Time Change
100 words10 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This one-hundred-word story, Time Change, has the proper word count and makes an argument for the changing of the scene in the delivery room since the cigars in the waiting room days.
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This one-hundred-word story, Time Change, has the proper word count and makes an argument for the changing of the scene in the delivery room since the cigars in the waiting room days.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2024
Comment from iDri.Luv.Jesus
Oh wow... pretty amazing in "100 Word Dash," I love your story telling. It got to the point, and "tis so true how time fly by, and a newer generation got it best in almost everything. I like your big font, and your simplicity of you artsy by using words instead an actual picture. Congrats to your writing and wishing you win!
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Oh wow... pretty amazing in "100 Word Dash," I love your story telling. It got to the point, and "tis so true how time fly by, and a newer generation got it best in almost everything. I like your big font, and your simplicity of you artsy by using words instead an actual picture. Congrats to your writing and wishing you win!
Comment Written 29-Jul-2024
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, I had to read this one twice, but I think it saying that now, more of the family is in the delivery room than it used to be. I also think it may be making a slight joke, but I'm not sure.
All stories must have the following: Main Character, Setting, Conflict, Resolution.
As for the elements. I guess Mary is the MC, though she isn't exactly centered. The setting may be the delivery room. Not sure about the conflict or resolution. They seem to be missing.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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Hmm, I had to read this one twice, but I think it saying that now, more of the family is in the delivery room than it used to be. I also think it may be making a slight joke, but I'm not sure.
All stories must have the following: Main Character, Setting, Conflict, Resolution.
As for the elements. I guess Mary is the MC, though she isn't exactly centered. The setting may be the delivery room. Not sure about the conflict or resolution. They seem to be missing.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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Yes, Mary is the MC, the setting is the delivery room, the conflict is the change in practices from 40 years ago to today and the resolution is Mary accepting the change.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
I had trouble seeing how the last paragraph came to be but being limited to one hundred words I understood and so after strenuous concentration I caught sight of what was going down.
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I had trouble seeing how the last paragraph came to be but being limited to one hundred words I understood and so after strenuous concentration I caught sight of what was going down.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2024
Comment from Wendy G
Yes, times have changed significantly. It is much more a family experience now, as your story indicates. You wrote it well. Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
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Yes, times have changed significantly. It is much more a family experience now, as your story indicates. You wrote it well. Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 28-Jul-2024
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the 100 Word Dash writing prompt. These days they have everyone in the delivery room, including the next door neighbor and the landscaper. Cute flash story. Good luck.
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An excellent entry for the 100 Word Dash writing prompt. These days they have everyone in the delivery room, including the next door neighbor and the landscaper. Cute flash story. Good luck.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2024
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
The contrast between Mary's memories of her English teacher and the present was fantastic. I love how you shared the story of her teacher right before showing us how her life will soon change. Wonderful storytelling!
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2024
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The contrast between Mary's memories of her English teacher and the present was fantastic. I love how you shared the story of her teacher right before showing us how her life will soon change. Wonderful storytelling!
Comment Written 27-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2024
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Thanks for your review. The part about the teacher is actually true and it did happen about 40 years ago. He addressed me directly when he said those words. I never got to experience it but what he said has stuck with me.
Comment from Begin Again
That's an understatement! Every day, things are different! Once, giving birth was just a woman's thing, with men not allowed, but now it's almost a party for some, everyone gathers around. I know the birth of a child is wonderful, but I think I'd still like to keep that particular end of me discreetly out of sight from most.
Smiles, Carol
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That's an understatement! Every day, things are different! Once, giving birth was just a woman's thing, with men not allowed, but now it's almost a party for some, everyone gathers around. I know the birth of a child is wonderful, but I think I'd still like to keep that particular end of me discreetly out of sight from most.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 27-Jul-2024
Comment from LJbutterfly
Forty years is a lifetime. People develop from children to adults, while prices, clothing, technology, medicine, and everything else changes. The fact that the family was in the delivery room is an extreme change. Best wishes in the contest.
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Forty years is a lifetime. People develop from children to adults, while prices, clothing, technology, medicine, and everything else changes. The fact that the family was in the delivery room is an extreme change. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2024
Comment from jessizero
I think this was a fun piece for the 100 word dash prompt. I liked how you followed the changing times. Thank you so much for sharing, and best wishes to you.
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I think this was a fun piece for the 100 word dash prompt. I liked how you followed the changing times. Thank you so much for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2024
