The Fix
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "The Fix - Chapter Sixteen"A mother fights to prove her son's innocence
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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was a wierd converstation for your son's girlfriend to have. I'm not sure I would like that. And finding out that they had been to see her ex husband, Joshua could have mentioned it. Kids can be strange. :)) Onwards! Sandra xx
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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That was a wierd converstation for your son's girlfriend to have. I'm not sure I would like that. And finding out that they had been to see her ex husband, Joshua could have mentioned it. Kids can be strange. :)) Onwards! Sandra xx
Comment Written 10-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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Thank you Sandra.
Comment from Ulla
A great continuation to the book, Jacob. I'm now fully up to scratch. I'm a bit behind everything as I busy writing for the 'write a book in a month competition.' I hope I can do it. It's called Autumn Leaves'. All best, Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
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A great continuation to the book, Jacob. I'm now fully up to scratch. I'm a bit behind everything as I busy writing for the 'write a book in a month competition.' I hope I can do it. It's called Autumn Leaves'. All best, Ulla:)))
Comment Written 06-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
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Thank you Ulla, I?ll definitely have to catch up on some of your work. I?ve just been away for eight days in Scotland for a writing retreat. I?m really pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
"brining" Susannah over tonight (change to bringing)
Wow, Susannah certainly dove right in and started with the personal stuff! If I were Stacey, I would have changed the subject. But anything to keep the son's girlfriend happy.
We finally get to meet the murder victim. And the son. And the ex-husband:-)
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
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"brining" Susannah over tonight (change to bringing)
Wow, Susannah certainly dove right in and started with the personal stuff! If I were Stacey, I would have changed the subject. But anything to keep the son's girlfriend happy.
We finally get to meet the murder victim. And the son. And the ex-husband:-)
xo
Pam
Comment Written 06-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
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Thank you Pam, I?m really pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Some conversations are difficult and we try and get past them unscathed, I enjoyed your dialogue here Jacob and I am wondering how this story will end. Has justice been served or will there be a re-trial? Love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
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Some conversations are difficult and we try and get past them unscathed, I enjoyed your dialogue here Jacob and I am wondering how this story will end. Has justice been served or will there be a re-trial? Love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 06-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
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Thank you Dolly, I?m pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is an interesting flashback! Susannah is very forward and inquisitive in her approach to Stacey and I'm not surprised Stacey felt uncomfortable. I can't say I like the sound of her as she's not very respectful of people's privacy. I'll be looking forward to hearing more about her. A good artistic device to add more depth to your story.
Small edit: ...he talked about brin(g)ing Susannah over tonight...
Thank you for sharing this chapter with its excellent dialogue! Debbie
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
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This is an interesting flashback! Susannah is very forward and inquisitive in her approach to Stacey and I'm not surprised Stacey felt uncomfortable. I can't say I like the sound of her as she's not very respectful of people's privacy. I'll be looking forward to hearing more about her. A good artistic device to add more depth to your story.
Small edit: ...he talked about brin(g)ing Susannah over tonight...
Thank you for sharing this chapter with its excellent dialogue! Debbie
Comment Written 05-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
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Thank you Debbie, I?m pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Daylily
It is nearly always an awkward event meeting the parents for the first time. Stacy actually seems a bit more nervous than Susannah. I am sure there are some who-done-it clues sprinkled into this posting. At the end of the story, it will be interesting to go back and analyze the connections. Alas, I am afraid I would never make a very good detective.
BTW--Congrats, Jacob, for being on the list for Book of the Month!
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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It is nearly always an awkward event meeting the parents for the first time. Stacy actually seems a bit more nervous than Susannah. I am sure there are some who-done-it clues sprinkled into this posting. At the end of the story, it will be interesting to go back and analyze the connections. Alas, I am afraid I would never make a very good detective.
BTW--Congrats, Jacob, for being on the list for Book of the Month!
Comment Written 05-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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Thank you, I?m pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I am really curious why on the first-time meeting Susannah would ask about Stacey's ex-husband. That seems odd to me. I am wondering if it has anything to do with her death. I bet is does. Joshua's sister is looking better and better to me as the murderer. I am enjoying this story.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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I am really curious why on the first-time meeting Susannah would ask about Stacey's ex-husband. That seems odd to me. I am wondering if it has anything to do with her death. I bet is does. Joshua's sister is looking better and better to me as the murderer. I am enjoying this story.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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Thank you Barbara, I?m pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from BethShelby
This is going back to before the murder occurred to learn more of what happened. Going back and fourth in time is one of the devices you seem to use often in your stories.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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This is going back to before the murder occurred to learn more of what happened. Going back and fourth in time is one of the devices you seem to use often in your stories.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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Thank you Beth, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.