called carrying a big stick and it's about who's the better man. Of course the hero is
But this philosophical question Has probably occurred to many of us because I believe a stick is bigger than a twig.
Were you worried about meter here? You know it should be examine; probably examine it
"Deciding to exam closer..."
I enjoyed reading your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your review and comments. I appreciate them.
Comment from Lindsey Russell
Oh my goodness this is so funny and even funnier that I relate! I've often twisted my brain thinking about mundane things! No obvious errors in it either. Happy writing!
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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Oh my goodness this is so funny and even funnier that I relate! I've often twisted my brain thinking about mundane things! No obvious errors in it either. Happy writing!
Comment Written 28-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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Thanks for your comments. Glad you can relate!
