Passion and Tenderness
A relationship is bound to be successful.2 total reviews
Comment from Patty Mazzurco
Your poem succinctly captures the essence of love through its gentle and soothing imagery. The progression from "Gentle" to "Soothing touch" effectively sets a tender and intimate tone, while "Shared dreams entwine" beautifully evokes a sense of unity and connection. The concluding line, "Passion with tenderness always in bloom," ties everything together, highlighting the enduring and nurturing nature of love.
Only thought I have is maybe change always to ever for a smoother flow but either way simply beautiful!
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2024
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Your poem succinctly captures the essence of love through its gentle and soothing imagery. The progression from "Gentle" to "Soothing touch" effectively sets a tender and intimate tone, while "Shared dreams entwine" beautifully evokes a sense of unity and connection. The concluding line, "Passion with tenderness always in bloom," ties everything together, highlighting the enduring and nurturing nature of love.
Only thought I have is maybe change always to ever for a smoother flow but either way simply beautiful!
Comment Written 26-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2024
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Thank you for the read and the detailed discussion of my poem. Much appreciated. I like your suggestion and changed always to ever.
Comment from Pamusart
Hi,
This is a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that.
You met the requirements of the contest in this uplifting poem
I just must not feel the way others do because I don't write romance, poetry except on failed romances ha ha
I don't know what happened to me along the way. I loved my husband deeply, but we were more friends and confidants than we were romantic
At first, of course we were romantic, but after 45 years, we got into our daily routines and supported each other emotionally and had the same interests. We both played chess. That's how we met at a chess tournament.
So many people on here right about being married for umpty ump years and still being deeply in love romantically
I'm sure they're telling the truth. Maybe it's because we met through a sport. And yes, chess is a sport.
Yours is a very nice tribute to tender love. I hope that's because you feel it too. Your poem is well written It has no rhyming scheme and no set meter but that is common in the small poems and even if it wasn't a small poem, it would be called free verse which is totally acceptable
I enjoyed reading your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2024
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Hi,
This is a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that.
You met the requirements of the contest in this uplifting poem
I just must not feel the way others do because I don't write romance, poetry except on failed romances ha ha
I don't know what happened to me along the way. I loved my husband deeply, but we were more friends and confidants than we were romantic
At first, of course we were romantic, but after 45 years, we got into our daily routines and supported each other emotionally and had the same interests. We both played chess. That's how we met at a chess tournament.
So many people on here right about being married for umpty ump years and still being deeply in love romantically
I'm sure they're telling the truth. Maybe it's because we met through a sport. And yes, chess is a sport.
Yours is a very nice tribute to tender love. I hope that's because you feel it too. Your poem is well written It has no rhyming scheme and no set meter but that is common in the small poems and even if it wasn't a small poem, it would be called free verse which is totally acceptable
I enjoyed reading your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your read, review and sharing your feelings. I think when we get older, being there to support one another is more important. Even the hottest fires cool over time.