Victor Wins
a 100-word story5 total reviews
Comment from PUPA
A very encouraging idea for one of the teams. I like it this short story.
Well written little story with a pun, leaving the reader with curiosity.
Good luck.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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A very encouraging idea for one of the teams. I like it this short story.
Well written little story with a pun, leaving the reader with curiosity.
Good luck.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Pupa
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi
This only makes sense if this is a practice game between boys on the same team. If it is not then Victor can't win every time someone scores.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a great weekend.
Joan
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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Hi
This only makes sense if this is a practice game between boys on the same team. If it is not then Victor can't win every time someone scores.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a great weekend.
Joan
Comment Written 22-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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Thanks, Joan. The contest has smashed me.
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You?re welcome, Bill.
Joan
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I'm not surprised Gene was confused. But all was made clear when we discover that Victor was the name of the coach and it was a phrase to use when one of them scored. A very logical answer at the end. Well done for incorporating your excellent story into this limited word form. enough to challenge anyone! Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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I'm not surprised Gene was confused. But all was made clear when we discover that Victor was the name of the coach and it was a phrase to use when one of them scored. A very logical answer at the end. Well done for incorporating your excellent story into this limited word form. enough to challenge anyone! Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 21-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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It got my vote.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the 100 Word Story writing prompt. This is a cute story done very well in flash fiction format. It has a humorous ending that brought a smile. I think I may have found a typo but not sure.
****what must have the end zone.***** (there seems to be a word missing in this sentence. please check it out and if you add a word please don't forget to remove a word elsewhere to keep the 100 word count.
Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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An excellent entry for the 100 Word Story writing prompt. This is a cute story done very well in flash fiction format. It has a humorous ending that brought a smile. I think I may have found a typo but not sure.
****what must have the end zone.***** (there seems to be a word missing in this sentence. please check it out and if you add a word please don't forget to remove a word elsewhere to keep the 100 word count.
Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 21-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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Added 'been' and removed 'passed'.
Comment from jessizero
This was a fun and entertaining one hundred word story for the writing prompt. I loved that the kids yelled "Victor wins" until he didn't. LOL. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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This was a fun and entertaining one hundred word story for the writing prompt. I loved that the kids yelled "Victor wins" until he didn't. LOL. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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Thanks, Jessizero