Silent Song of the Heart
A free verse written from paper.7 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I think you did a pretty good job with your free write here, appreciating love in the world even when we are excluded means we have our hearts open, much enjoyed, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
I think you did a pretty good job with your free write here, appreciating love in the world even when we are excluded means we have our hearts open, much enjoyed, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 16-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Dolly. Glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
I assume the "forsaken computer" is a reference to your time away from writing. And it sounds like you're having trouble getting motivated - there's no melody to ignite your passion.
I wish I had a magic fix for you, Jose. Did I not read once that you like to fish? Perhaps being outside in nature helps, and take a book of great poetry to read while you're out there. Perhaps the Masters can ignite a spark in you. Sometimes a spark is all it takes.
Take care and keep putting words to paper - good or bad, just do it.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
I assume the "forsaken computer" is a reference to your time away from writing. And it sounds like you're having trouble getting motivated - there's no melody to ignite your passion.
I wish I had a magic fix for you, Jose. Did I not read once that you like to fish? Perhaps being outside in nature helps, and take a book of great poetry to read while you're out there. Perhaps the Masters can ignite a spark in you. Sometimes a spark is all it takes.
Take care and keep putting words to paper - good or bad, just do it.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 16-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Pam. Sometimes I'm just feeling old. :) The forsaken computer means that it runs good when it wants to. I need a new one.
Comment from Pamusart
Hi, PoetWatch
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!'
At first, I thought that Freevsrse should not have rhyming. Then I looked it up, and some rhyming is allowed, it doesn't really say that there's not supposed to be any rhyming at all, but there's just not supposed to be any meter at all
I'm trying to figure this one out. It sounds like maybe your muse has left you that whatever you write down doesn't seem to impart the emotion that you want to have. That would be true whether you use pen and paper an iPhone or a computer it's the same thing Love is not transmittable
Have you ever thought about how you almost have to be with a person to love them. You can't hug anybody long-distance you can't kiss anybody long distance you can't nibble anybody's ear distance. I guess I don't need to go on.
I mean you can talk on the phone about those things, but they just don't have the same import
I enjoyed reading your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
Hi, PoetWatch
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!'
At first, I thought that Freevsrse should not have rhyming. Then I looked it up, and some rhyming is allowed, it doesn't really say that there's not supposed to be any rhyming at all, but there's just not supposed to be any meter at all
I'm trying to figure this one out. It sounds like maybe your muse has left you that whatever you write down doesn't seem to impart the emotion that you want to have. That would be true whether you use pen and paper an iPhone or a computer it's the same thing Love is not transmittable
Have you ever thought about how you almost have to be with a person to love them. You can't hug anybody long-distance you can't kiss anybody long distance you can't nibble anybody's ear distance. I guess I don't need to go on.
I mean you can talk on the phone about those things, but they just don't have the same import
I enjoyed reading your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
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Thank you. Yes, without a loved one near it's hard to whisper in their ear. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I really enjoyed your poem. I loved the raw honesty and the deep emotions in your writing. For me I thought you explored the creative process and the emotional toil that it takes to get those words on paper.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
I really enjoyed your poem. I loved the raw honesty and the deep emotions in your writing. For me I thought you explored the creative process and the emotional toil that it takes to get those words on paper.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Michael. Those feelings are honest and true. I write from the heart or not write at all. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Boogienights
I find it very hard to write free verse because my ideas don't translate well like they do in rhyme. I completely understand what you are saying and can relate. I wish you best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
I find it very hard to write free verse because my ideas don't translate well like they do in rhyme. I completely understand what you are saying and can relate. I wish you best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Boogienights. I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from patcelaw
This is very well written for a free verse and I enjoyed reading it. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. Sometimes I think ports get caught up and having to think that they have to rhyme everything and it have to have certain meter but sometimes the free verse is that which allows us to Really write from our heart. Patricia.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
This is very well written for a free verse and I enjoyed reading it. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. Sometimes I think ports get caught up and having to think that they have to rhyme everything and it have to have certain meter but sometimes the free verse is that which allows us to Really write from our heart. Patricia.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
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In free verse one write with heart in hand, Patricia. Happy you enjoyed it.
Comment from lyenochka
From the perfect title to the cooing of the dove and the yearning of the heart to have its songs transcribed to the computer, you have expressed the writing desires of so many poets! Hope this one does well in the contest!!
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
From the perfect title to the cooing of the dove and the yearning of the heart to have its songs transcribed to the computer, you have expressed the writing desires of so many poets! Hope this one does well in the contest!!
Comment Written 15-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Helen.