The Fix
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "The Fix - Chapter Fourteen"A mother fights to prove her son's innocence
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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I can understand Joshua not wanting his mother to see him in prison, but there is something he's not telling her. I would be going insane if I was his mum. His sister isn't much help, either. On to the next one!! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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I can understand Joshua not wanting his mother to see him in prison, but there is something he's not telling her. I would be going insane if I was his mum. His sister isn't much help, either. On to the next one!! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 10-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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Thank you Sandra, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This reminds me of times I have also visited a prison to see a friend from years ago. I think you did a good job with details here. They sound realistic.
Little fix:
Look, I . . . we can continue to fight for you outside, but I need you tell me what the police said to you.
I think you just need to add the word 'to' where it says: but I need you....tell me what the police said to you.
So the word 'to' goes after but I need you.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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This reminds me of times I have also visited a prison to see a friend from years ago. I think you did a good job with details here. They sound realistic.
Little fix:
Look, I . . . we can continue to fight for you outside, but I need you tell me what the police said to you.
I think you just need to add the word 'to' where it says: but I need you....tell me what the police said to you.
So the word 'to' goes after but I need you.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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Thank you, I really appreciate you taking the time to review. I?m pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
I can feel Stacey's pain in this scene. As a mother, I can't imagine visiting my son in prison, seeing that he's been abused, and hearing him resign himself to his fate as opposed to fighting for his freedom. I would be beside myself.
A good chapter, Jacob.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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I can feel Stacey's pain in this scene. As a mother, I can't imagine visiting my son in prison, seeing that he's been abused, and hearing him resign himself to his fate as opposed to fighting for his freedom. I would be beside myself.
A good chapter, Jacob.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 23-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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Thank you Pam, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from BethShelby
He certainly doesn't seem innocent. I would think he would want his mother to continue to believe he is innocent but he seems to be trying to get her to stop believing that. I can't see the visit is accomplishing anything. I look forward to more.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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He certainly doesn't seem innocent. I would think he would want his mother to continue to believe he is innocent but he seems to be trying to get her to stop believing that. I can't see the visit is accomplishing anything. I look forward to more.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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Thank you Beth, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Daylily
It would be easy to give up if you are convicted of doing something that you absolutely did not do. The mood of this writing fits in perfectly with Joshua being angry and closed-mouth about his injury.
It is an unexpected twist to find him indicating that he is actually guilty. Of course, as a reader, I am sticking with what Stacey believes. Even though she is his mother, she honestly feels that her son is innocent.
This offers readers a good mystery to unravel and I am looking forward to reading more of the story, Jacob.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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It would be easy to give up if you are convicted of doing something that you absolutely did not do. The mood of this writing fits in perfectly with Joshua being angry and closed-mouth about his injury.
It is an unexpected twist to find him indicating that he is actually guilty. Of course, as a reader, I am sticking with what Stacey believes. Even though she is his mother, she honestly feels that her son is innocent.
This offers readers a good mystery to unravel and I am looking forward to reading more of the story, Jacob.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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Thank you, I?m pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Pamusart
Hi, Jacob
Is Joshua guilty? I guess we'll find out in future chapters
Stacey is certainly a dedicated mom. But, what mom wouldn't be?
The inmate code requires that even if somebody attacks you can't tell the guards. It you do so, you risk another beating or worse. You are considered a snitch. That makes you the prime target of other inmates
Here did you mean picks the car up?
"Rachel parks the car up."
Here. I think Rachel and I
"Rachel and me both stride through"
I enjoyed reading your story
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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Hi, Jacob
Is Joshua guilty? I guess we'll find out in future chapters
Stacey is certainly a dedicated mom. But, what mom wouldn't be?
The inmate code requires that even if somebody attacks you can't tell the guards. It you do so, you risk another beating or worse. You are considered a snitch. That makes you the prime target of other inmates
Here did you mean picks the car up?
"Rachel parks the car up."
Here. I think Rachel and I
"Rachel and me both stride through"
I enjoyed reading your story
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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Thank you, I?m really pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
The visit is well described, conveying excellent detail about the prison itself, plus Joshua's sheepish stance before the meeting. Do the inmates wear orange now? In my day, as a Probation Officer, they wore denim, in Britain, anyway. The meeting is clearly unproductive and, still, I have my suspicions about Rachel. Why doesn't she want her mother to be referring to him as innocent? Very strange!
Small edit: then you retracted that statement ( no need for 'on')
Oh dear, back to square one for Stacey.
Thanks for sharing, Jacob. Debbie
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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The visit is well described, conveying excellent detail about the prison itself, plus Joshua's sheepish stance before the meeting. Do the inmates wear orange now? In my day, as a Probation Officer, they wore denim, in Britain, anyway. The meeting is clearly unproductive and, still, I have my suspicions about Rachel. Why doesn't she want her mother to be referring to him as innocent? Very strange!
Small edit: then you retracted that statement ( no need for 'on')
Oh dear, back to square one for Stacey.
Thanks for sharing, Jacob. Debbie
Comment Written 21-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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Thank you Debbie. I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Joshua probably feels this is his fate and there's no hope. I'm sure Stacey won't give up hope. I really like this story and can't wait to read more. Thank you for sharing it with us.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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Joshua probably feels this is his fate and there's no hope. I'm sure Stacey won't give up hope. I really like this story and can't wait to read more. Thank you for sharing it with us.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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Thank you Barbara. I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.