haiku (bullets fill places)
haiku club haiku on death4 total reviews
Comment from AP Apgar
What an excellent poem for your club challenge- with a beautiful picture supporting- your poem's
Message is clear and very true in deed - in the end blind hate knows no bounds- well done! - Alan
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
What an excellent poem for your club challenge- with a beautiful picture supporting- your poem's
Message is clear and very true in deed - in the end blind hate knows no bounds- well done! - Alan
Comment Written 25-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
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Thanks, Alan, for such and encouraging review.
Joan
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Your jisei haiku reminds me of school shootings. Great topic, very timely.
Thank you for participating in the Haiku Club event. Great entry with good syllable count and connection between lines. Good juxtaposition and satori. Beautiful presentation and imagery.
Good job,
Gypsy
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
Your jisei haiku reminds me of school shootings. Great topic, very timely.
Thank you for participating in the Haiku Club event. Great entry with good syllable count and connection between lines. Good juxtaposition and satori. Beautiful presentation and imagery.
Good job,
Gypsy
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Thanks for the nice review, MariVal. Glad you liked it. You picked up the theme well Though any mass shooting at a public area that should be safe works.
Joan
Comment from Lindsey Russell
This poem contains so much truth in so few words. I love that and every other aspect of it. Thanks for sharing and happy writing! Good luck with all of your writing endeavors!
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
This poem contains so much truth in so few words. I love that and every other aspect of it. Thanks for sharing and happy writing! Good luck with all of your writing endeavors!
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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I am glad you liked it so much. Thanks for taking the time to read and review.
Joan
Comment from BethShelby
This is a good haiku. I hate the thought of violence in any place. Bullets are designed to cause pain and death. If not of a human for some innocent creature. I can't understand man need for violence.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
This is a good haiku. I hate the thought of violence in any place. Bullets are designed to cause pain and death. If not of a human for some innocent creature. I can't understand man need for violence.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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I can't either, Beth. Thanks a lot for the review.
Joan