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founding of Jakeism

founding a new religion for a new era

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Comment from patricia dillon
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This is actually quite intriguing. I am not sure that Christianity, Buddhism and Islam are exactly a compatible mix, but I am struck by your emphasis on the social side of religion, which I am beginning to think is actually one of the most important sides. I think you may be on to something here.

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
    thanks a lot
reply by patricia dillon on 27-Jun-2024
    You're welcome
Comment from Pamusart
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Hi

This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!

I have a feeling your name is Jake.

I think this is a very interesting poem. A scenario like what you just described really could happen. Look at Trump. He has about half the country brainwashed. So, your movement is as good as his if not better. Because you are honest and he's not.

Here. I think you should say 'this' or 'it' rather than 'and'

" I publish a list of spiritual works

everyone should read

and forms a large part of my services."

Here? It should be 'a' instead of 'an'

"Then after an half hour

Here it should be 'off' rather than 'of'

" and it looked like this was going to take of"
alice

I liked your poem

Good job. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
    thanks as always
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
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I was not aware of this. I had no idea that Jakeism flourished across the West Coast and beyond. Nicely done in sharing the details on this in such an interesting and entertaining way.

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
    thanks a lot it was fun to imagine