But it's not paradise
A question is asked to the deceased, but is it too late?4 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Congratulations on your first milestone post. You're very brave for attempting a contest right away. As a reviewer, I'm confused as to why you have random capital letters throughout this poem. Yet, you didn't capitalize 'I'm'. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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Congratulations on your first milestone post. You're very brave for attempting a contest right away. As a reviewer, I'm confused as to why you have random capital letters throughout this poem. Yet, you didn't capitalize 'I'm'. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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Thank you!
Comment from patcelaw
This is a well written eight word poem for the contest, and I wish you the very best with the contest welcome to fan story and I hope you will enjoy it here at this site. May you have a good day and God bless. Patricia.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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This is a well written eight word poem for the contest, and I wish you the very best with the contest welcome to fan story and I hope you will enjoy it here at this site. May you have a good day and God bless. Patricia.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much!
Comment from jessizero
Did you know you put two "I"s in "darling"?
I liked your poem and your formatting. You got the right number of words for the contest, too.
Congratulations on your first milestone post!
Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2024
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Did you know you put two "I"s in "darling"?
I liked your poem and your formatting. You got the right number of words for the contest, too.
Congratulations on your first milestone post!
Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2024
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Oh my Gosh, I didn't notice, thank you!
Comment from judiverse
Congratulations on your first post. This is a great idea for the contest, but the way you've designed it, I think it would be hard to get an actual word count. I suggest doing away with the little a's and don't have the M all alone in front of Heaven. Make it clear you have 8 words. The way this is arranged, it's confusing. Also, a larger font would be good, and use a picture if possible. Plenty of time before the contest to make changes. I can see your playing around with your words, but make sure the judges understand the word count. judi
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2024
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Congratulations on your first post. This is a great idea for the contest, but the way you've designed it, I think it would be hard to get an actual word count. I suggest doing away with the little a's and don't have the M all alone in front of Heaven. Make it clear you have 8 words. The way this is arranged, it's confusing. Also, a larger font would be good, and use a picture if possible. Plenty of time before the contest to make changes. I can see your playing around with your words, but make sure the judges understand the word count. judi
Comment Written 18-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2024
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Thank you! Will do🙂
