Off a Cliff
a tanka-form8 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This sounds horrendous and these mobile vehicles need to make sure their brakes are secure when nearing the edge of a cliff! Another unusual post Bill, I think crash should be splash here, ha ha ha, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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This sounds horrendous and these mobile vehicles need to make sure their brakes are secure when nearing the edge of a cliff! Another unusual post Bill, I think crash should be splash here, ha ha ha, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Dolly
Comment from Sugarray77
This verse reminds me of a paragraph I read in a safety manual. By using the Tanka form, you created a dramatic and effective imagery for your reader. Thanks Bill.
Melissa
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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This verse reminds me of a paragraph I read in a safety manual. By using the Tanka form, you created a dramatic and effective imagery for your reader. Thanks Bill.
Melissa
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Thanks, Melissa
Comment from nomi338
You must be an excellent swimmer because you obviously survived the crash. Now all you have to do is to figure how did I mess up your brakes. Good luck. I am very skilled at what I do.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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You must be an excellent swimmer because you obviously survived the crash. Now all you have to do is to figure how did I mess up your brakes. Good luck. I am very skilled at what I do.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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I knew the brakes were bad, but I made the horn louder to make up for it.
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Dang! You are just too smart for me. Back to the old drawing board.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
The imagery of a car and driver falling in unison when the guard rails fail is striking and a little uncomfortable to be honest. It's a powerful reminder of the fragility of what we construct against the relentless laws of nature. Great job.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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The imagery of a car and driver falling in unison when the guard rails fail is striking and a little uncomfortable to be honest. It's a powerful reminder of the fragility of what we construct against the relentless laws of nature. Great job.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Thanks, Michael.
Comment from jim vecchio
I've hit that guard rail several times in my past and I'm sure glad it did its job. I always am thankful my brakes held up whenever as bridge opened up in front of me.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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I've hit that guard rail several times in my past and I'm sure glad it did its job. I always am thankful my brakes held up whenever as bridge opened up in front of me.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Yes, both should do their part.
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One time I was driving a blind woman and her guide dog. A car came speeding in back of me, struck me and sent me into the guardrail and back out again. I learned a lot about human nature that day. People kept flying by me and cursing. I yelled to them i just had an accident. One answered, "If you don't get out of the road, you're gonna have another!"
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People -- the love.
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I have no cause to blame them. I myself did many foolish things in my life.
Comment from BethShelby
Here you are sending someone else to his death crashing through a guard rail which fails to guard anything. This almost sounds like the answer to a math problem.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Here you are sending someone else to his death crashing through a guard rail which fails to guard anything. This almost sounds like the answer to a math problem.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Plus out, minus down equals the empty set.
Comment from lyenochka
Thank you for this physics lesson in a tanka form. May none of us ever test this speed and gravity factoid. It's not one that they advertise in all the relentless Fourth of July car commercials.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Thank you for this physics lesson in a tanka form. May none of us ever test this speed and gravity factoid. It's not one that they advertise in all the relentless Fourth of July car commercials.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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It has problems in its ability to be positive.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
Your assessment of the speed of movement in both automobiles and passengers is accurate and interesting. But someone needs to report on why guard rails fail. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Your assessment of the speed of movement in both automobiles and passengers is accurate and interesting. But someone needs to report on why guard rails fail. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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I guess it wasn?t drawn right.
