Willing Hearts
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "Chapter 13 C"Solve a crime and fall in love at the same time?
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Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I read out of order, but I will return and get all I missed when I get done moving. I am still not through moving right now. I will be looking in from time to time until I am settled. I miss being here and all the friendship. Good work here. Karen
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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I read out of order, but I will return and get all I missed when I get done moving. I am still not through moving right now. I will be looking in from time to time until I am settled. I miss being here and all the friendship. Good work here. Karen
Comment Written 22-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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I know moving is hard. Now retired, but when my husband was active Army, we moved at least every three years, a few times once a year. I hate moving. Thank you for this kind review.
A FanStory friend would PM upset when their contest entry was DQ'ed, so I've started reading the entry rules as I reviewed trying to help before the actual voting.
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Thanks for your help and kind words. :-)
Comment from Jacob1395
I could sense the fear of what happens after Sami is released, knowing they can't allow her to walk back into the hands of Big T, and it seems that there might be others who would be willing to hand her over for money. An excellent, tense chapter Barbara, I really enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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I could sense the fear of what happens after Sami is released, knowing they can't allow her to walk back into the hands of Big T, and it seems that there might be others who would be willing to hand her over for money. An excellent, tense chapter Barbara, I really enjoyed it.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
You did get the kiss right... I'm still recuperating lol. That was a very romantic kiss.
I was hoping Noah and Sami get married because the obviously care about each other but I don't know if that would keep her safe all the time. The other way is to take Mr t out or put him in jail for a long time. But what do I know.
I look forward to the next chapter. Well done.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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You did get the kiss right... I'm still recuperating lol. That was a very romantic kiss.
I was hoping Noah and Sami get married because the obviously care about each other but I don't know if that would keep her safe all the time. The other way is to take Mr t out or put him in jail for a long time. But what do I know.
I look forward to the next chapter. Well done.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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Thank you for the comment on the kiss. I appreciate it. I wanted it steamy. No good romance ends without a marriage for a promise of a marriage. We'll see. LOL
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Seems Noah's affections for Sami at first came across as having been put on all along, just part of doing his job.
Noah is correct, Big T can not be allowed to get his hands on Sami at any cost. Of course, money does talk.
Can not blame Sami for being mad about what she heard through the vent.
Believe Sami may vacate Noah, and his safe house, without his being aware of her sudden departure.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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Seems Noah's affections for Sami at first came across as having been put on all along, just part of doing his job.
Noah is correct, Big T can not be allowed to get his hands on Sami at any cost. Of course, money does talk.
Can not blame Sami for being mad about what she heard through the vent.
Believe Sami may vacate Noah, and his safe house, without his being aware of her sudden departure.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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That would be interesting. I hadn't thought of Sami leaving. HMMM, thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
What a kiss that was!! Wow! Now there can be no hiding their feelings from each other. That was better than words could say, and there is no going back now! I can't wait to read the next part. But they still have to work out how they can keep Sami from Big T! I can only think of one way, Noah will have to marry her! :)) Well done, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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What a kiss that was!! Wow! Now there can be no hiding their feelings from each other. That was better than words could say, and there is no going back now! I can't wait to read the next part. But they still have to work out how they can keep Sami from Big T! I can only think of one way, Noah will have to marry her! :)) Well done, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 19-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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LOL We'll soon find out what happens. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Daylily
That was some kiss. It looks like true love is making a very strong showing. Excellent chapter, Barbara!
notes:
re: Sami had dealt out the cards for a Solitaire game, before Noah's voice was heard through the ceiling vents, -- This would be much stronger written in the present tense.
Suggestion:
Noah's voice came through the ceiling vents as Sami dealt out cards for a Solitaire game. "When I introduced...............
Also, this part: From the doorway, Sami said,
Suggestion:
Sami spoke from the doorway. "So did Noah......
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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That was some kiss. It looks like true love is making a very strong showing. Excellent chapter, Barbara!
notes:
re: Sami had dealt out the cards for a Solitaire game, before Noah's voice was heard through the ceiling vents, -- This would be much stronger written in the present tense.
Suggestion:
Noah's voice came through the ceiling vents as Sami dealt out cards for a Solitaire game. "When I introduced...............
Also, this part: From the doorway, Sami said,
Suggestion:
Sami spoke from the doorway. "So did Noah......
Comment Written 19-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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I worry about started too many sentences with their names, so try to vary them. I liked your suggestions and made the changes. Thank you.
Comment from Sanku
This was an emotional milestone for Sammy and she very badly needed it .So did Noah. It is sad that she has to be under threat always. I am sure Noah will work out something...
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2024
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This was an emotional milestone for Sammy and she very badly needed it .So did Noah. It is sad that she has to be under threat always. I am sure Noah will work out something...
Comment Written 18-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from lyenochka
Sounds like Sami and Noah have resolved the misunderstanding of what was overheard and they seem to be confident in the sincerity of their love for one another. I know that in their suppressed passionate interaction, nothing else exists, but like to know what Jasper was doing in these times. Did he make it into the bedroom okay?
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2024
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Sounds like Sami and Noah have resolved the misunderstanding of what was overheard and they seem to be confident in the sincerity of their love for one another. I know that in their suppressed passionate interaction, nothing else exists, but like to know what Jasper was doing in these times. Did he make it into the bedroom okay?
Comment Written 18-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2024
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He was probably playing in the pond. LOL You make a good point, I need to add that. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from tfawcus
Great kiss! Worth a thousand words. I wonder if it might cool Sami's temperament some and make Noah a little more pliant. We shall see!
Well written.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2024
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Great kiss! Worth a thousand words. I wonder if it might cool Sami's temperament some and make Noah a little more pliant. We shall see!
Well written.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Another great chapter in Sami's saga. Slowly this love story is surfacing. Only you know what's next
Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2024
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Another great chapter in Sami's saga. Slowly this love story is surfacing. Only you know what's next
Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.