A Caregivers' Song
Dimentia is hard for everyone5 total reviews
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This must be so painful to live with for a carer/partner. The change that comes about in the patient is reflected in the rainfall whilst the sunrise, normally giving hope, simply reinforces the reality of loss and bewilderment. Well done for creating such poignant imagery. Good luck! Debbie. PS d(e)mentia
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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This must be so painful to live with for a carer/partner. The change that comes about in the patient is reflected in the rainfall whilst the sunrise, normally giving hope, simply reinforces the reality of loss and bewilderment. Well done for creating such poignant imagery. Good luck! Debbie. PS d(e)mentia
Comment Written 12-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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Thank you!! They say write about what you know
Comment from Pamusart
Hi
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!
Great job rhyming morning with warning. This has no set meter
So it's the person that has dementia that's crying the tears that caused the rain. She knows she has dementia. She knows that she should remember last night but she doesn't. So that's why she's crying.?
Here I was curious why you referenced he. Your whole poem has been about a woman and then suddenly you're talking about He. Maybe you meant She
"He couldn't remember last night in the morning"
I enjoyed reading your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
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Hi
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!
Great job rhyming morning with warning. This has no set meter
So it's the person that has dementia that's crying the tears that caused the rain. She knows she has dementia. She knows that she should remember last night but she doesn't. So that's why she's crying.?
Here I was curious why you referenced he. Your whole poem has been about a woman and then suddenly you're talking about He. Maybe you meant She
"He couldn't remember last night in the morning"
I enjoyed reading your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2024
Comment from Bill Schott
This six-line poem, A Caregiver's Song, has the proper formatting and notes the lonely and joyless post of the person who must be a first-hand witness to loss.
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This six-line poem, A Caregiver's Song, has the proper formatting and notes the lonely and joyless post of the person who must be a first-hand witness to loss.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2024
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
The imagery of rain and tears for me was touching as I realized you were talking about memory and loss. Your ability to convey such heartfelt emotions with clarity is so impressive. Keep writing and exploring these themes as it's a pleasure to read your work.
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The imagery of rain and tears for me was touching as I realized you were talking about memory and loss. Your ability to convey such heartfelt emotions with clarity is so impressive. Keep writing and exploring these themes as it's a pleasure to read your work.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2024
Comment from Bryce 1
How sad. This poem opens many doors of interpretation. The adult in me thinks the worse and the kid in me is just off somewhere trying to have fun with these words.
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How sad. This poem opens many doors of interpretation. The adult in me thinks the worse and the kid in me is just off somewhere trying to have fun with these words.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2024